Ranmaro series...

[magician2magici]

greetings everyone,
how are you all ??

i've read so many threads here , and came to the fact that you can help me at my small problem

i'm an egyptian young auther , not read so much , have created Ranmaro series , which have good reputation at my region ,

so i began to think about worlwide reputation , which cannot be achieved with any possibility that my idea has been written about before some where else , so i came to you to tell me , is this idea had been used before or not ??

the whole series depends on the idea of extra-ordinary powers , our world huamns are subdevided in it into normal ones , carrying the name shomintieki , and people with abnormal powers , carrying the name beto-yo , the beto-yo people are magicians , vampires , mere wolves ,

at my story , vampires and mere wolves are quite different from what we needed to know , to have more big picture to my fantasy world , the beto-yo came from another world , named ko-yo , in which they used to live , but they eft it in mysterious events , and came to normal earth , where they lived at hidden villages , hidden at the sky , protected by shields , the beto-yo people can easily go inside ko-yo world easily by using ko-yo shrine , and a family specialized at this matter , they take care of the procedure by they gifted abilities , so they named ko-yo families..

the world of ko-yo has its own people , they are so strong magic creatures , controls over the world of ko-yo and the fates of beto-yo people..

back agian to our world , where the two species used to live together , but ko-yo people made conflicts between beto-yo , so wars started to occur , so big war , occured secretly at world of ko-to , so results came of creation of three big nations , japanese , egyptian , and lastly transelvian nations , each controls one of the continent ..

time passed , the three nations became ruined , their borders only remained , and till nowadays , when a boy name - Ranmaro - was at japan , everything changed..

Ranmaro , an ordinary boy , lived at japan with his grand father , who was cruel upon him , although Ranmaro's parents are dead , one night Ranmaro wake up and escaped an attempt of murder by strange man , magician was ,by the help of Sakura , whom he didn't know before , she was the town's champion at bow contests..
she escaped from fear before he really know her name , only knows her shape , then he decided to escape fearing from revenge of that mysterious guy fellows , he went to his parents graves , where he met one of their friend , he told him his story , his reality , of being a magician , and his parents were great ones , who defended their hidden village against evil , butone day their were a traitor , who killed his parents , ruined his villaged and helped their enemies to destroy his village , this traitoe , this person , was himself Ranmaro , so he was deserted from the magical and the whole beto-yo worlde , lept at his grand father place without knowing his true identity...

this incident happened 14 years before that meeting , Ranmaro is only 15 , so how can child like him not able to say anything to do such evil thing ? so Ranmaro didn't believe his makings , and decided to search for the truth

at part one of Ranmaro series , he searches for truth , facing awhole community alone that carries grudge over him , knowing nothing about his powers , great risk , great work , great adventures ..

so
after this small samarry
what do you think first of this novel ?
then is it a repeated idea or new ??

thsnks,,
regards..

el-saher>>

 

[Spectrum]

greetings everyone,
how are you all ??

Hi. I'm fine, how are you?

Ranmaro , an ordinary boy , lived at japan with his grand father , who was cruel upon him , although Ranmaro's parents are dead , one night Ranmaro wake up and escaped an attempt of murder by strange man , magician was ,by the help of Sakura , whom he didn't know before , she was the town's champion at bow contests..
she escaped from fear before he really know her name , only knows her shape , then he decided to escape fearing from revenge of that mysterious guy fellows , he went to his parents graves , where he met one of their friend , he told him his story , his reality , of being a magician , and his parents were great ones , who defended their hidden village against evil , butone day their were a traitor , who killed his parents , ruined his villaged and helped their enemies to destroy his village , this traitoe , this person , was himself Ranmaro , so he was deserted from the magical and the whole beto-yo worlde , lept at his grand father place without knowing his true identity...

I didn't quite understand this section. If I may say so, you English is not the best, so your explanation is kind of unclear.

Anyway, your story sounds pretty good and not particularly cliched to me. I can't name any other stories all too similar.

But when does it take place? Is it the 21st century, or the medieval, or feudal Japan, or what?

 

[magician2magici]

hello specrum,

yes my english isn't my first language , so not so good at it , but i;m working on it ..

for the part you didn't understand , i'll write it down as :

this story happens nowadays ..
it starts in japan..
but it includes the whole world
the legend says that there is two worlds , our own and another one named - ko you world-
also people are four species :
-normal ones = shominteki
-magicians
-mere wolves
-vampires

my story as a series depends on the existence of mystery species , named - ko you people- living at this mystery world

the beginnig of the story is from japan , where a boy is attacked by a magician
this boy is ranmaro
he was saved by a girl he didn't know before , named sakura
then he escaped the place , went to his parents graves , where he met a friend of his parents , who told him about all the facts.

he is a magician , who was charged by killing his parents and destroying his own village , although he was only one year old back then , but they accused him with desertion from their world..

now ranmaro has to prove his freedom , his innocence , in a world hates him

i suppose you understand the rest of the explaination..

soon i'll try my luck in writing down in english so i'll need so many help i guess

salam>>

el-saher..

 

[ysabara]

The synopsis of your story certainly contains many unique elements. You have obviously planned the bones of the tale ~ knowing where you are headed is half the battle. The world you have created sounds fascinating ~ i wish you well with whatever you hope to achieve. As for English ~ it is a hard language, isn't? ~ a lot of us struggle with it too and it's our mother tongue. Keep working at it.

Y

 

[Spectrum]

Yes, it sounds interesting.

What is the tone of the story? Is it mostly optimistic, with good triumphing over evil, or is it more dark and horrific?

 

[Interference]

greetings everyone,
how are you all ??

Impressed by your story, actually, how are you?

i'm an egyptian young auther , not read so much , have created Ranmaro series , which have good reputation at my region

Are you published in Egypt? I shouldn't worry too much about your English if you can acquire a respectable translator.

I haven't heard this story before. It obviously has familiar bits in it, but I think there's more than enough originality to nudge open a few doors for you "worldwide". I'd certainly quite like to read it myself.

 

[magician2magici]

Yes, it sounds interesting.

What is the tone of the story? Is it mostly optimistic, with good triumphing over evil, or is it more dark and horrific?

hello spectrum

well , about the tone , i can't better describe it than action-driven story as a whole ..

if we go more deep inside the details abit , there is some sort of fact here , evil has the upper hand , if i can make an example , world has been invaded and after many years there is a motion of liberity , here is the same

ranmaro is a totally new one to his world , knowing his first steps at this world is accompaigned by many dangers , which he must face , overcome ,and acustom himself to the circumstances..

for the first part , ranmaro has two goals , claiming his innocence , rebuild his own hidden village which was destroyed long time ago..

thoughout the events of the first part , i make sure that every single step is made first by his enemies or even by coincidence , and at the same scale , it moves him closer to his goal , with or without his knowledge..

at the first half of the part , events are made by ranmaro's enemies , but at the second half , ranmaro moves at two roads at the same , facing enemies plans , destroying them , and moving to achieve his goal of rebuilding his village ..

there are many rules , nothing can be achieved by chance , for ranmaro to rebuild the village he must fullfill the conditions , which is that :

-having a member of special-ability family named ( ko -you family ) , which has the ability to makes anyone enters the mysterous world of ko-you through the ko-you shrine..

-member of special-ability family named ( che-you ) which has the ability to heal wounds ..

-member of special-ability family named ( tanchen-fenou) which carries the ability to transfer soul energy..

-member of special-ability family named (aigo) which has the ability to form a shield , protective shield , which protects who inside it , also makes them vanish sometimes ,and this is so important at making the villages hidden from normal people , and also make them high up at the sky not on the earth ,,

these four conditions must be fullfilled first , then second ranmaro has to choose a location , good one , where he will rebuild his village , then he must enter into a challenge determined by the heads of families living at the area where he chose to rebuild ..
all these things are all mixed up with the dangers around him , two roads i told you before , nothing is so easily at life..

at the end the mystery revealed , i don't know the name of this word , but i think it may means the big question at the story , the mystery , in my story , it's like woooooooooow is this what the writer meant , you know , some thing like big surprise at the end , like that's of harry potter for example..

well , this is a fast more deep over view on the first part ..
and sorry for my bad english ,

salam>>
el-saher..

 

[magician2magici]

Impressed by your story, actually, how are you?



Are you published in Egypt? I shouldn't worry too much about your English if you can acquire a respectable translator.

I haven't heard this story before. It obviously has familiar bits in it, but I think there's more than enough originality to nudge open a few doors for you "worldwide". I'd certainly quite like to read it myself.

hello interference..
i'm so glad that my story has impressed you , so glad really..

well , at the meanwhile my story is at abig publisher , he is studying it carefully as it;s huge one , also series not single , so he sees it as good book as he told me , but nothing real till now..

i had tried my luck once at another publisher who supports amateurs and unknown writers like me , he told me that my story is so fascinating and awesome , but the problem was at the size , huge one which he can't afford ..

for me , i want to make sure not to leave everything to the translator , you know , one has to give his touch to the work..
one day i read a novel , translated from latin to english , then from english to arabic , really not admired although the auther had noble prize on it ,
i don't the same thing to happen to me too , i want the best for my story , as i am so ambitios..

i hope you read the previous reply to have more deep view on my story ..
also i hope you really have it oneday in your hands , and hear all your comments from you then , lol..

salam>>
el-saher..

 

[magician2magici]

The synopsis of your story certainly contains many unique elements. You have obviously planned the bones of the tale ~ knowing where you are headed is half the battle. The world you have created sounds fascinating ~ i wish you well with whatever you hope to achieve. As for English ~ it is a hard language, isn't? ~ a lot of us struggle with it too and it's our mother tongue. Keep working at it.

Y

hello ysabara ,

thanks for the hope , i really hope it will be nice story ..
for english , yeah , so so hard for me to use in writing , but i think i'm getting used to it ..
thanks for passing by ,
there is more deep view on my story in previous replies , hope you can read and give your opinion..

now i have my exmas at medicine school , so not really find any free time so often , but soon i'll have a vacation , when i'll try my luck in writing down my first chapters in english , hopelly i could..

slam>>

el-saher..

 

[Aes]

after this small samarry
what do you think first of this novel ?
then is it a repeated idea or new ??

thsnks,,
regards..

el-saher>>

I'm probably repeating what other people have said, but:

What do I think? I think it sounds quite interesting, well planned, and while nothing is 100% original, it certainly contains enough original elements to make it stand out. Assuming you get it translated by someone capable of doing it justice, I can it doing pretty well -- this isn't something I'd say about most stories, either..

Good luck with it.