POV of a biomech

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Okay... just asking for yea or nay, pretty much. I have two main characters whose POVs I use often: Keiro and Iris, my main characters. Secondary characters who have had their own POV chapters: Deminal and Fray, though each time it was for character building, recalling their past, or an important event. These are all human(ish) characters.

Now for an important turning point, I'm thinking to add one more character's POV: my bio-mechanical grifyn. This thing has been around for centuries. It's old, just got blasted with a super-high-frequency scream from my snake-like ghan (pronounced like "fan") creature, and is being urged to fight a brand-new model of mecha, a humanoid type. It will obviously lose.

So tell me, do you think this would be a good idea, or should I have one of the four previously mentioned (who are all conveniently at the scene. I just finished the last chapter in Iris's POV, Keiro is currently extremely angry and piloting my biomech, and Fray and Deminal are on the ground, watching from a safe place behind a giant destroyed airship) narrate this event?
 
Generally, I would agree with what BookStop just said ... but there are times when a new POV provides information you can't otherwise get across, and the positives of doing it that way can end up outweighing the negatives.

Why not try it different ways and see which one you think is the most effective?
 
But you have another character piloting the biomech? So I take it the biomech is self-aware (hence the POV), but can work in a sort of partnership with the pilot? If the biomech is a character in its own right, a POV is doable, but it would depend on what the grifyn could relay to your reader the others can't. I'd go with Teresa's suggestion and write it from different POVs, then see which one I liked more.

Just so you know, your little spoiler has got me very intrigued.
 
The only thing I can add to Teresa's suggestion is for you to ask yourself some questions first.

If you're like me, and this is an important scene, it's probably one that you've spent time thinking about and have effectively plotted in your head. If so - whose voice were you using when you thought-plotted it? Whose eyes were you seeing it through? Were you on the outside simply flinching at the action or inside feeling it? Do you know how the grifyn thinks/speaks/feels? Does anything else happen during the fight which it would be necessary - or just helpful - to know, but which couldn't be seen/heard by the grifyn? Or which can only be seen/heard by him'it? What happens when the grifyn loses - would that impact on how the scene ends (ie if he's knocked out or in indescribable pain)? Does the grifyn continue in the story - or is this his swansong? Would you ever want/need to use the grifyn's POV again? Are there other characters who might need to come on and just give their POV for a single chapter? Is there anything which you need to reveal about the grifyn for later plot purposes which could come out here? Conversely is there anything which would be revealed if we are in his head which needs to be kept concealed for the time being?

Not all of these will be relevant, but I hope they help. Anyway, good luck with the scene.

J
 
Thanks to you who responded ^^ Michael01, you're right, the biomech is sentient. It speaks to Keiro on a couple of occasions. It knows things, like the deeper reason for rejecting one of Keiro's family members to pilot it, and killing another. The link here FurNation -> MistingWolf's Blog-Thing will take you to where I post my work. Thank you for your attention ^_^ When I originally thought of this scene, it was from Sahzamikie's (the biomech's) point of view. I probably will have to write it out in different POV's till I have found the one that really works, but I think I'll end up using Sahz's anyway. There are things that only it knows I want to use to clear a couple things up. But then The Judge's points have made me stop to think. I might end up using its POV once more, but I haven't completely decided. I'll sleep on it, and we'll see what happens. I might end up posting the work later. Thanks again!
 
I've just had a quick scan over chapter six and it's third omniscient I'm not sure I understand what you mean by POV.
 
Six... that should be Keiro's point of view. Sometimes I do slip into omniscient viewpoints. Oopsies. I'll have to try to clear up who's speaking when. Mostly you can tell from the narrative, unless I lose myself. Canaeans don't use contractions. They say all their words, and full names. It's usually how you can tell straight off.
 
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