the balance.

bjktlk

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they say there is a balance. the balance is what keeps everything on an even keel. what would happen if the balance were well knocked off balance so to speak. we have good and evil. there is night and day. right and left. what would happen if there were no balance? well i intend to tell you. this story starts off 40 years ago. is it a true story you ask ? well let me say this the balance as we know it has already started to shift.

40 years ago there was a couple and for the sake of this story we'll say they were from new hampshire. they were in a bar and it was real late the woman was real tired and wanted to leave she went and told her boyfriend she wanted to leave. he was in the middle of a game of pool and did not want to leave and told her he would let her know when they were gonna leave. she knew he was drunk and did not want to anger him so she just sat and waited. well while waiting an old friend of hers from high school came into the bar. he noticed her and went to say hi. when she saw him she went over to him and gave him a hug and asked how he was? the boyfriend of the woman noticed her hugging another man and this enragged him he ran over to the two of them and hit the man right in the face. well he fell right to the floor and the girl looked at her boyfriend and yelled what the hell are you doing? the boyfriend now beyond anger grabbed his girlfriend and left the bar. the two were yelling and screaming at each other on there way out. in the truck she just asked him why he did what he did? he looked at her and said she was a cheating bitch.
the woman was now also mad and yelled back at her boyfriend he was just an old friend from school. the boyfriend was too angery to hear anything
just yelled at her again and told her to shut up. well now the girlfriend was filled with even more anger and yelled back at him when they get home she is leaving and going back home to her parents. well upon hearing that the boyfriend slams on the brakes of his truck then reaches over and hit her and said what? you think i'm gonna just let you walk away? well now she was scared. she had been hit by him before but not like that. she trys to calm him down but he was not gonna listen. he reached over again and grabbed her hair and said your not going anywhere. he then turned his truck around and headed down a dirt road. she was real scared and asked him where he's going? he just looked at her and said somewhere where they will never find you. she was now pleading with him to try to calm him down but he just reached over and hit her in the face and knocked her out.
well when she woke her head was leaning on the passenger window and all she could see were the stars in the sky. she did not know how long she had been out . she felt blood coming from her nose and was still kind of in a daze. she looked over at him and tried to speak but couldn't. he looked back at her and saw she was coming through and then hit her again.
when she wakes again she feels herself being dragged along the ground.
she looks up it's pitch black all she can see were the stars in the night sky.
he then grabs her by the hair and props her up against a tree. she was now compleatly awake and was real scared. what are you doing she asked him?
he says that if he can't have her then no one will. he then took out the hand gun he had in his pants and pointed it at her. her eyes had adjusted to the dark and now could see him and the gun in his hand. she stated to scream. he just laughed at her and said scream all you want no one will hear you or the gun were about 30 miles off the main road. she now begs him not to do it. he just points the gun at her head and says goodbye. she looks up at him crying and notices a large stick appear behind him in the moonlight. the stick falls and hits him full force on the head and he falls. there standing behind him was a stranger. the man reaches his hand out and asked her if she is okay. she grabs his hand and he helps her up. the man then says you don't belong here you need to get out of here before he awakes. he takes her back to the truck then helps her in . who are you she asked? he says you need to go before he awakes. she looks in her rear view mirror and sees his car. go now he says and let the police know of this. he then walked towards his car. she realized that the boyfriend still had the keys but she also had a set in her purse. she reached in grabbbed the keys and looked in the rear view mirror to see that the stranger and his car were gone. she did not know where he went or how he could have left without her seeing. she starts the truck up and gets out of there.

tbc

coming soon the present day.
 
I think that this belongs in the critiques section. Put it there and people will look at it. For now, I didn't look twice. And also, if this is prose, shouldn't you capitalize a bit?
 

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