Family (fanfiction story)

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Aset

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Ok, this is a finished one...
takes place during season 3, with spoilers, so don't read if you don't want to know what's to come...
This story isn't bèta-ed yet, so sorry for mistakes...
Reviews are, as always, really appreciated!

:wave: Aset :wave:
 

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Here's part three...
 

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and on to part 4...
 

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part 5... (we're nearly there...)
 

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and here's part 5!!! the last part, which leaves me to thank you for reading (and for the reviews I'll be getting ;o) )

:wave: Aset :wave:
 

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Aset, i'd like to start by saying well done. :D That seems like it took an ENORMOUS amount of time and effort, especially when English isn't even your first language, and you needed worry about errors there weren't that many.

Also i really liked the idea of the story and the fact that Wes has a key part in bringing Conner back :D. It was nice to see a crossover as well. Realistically after all that's happened they should meet to exchange ideas.

However maybe the romance was a little strong (this may just be my opinion) but i think that Cordy and Angel would be a little more restrained. It was sweet though.

And one final thing: This is a family forum, we do have some young adults here and i think it may be a good idea if you editted some of the language. For example when Buffy and Cordy are arguing (in chapter 2, i think)

Overall, i really liked it. Once again, well done and I can't wait to read the next one. :D
 
Hi!!

Thanks for the review, Maria!!

And I'll change the language when I find the time (still 1 more exam, and then I'm on a holiday... But I'll try to change it as soon as possible!)

Greets,

:wave: Aset :wave:
 
Maria, I can assure you it took Aset some time to write this story! Most of the time she was writing during class (must be my bad influence) but it ended up into a beautiful story!!

Falcon Horus ;)
 
Thank you, Horus!

lol, bad influence!!! Noooot!!!
But I promise I won't write that much during class again, if you promise the same!!!!

Glad you liked it all!!

:wave: Aset :wave:
 
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