Anyone interested in reading a scifi/thriller movie script?

[Scylla]

I've recently finished my first english movie script called "Demo" and I need some competent feedback. Can someone help me out with correcting any possible errors? Someone english native, of course. I spent a lot of time with the damn thing and I really want it to be perfect. Well, as much as it could be. And, of course, I'm open to any other kind of comments.