A little help, please?

ray gower

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For the last few weeks I have been having a slight problem. Every time I sit at the old keyboard to do something useful or enjoyable I find my mind being driven towards the problem below.

I do not know where it is going, should go, or even why. But it does feel like a story that ought to be written and I'm not sure how to make it one (or a better one) in place of a series of short essays.

Lots of questions spring up:
How can I personalise a race that lives as and for a community?
Get people to empathise with them?

Or am I trying to write above my self admitted limited abilities and leave it as an exercise and forget all about it?

Thoughts, ideas, opinions and red crayon welcomed.
 
The Coming

It was a young planet, barely 350 million years old. The atmosphere, high in Carbon Dioxide, was weak, harsh, offering little protection from a young sun, white with heat as it blossomed. Giant storms swirled, lacing the sky, thunder claps shaking the rocks into slides of debris. Sheets of lightening, linked earth to sky in pyrotechnic displays of electric light.

On the surface, frequent volcanoes belched and spewed their thick fog of yellow sulphur and molten rock high into the air, a continuous torrent, turning the rains that fell into acids that trickled back into fledgling oceans.

Into this thick maelstrom of activity a meteorite sped, not a massive piece of planet shattering junk, like many of those formed in the cataclysmic creation of this new solar system, but one of the smaller and older rocks formed by the death throes of another, older, world.

Briefly it glowed in the friction, until many thousands of metres above the surface it split and from its hollow shell hundreds of cocoons the size of a child's fist emerged. The cocoons continued their uncontrolled descent spreading as they were caught in the gales.

Many landed in water, drowning their small occupants as they were crushed in ocean depths. Others struck prommetry's of rock, shattering instantly, destroying their precious cargo of fledgling life before they could seek shelter. Yet out of the carnage, one struck soft earth, burying itself a metre below the surface before splitting open.

Perhaps a day later, from out of the wreckage a young queen, mother to countless millions of generations to come, crawled. Blind and with limbs designed for running over surface, she began to dig deeper, dragging the remains of the cocoon behind her, anxious to find more protection for her own precious cargo from the rigours of the surface.

Many hours later she found her spot, nestled under a shelf of rock. The earth was warm and damp, yet it had filtered away much of the impurities in the water. Here, with infinite care, she formed a cavern, carefully laying spores over its surface. Those spores would feed and protect the millions who would follow her.

Satisfied that her labours would bear fruit, the queen settled to yet another task, the laying of seven eggs.

It was her final act. Her sacrifice.

Exhausted, she settled beside her eggs and died, a short life of eight days on a world without time after thousands of years of gestating in a cocoon travelling in timeless space. The end of a race, millenniums of years old and the beginning of another that might grow and flourish, carrying the genetic memories of what had come before.

That first two of the new generation emerged from their nest many days later. They also had their duties encoded into their genetic make-up, driving them in their goal. They began to tend the growing forest of fungus, gently teasing away the dead to give more room for the living. They chewed the dead husk of the queen in their small mandibles, mixing it with the detritus of fungus, creating compost to feed back into their small farm.

From the living plants they took a little sap to feed themselves. From their own bodies they span a fine silk with which they fashioned silken bags light and strong, to contain more sap when harvesting began.

The air in their cave was better now. The fungus, locked in its own constant battle against hostile elements, was producing live preserving nitrogen and oxygen as by-products of survival, unconsciously aiding those solitary workers that ceaselessly tended them.

Two more eggs hatched, adding to the burdens of the workers. Theses two newcomers task in this new society was different. They would be larger, stronger. But new born they were helpless, unable to lift their grotesquely large heads or even raise the strength to stand on powerfully broad legs. Until they could, they were fed by the two tireless farmers, taking on the role of nurse, carrying their sacks of sap and returning to the farm, sacks depleted and refilled with bodily waste, more compost.

Once strong enough the two new workers launched upon their allotted task; they began to carve into the walls, ceilings and floors of the cave, creating new caverns and interlinking tunnels. The walls of these excavations were lined as they worked. A mixture of stone and saliva coated them, making them stronger and waterproof.

At first their work appeared uncoordinated, mindless, each working in their own preferred direction until the fifth and sixth eggs hatched.

From the first of these came a smaller creature, it automatically took the task of feeding the two industrious miners, carefully selecting sacks of unadulterated saps, blending them with the care of the finest whisky maker to provide exactly the right vintage for their needs. Nurse and master chef.

The sixth was a male. No larger than the farmers, he would be Her consort, a king in name only. In future generations he would need the wings he was born with; to compete with others of his sex and nature in an aerial battle to the death for Her affections. Here, without competition, they were a nuisance, so they were shed, dragged from his body by the nurse to be recycled.

Upon his six legs, the King performed his first task. He examined the scrapings of the two miners, brushing the walls with antennae. Those walls were now offering a faint luminance from lichen finding a home, bringing a ghostly light that lit nothing to a dark world. Satisfied the monarch gave the first command to be received in this otherwise monastic order, a mixture of clicks and dance macabre, the bodies of the miners his floor.

Orders given, the miners returned to work, their goal more focussed, driving a new tunnel horizontally out from their workings. From this tunnel they prepared a new cavern with infinite care. The walls were lined as before, but the floor was left bare a scalloped dais raised in the centre; the royal bed chamber, a place of comfort where She would spend the rest of her life.

It was to this chamber that the King guided his maiden, when she emerged and performed his second and last task, the mating. He was too exhausted to object when she crushed his body under her huge girth.

As his body was dragged from the chamber, She turned her thoughts to her own duty, the production of the first eggs. There was to be no break in the continuity of the line now: Workers must be produced to replace the fast ageing first generation. New types produced to perform specific functions. A replacement Queen and consorts to replace herself when her time came, even to extend the empire.

Thus continued the colony, for a thousand generations, slowly growing, enlarging its underground caverns to house an increasing population.
 
Stage 2

A rock stirred and trembled as some force tested its size and weight, then rolled away. The space it vacated was replaced at first by two blades, part shovel, part shovel. The owner of these two tools appeared shortly afterwards, a miner.

Unable to blink or squint in the strong light with its two compound eyes, designed for the gloomy glow below ground, it paused antennae waving, tasting the fresh air, taking in the new surrounds.

It was twilight, a thin yellow mist created greenish shadows from the setting sun's rays. The violent storms of years ago had gone for the time being, replaced with a breeze that gently stirred brackens, this new worlds first vegetation, yielding for the first time the peaceful noise of rustling leaves.

The smoky volcanoes still pumped their noxious fumes into the skies, but they were less violent now. Some had simply blown themselves inside out, dying in a final cataclysmic contortion of fire and rock. Others had settled into grumbling inaction.

Amidst this uneasy truce between earth and sky the first Rishka finally emerged on to the surface of this new world. Following him came a puff of warm air, then a second and third Rishka, each preceded by a puff of warm and stale air.

It was these puffs of air that was the cause of the desire to reach the surface. The product of five million creatures. The colony measured more than a kilometre across and despite opening more and more chambers to the ever important fungus they could no longer support the numbers with breathable air. It was time for change.

30 Metres away a second tunnel opened, then a third and fourth, until forty such new vents had been opened across the width and breadth of the colony below, each disgorging a small party of Rishka. They milled uncertainly in this new and strange environment, blinded by the light of the dying day, awaiting instructions.

Instruction came. From the new tunnels appeared Nurreks, nurses, pushing their larger brethren away from the entrances into a rough perimeter. With fussy patience they cleared the surrounds of litter. Only when satisfied did they allow the royal parties to emerge.

From 40 tunnels emerged 40 fledgling Princess Royal, each chased by a gaggle of suitors. Each Princess was heavily laden, a silk bag trapped behind her rear legs. Each bag bore the precious spores of fungus that might feed her new colony.

The Nurreks fell upon them all. Princesses Royal or suitor it made no difference to the Nurreks, like nervous trainers with prize pugilists they cleaned and preened their charges, stretching and flexing gossamer thin wings.

The mass launched in a flurry of buzzing wings, leading the Royal princess, circling her as she laboriously gained height. Without warning she struck out in a direction, her multi-faceted eyes had picked up an objective, a spot for her to create new colony.

It was the start of the trial, a trial of gladiatorial knights, of aerial combat and tactics.

The leading drones clashed, bodies coming together, limbs and mandibles seeking their opponents weakest point, an eye, a wing, even the joints between head and thorax. They wrapped legs around each other, stabbing and snapping, ignoring their collective plight as they plummeted to the ground.

The second and larger group were slower and more thoughtful in their tactics. They jostled for height and position over their fellows, then swooped. Even a glancing blow on hard working wings would be enough to send their prey spiralling to the ground. But a miss left them open to similar attack from above as they laboured to gain altitude again.

Amidst the swirling bodies there was one that became an expert. He patiently built up his altitude and position, ignoring targets of opportunity as they floundered from their near misses, instead he stalked his prey. The ones that were better at targeting. The others would fail sooner or later, either as victims or to the exhaustion that was even now setting in.

He was ready now. The drone he had been stalking for some minutes was strong and successful, it had beaten three opponents while being stalked. But the drone invariably hesitated after a strike, flying a straight line, it would be a mistake that would cost dearly.

He watched as the drone swooped again, then furled his wings carefully above his back and dropped like a stone towards his target, small twists of wings providing course corrections. At the same time he brought his legs together into a spear point.

The unsuspecting drone struck his target, legs ripping through through the filmy thin wings of its victim, then flew on, trying to remove the debris from its legs. It was struck hard in the thorax by a spear point of legs, ripping away the small rack of muscles that powered the wings.

It fell, twisting desperately as it tried to gain control of wings that no longer functioned, while he, the victorious, changed the stoop into a twisting dive then finally into a slow climb, looking for his target.

Only then did he realise that the opposition had all but disappeared. More than a thousand metres ahead there was the Princess Royal, flying her steadfast route. He forgot about the need to gain height, catching her was the only goal now. He had proven his worth in combat, vanquishing all comers, now he would take his place as her consort.

He was within 10 metres of her when he felt another presence. He dived aside as a body rushed past, other wings brushing his own. Not all of his enemy had been vanquished. Another more wilily candidate had survived the contest by skirting the whole swirling mass.

Avoiding combat the newcomer was fresher than he, but less experienced. It was struggling to regain control from the dive. He dived after it, no time to gain height for a cautious stalk, the Princess was landing. Bodies came together in a crunching blow that had both tumbling the last three metres to stoney ground.

From the wreckage one body managed to crawl into the air again. Tired and broken wings carried it in erratic circular flight to where she had landed. He was victorious, his enemy had crashed badly, smashing those so delicate lenses and wings, but there was little in victory parades, simply a gentle touching of antennae with his new mate. Now there was serious work to do, to build a new colony.
 

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