Swallowing the Solar System

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Jayaprakash Satyamurthy

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I was chatting with my friend Kanika and we started imagining what it would be like to eat planets...


Swallowing the Solar System


Mercury was fiery but with a trace of mint


Venus was sly and spicy, slippery and subtle


The Earth melted in my mouth in a confusion of flavours


Mars sobered me with ascetic blandness


The asteroid belt was crunchy but unsalted


Jupiter was immense and splendid; I was left bloated with grandiose gases


Saturn was much the same but thoughtfully ringed with soothing antacids


Uranus and Neptune were cold and hard but with deep veins of taste and aroma in their centres


Which left me with Pluto, delectable desert on my dish


But greedy now I sail forth to the Oort


To consume the comets in their cradles


Perhaps when I am done I shall plunge back to the centre for a last fiery snack





-for K-
 
What wonderful imagery! I could almost imagine calling out for salt for the asteroid belt!

It also reminds me of some creativity exercises that I was reading about yesterday. I'll have to find the link to post it here for you writer types.
 
That was really cool, knivesout. Something I never would have thought of. It's very much like hearing colors or seeing music - a very different way of perceiving what we usually think about in much different terms.
 
That's a good suggestion - I do believe that a simpler word is usually the better option, but I'm currently toying with using 'piquant' in the first instance. Does that make sense?
 
I wouldn't rate piquant as a erader-friendly term. :)

Hot is a little bland I guess - simply because of it's relative position to "firey" - however, I'm sure there's something more descriptive in the thesasaurus. :)
 
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