just thought u might like........

[Jessa]

hey guys,

in school we're doing a poetry and art comp, and i have written 2 poems. i thought they were 2 good to waste so i thought i would show u lot.

Freedom, by Jessica Hill

Swish. Swish-swish. The flapling of a butterfly's wings

The sound growing fainter and fainter as it's strenght wanes, the bright symmetrical patterns almost seem to fade.
I reach into the jar and lift the helpless insect out, its only means of escape already extinguished.
I feel the velvety softness of it's wings, knowing the butterfly has only moments to live.

Swish......swish....swish.....s..w..i..s..h..

The final movements, and i stare at the lifeless form in my hand.
My face set in stone but my eyes betray my feelings of despair.
How could i have let one of Gods creatures die?
I let the butteryfly fall to the floor and i turn my back. There is nothing i can do now.
It's soul is free.


and Freedom 2 by Jessica Hill.


A faint sheen of yellow and orange is cast over my face as i sit and watch the sun, risingfrom the misty depths of the sea, climbing its way into the sky.

The moon is growing fainter and fainter. It is fighting a losing battle, but it is one that goes on every dawn.
As the sun rises higher and higher, i wonder if it will ever be free?



What do u think?

 

[Jessa]

any body like?

 

[jsc]

They are good, Jessa. And express your feelings well. I like the idea of the sun escaping.... but... we would never be the same...

I am going to try and move this to the original fiction section!

 

[Jessa]

didn't know there was an original fiction section.

but thanxs jsc:smile:

 

[DCBastien]

yes I liked them very much, Jessa! Keep it up

 

[Jessa]

will do skip, thanxs

 

[Texane]

and butterflies only live approximately 2 weeks. . .

you should visit the butterfly pyramid in Houston. It is incredibly beautiful.

and thank you for the two gifts. :kisses:

 

[Jessa]

Originally posted by Texane
and butterflies only live approximately 2 weeks. . .

you should visit the butterfly pyramid in Houston. It is incredibly beautiful.

and thank you for the two gifts. :kisses:

don't live in america, can't visit i would if i lived in america, and if i was older but i am also only 13

 

[Texane]

The butterfly pyramid

is a huge glass structure with the proper humidity for most butterflies. It looks like a jungle-type area; green with many trees. Sidewalks travel inside of the pyramid for the humans (!) to see them.

Butterfly cocoons are purchased from all areas of the world, which are then hung inside the pyramid along the walls on strings. They open within the pyramid. Some of the butterflies are incredibly large. You are told to wear either blue or red (blue, I think) clothing/shirts for a better chance of butterflies lighting upon you (I don't know the background of the color blue and butterflies).

It is a truly beautiful exhibit.

 

[Dave]

Good Poems Jessa

Jessa, we have Butterfly Farms over here too, though that one sounds like it's a huge one. I don't know where you live, but there is one at Syon House near Twickenham, London (where the Rugby is played) http://www.butterflies.org.uk/

Another one is at Plashet Park, Shrewsbury Road, Forest Gate, London E7. There is also one on Jersey, probably more!

 

[Asmiley]

Awesome Poems Jessa! *appluase* Bravo!Bravo! Encore Encore!

They gave me a warm soft feeling to read them thanks.

 

[Jessa]

thanxs guys:rolly2:

 

[Texane]

Consider participating in the fanfic round robins (I know; I love those!). You get to see how other fanficers (and the rest of us) write, and what other styles look like.

 

[Jessa]

Originally posted by Texane
Consider participating in the fanfic round robins (I know; I love those!). You get to see how other fanficers (and the rest of us) write, and what other styles look like.

i already do, well in the insane Stargate ones ne wayz, was thinking of starting one myself

 

[Asmiley]

thinking of reviving a couple of them myself.

 

[Highlander II]

i'm beign slow --

the poems were very good!

i think there are Round Robin's in most of the other sections - even the mini-forums are starting some ----

so - pick a fandom, and pic a fic or start one of your own!!

or - write an impromtu - like i do -----

 

[Legolas]

Great poems Jessa! I wrote one ages ago that was published in a book called 'A Secret Place'

Has anyone read it? If you want me to write it, i will...

 

[Jessa]

do write legolas!