McMurphy
Apostate Against the Eloi
I have just stumbled onto a very old folder containing school work that I did as a child. For a good laugh, I thought I would share one particular science fiction story I had written when I was in, I believe, fifth grade. Below is exactly how I had found it, fragmented sentences, blatant character rip-offs, incoherent thought, misspellings, and all. Enjoy! *L*
Also, it would be an interesting and (maybe even) hilarious writing exercise if we all wrote a short piece of fiction that utilizes the events and characters of the following child's tale in some fashion. I have always been fascinated by how some of the greatest literature was inspired by the humblest sources. Either way, I hope you get a good chuckle out of it.
Doom's Plan
Well we better start at the beginning. There was a man that did very well in college, in fact, he was number one at every subject he took. His name was Vector Von Doom. Why I say was is ---well you'll see. He had a castle in a unnamed town in Eglantine. Why it was unnamed? Because he owned it (like a king). He thought with his incredible technology he would succeed. Well he was wrong. "Heroes" stopped him. Anyway onto the story.
It begun at his castle right after he finished a "project". It, believe or not, was a time machine. He finished further testing before he attached it to his suit. Like a knight's suit but far more invariable. After pushing right buttons for the right year there was huge and eye-blinding a flash of light, then Dr. Doom has vanished from time.
Now he was exposed for a split-second to the ciruts of time. Not like ciruts, but like conslaty moving energy. Very soon there was another flash of light but this time it was in the year 1251. The medeival times.
A week later the news of Doom's arrival swept throgh England like wild fire. Of course they didn't know who he was but soon they'll find out. Doom told them he was going to become the ruler of England. The kings of England is a impostor on them so natural the kings' people started a plan to fight Doom. They insisted to have a old and wise sorcerer to be the leader in the battle. They told hiim abou tthe impostor and he agreed. This sorcerer name was Zealot. Zealot's past is unkown. But in his past he found a crystal ball. He refuses to tell anyone about his past.
Now it's time to proceed with the plan. A plan that will be the disposal of Doom. The first step was to have everyone that wasn't going to help was to be put in a underground place for protection against Doom's technology. He gave little extra technology but not much. The second step was to distroy all of Doom's knights. Which was really easy with working with magic.
Very thing moved smoothly in the plan but lets see how the people that is underground is doing. They were all in suspense was all most driving them crazy.
Dr. Doom threat that if they did not surrender, he would kill most plant life and people with radition. They thought no-one would die if they people were underground. So they didn't surrender, so he proceeded with the threat.
Now Zealot and the knights were all ready to impose into the castle. All Doom does is smile. They turned around to see what he was smiling at. It was a sorcerer-like creature and he banished Zealot's power before he could do anything and the strange creature disappeared. So Zealot and his knights lost but Zealot didn't die. Far from Doom's castle two heros that defeated Doom before fell into a portal that Doom created. The fight is far from over and Doom doesn't suspect a thing.
Also, it would be an interesting and (maybe even) hilarious writing exercise if we all wrote a short piece of fiction that utilizes the events and characters of the following child's tale in some fashion. I have always been fascinated by how some of the greatest literature was inspired by the humblest sources. Either way, I hope you get a good chuckle out of it.
Doom's Plan
Well we better start at the beginning. There was a man that did very well in college, in fact, he was number one at every subject he took. His name was Vector Von Doom. Why I say was is ---well you'll see. He had a castle in a unnamed town in Eglantine. Why it was unnamed? Because he owned it (like a king). He thought with his incredible technology he would succeed. Well he was wrong. "Heroes" stopped him. Anyway onto the story.
It begun at his castle right after he finished a "project". It, believe or not, was a time machine. He finished further testing before he attached it to his suit. Like a knight's suit but far more invariable. After pushing right buttons for the right year there was huge and eye-blinding a flash of light, then Dr. Doom has vanished from time.
Now he was exposed for a split-second to the ciruts of time. Not like ciruts, but like conslaty moving energy. Very soon there was another flash of light but this time it was in the year 1251. The medeival times.
A week later the news of Doom's arrival swept throgh England like wild fire. Of course they didn't know who he was but soon they'll find out. Doom told them he was going to become the ruler of England. The kings of England is a impostor on them so natural the kings' people started a plan to fight Doom. They insisted to have a old and wise sorcerer to be the leader in the battle. They told hiim abou tthe impostor and he agreed. This sorcerer name was Zealot. Zealot's past is unkown. But in his past he found a crystal ball. He refuses to tell anyone about his past.
Now it's time to proceed with the plan. A plan that will be the disposal of Doom. The first step was to have everyone that wasn't going to help was to be put in a underground place for protection against Doom's technology. He gave little extra technology but not much. The second step was to distroy all of Doom's knights. Which was really easy with working with magic.
Very thing moved smoothly in the plan but lets see how the people that is underground is doing. They were all in suspense was all most driving them crazy.
Dr. Doom threat that if they did not surrender, he would kill most plant life and people with radition. They thought no-one would die if they people were underground. So they didn't surrender, so he proceeded with the threat.
Now Zealot and the knights were all ready to impose into the castle. All Doom does is smile. They turned around to see what he was smiling at. It was a sorcerer-like creature and he banished Zealot's power before he could do anything and the strange creature disappeared. So Zealot and his knights lost but Zealot didn't die. Far from Doom's castle two heros that defeated Doom before fell into a portal that Doom created. The fight is far from over and Doom doesn't suspect a thing.
If this had been one of the entries in the writing contest I helped judge a couple of times for the local school district, you'd have gotten extra points for that.
