The Lost Land of Mysticadia. plotting stages. Rough draft included.

[Enadil Moonweaver]

Just when you though you scared me away I came back. I'm taking a break from Legacy right now and am plotting this one out.

All I got right now is that its about a girl named Lyra Madifwen. She apparently lives alone.


This is what I have for the rough draft.


Episode one: An Unusual Day.

Lyra Madifwen stood near the wooden archway of the door to her living room she yawned. Her normally flat mousy brown hair stood up in all places as she rubbed her hazel eyes and blinked away the sleep dust from the previous night. Her cotton sheath clung and went to her knees. The rays of light that peeked in from the small window just above the small iron stove in her small cottage hadn‘t reached the floorboards she walked on. Just then, she saw something small shimmering in the light given off by the window. She went to take a closer look. Her breath refused to move from her throat as she stared at a small being. The being fell on to the stove and stumbled around shaking her head,

“Oh my goodness,” She said flustered and then asked “How did I end up here?”

The being as she looked around at her new surroundings. Finally getting her bearings she dusted off her brown leather outfit consisting of a small leather vest over a midriff shirt, she also wore a brown thigh length skirt.

 

[Michael01]

As far as your plotting goes, I think you might be on to something interesting. When you've fleshed out the details I'd like to see more.

Since this is a draft you probably plan to do some editing later anyway, so I won't mention the grammar and technical errors I see--unless that's what you're looking for in a critique. On the other hand, I know I don't always see the problems in my own work and it helps to have someone impartial scrutinize it occasionally.

Do you already have an idea where you want go with this? I must confess that I'm curious (cause I'm a sucker for most fantasy).

 

[Enadil Moonweaver]

I do have a basic plot for what I want so far. My problem, is actually getting inspired to write it was if I was the character.


Plot Summary.
Lyra Madifwen was your average sleepy citizen of Kyrstania until she stumbled upon a creature, well one could say the creature breezed into Lyra’s home by mistake. This creature was a Molodwen, a fairy race of the forbidden land. Lyra at that point in time didn’t know this creature was from Mysticadia. So when the Molodwen asked for help that she herself would have to set foot into this land. Even after Lyra offers to help the Molodwen things proved dire when a neighbor happened to see the Molodwen through Lyra’s window. The neighbor then informed the Kyrstania Order of Magic to let them know that there is a beast from Mysticadia on the loose. When the priests from the order rush in to destroy the Molodwen, Lyra grabs the Molodwen and rushes out and hides in the forest. Lyra decides it would be best to wait and travel at night to avoid being seen.

They travel under the cover of darkness but is it enough to keep them from being seen? As luck would have they would meet individuals some willing to help some not so willing to help a fugitive runaway and a “fearsome“ Mysticadia beast.

Plot checklist for chapter one.
1. Have Lyra be in her home when the Molodwen arrives.
2. Have the Molodwen explain why they are there.
3. Have a conversation between Lyra and the Molodwen.
4. Lyra must help the Molodwen.
5. Get Lyra and the Molodwen safely to Mysticadia


Cast of Characters
Lyra Madifwen
Moss
Alphonse Torrida
Fayette
Priestess Alorna
Princess Saphira

 

[Culhwch]

The idea of a chapter checklist is an intriguing one, and something I've not ever seen before. I usually just have a general idea where the story is headed, and what should probably happen in a given chapter, and launch into it. I've never been one for detailed planning, but I can certainly see how this would be helpful in moving the story forward. Or even retrospectively, working backwards to make sure that everything makes sense at the end.

 

[ice.monkey]

Enadil, I think you tried posting this in a writing forum as well, didn't you?

I think I saw it there but didn't get round to critiquing it then. Sorry. As I saw it here also, I thought I'd jump in! I don't think you gave enough with the initial post for a useful critique to be made, so maybe a bit more. If you could also let us know whether you've done any editing yourself that'd be helpful.

I like that you've taken time to do a plot summary. I use treatments myself and find them very useful to firstly be able to get all my ideas down fast, and the plot roughly worked out. I then work on the treatment before getting down to the serious writing!

I like the concept you've got here. Lyra helping a mystical being. Have you got any more of the plot established beyone Chapter 1?

My problem, is actually getting inspired to write it was if I was the character.

Does this mean you want to write this in the first person? What you've got so far obviously hasn't been written that way.

Let us know.