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I've never been to Canada, but I definately knew where I'd been after I woke up (if that makes sense). I blame the re-runs of Due South...

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It wasn’t a survivable explosion.

I kept well back in the tree line, in case this wasn’t an accident and there was someone out there, viewing their handiwork. Even from my limited vantage point it was obvious that the underground petrol storage tank had gone off like a bomb, levelling Bob’s Fuel & Food. The diesel tank was still burning though, sending up a thick column of smoke into the wintry sky, like some latter day funeral pyre. I’d half expected there to be crows circling in the early morning sky, waiting for the flames to die down, but I guess they didn’t like their meat that well done.

So much for the anonymity of witness protection.

Hollis and Barnes came walking up the slope towards me, leaving no footprints in the fresh snow. They were semi-transparent until close up, when they kind of slid into reality, crunching to a halt in front of me. There was a moment’s embarrassed silence until Barnes spoke.

“Bit of a bugger, eh? Well, at least you’re still in one piece.”

I gave him what I hoped was a sympathetic smile.

“Yeah, well, not much I can say, given the circumstances. Really tough break, given you only had a few days before I was left to my own devices. Ah, any idea what happened?”

Barnes stroked his chin.

“There was an explosion, about three A-M. The-“

“Two explosions.” Hollis cut in. “Both tanks, I figure. The whole place just got swept away.”

I frowned.

“Deliberate then. How do you think it was done?”

The two Mounties exchanged glances. Hollis shrugged.

“No way anyone could have gotten close enough to plant something without one of us noticing. I mean, it’s not like we were ever that busy. I figure a small incendiary in the last fuel delivery, pumped straight into the tank. Probably on a long timer, a real hands-off operation. You were due back hours ago, so the delay saved your life.”

I nodded, distracted.

“Yeah, I had some, ah, personal business in Edge City after my dental appointment.”

Barnes grinned.

“You mean the masseuse in Portland Street, above the Hanoi Barbers?”

I cleared my throat, feeling my face go red, but Hollis saved me any further embarrassment.

“It’s no biggie, we’ve always known about your visits to Nancy. Stuck out here you weren’t likely to meet anyone socially, and that’s a fact. Did you really think that Anderson wouldn’t keep tabs on you?” He frowned, “Where is Anderson, anyway?”

“You’ve been bleeding,” Barnes cut in, “a scalp wound, right side. It’s been tended to. I can see sticking plaster under your cap.”

I raised my hand but felt nothing through the glove, although my head did smart when prodded. The mention of my escort made me look round.

“Anderson? I don’t know. I’m not sure. He must have stayed with the car when we saw the smoke and I came up here to take a look.”

Both men drew their firearms on reflex, a futile gesture which I didn’t comment on. Hollis kept his voice level, with only a little tension showing through the self-control.

“No, that doesn’t sound right. At the first sign of trouble Anderson would have gotten you well away, let alone send you up here to investigate. Don’t you remember what happened?”

I frowned, realising the immediate past was a blur. All I could grasp were brief images, like some esoteric trailer for the film version of my day out.

“We rear-ended someone, a pickup truck, at the lights, on our way back. I banged my head. No seatbelt. I got cleaned up someplace, the rest room at the bus station, maybe. After that it’s all a bit hazy.”

“You could be concussed. As soon as the emergency services get here you should be hospitalised and checked out in case of cranial bleeding. I’m surprised they’re not here already, that smoke must be visible for miles.”

“Still doesn’t explain what happened to Anderson.” Barnes had an edge to his voice, almost an accusatory tone.

“Look, guys, sorry. I simply don’t know. Maybe he spotted someone following us and stashed me here, then took off to act as a decoy.”

That sounded weak, even to me. Luckily at that point the faint sound of an approaching siren reached us, heading off any further speculation. Barnes looked down towards the road, keeping behind what sparse cover the pine trees afforded.

“RCMP out of Mountain Gap. Probably. I’d stay put until either the fire service or an ambulance shows up. Preferably the fire service as it’s harder to fake. Still, it looks like you’re on your way out of here.”

There was an awkward silence until Hollis cleared his throat.

“So, what happens to us now?”

I resisted the impulse to shrug.

“Sorry, guys, but that’s the kind of thing you ask a priest. I was able to bring you back, but it’s only temporary. I don’t know where you go from here. I’ve heard of people being brought back two, three, times, but what you get is less and less, ah, coherent. It’s a kind of psychic Alzheimer’s and I’ve no idea if it affects you once you do, ah, pass over.”

Barnes put away his gun and stretched.

“You ready, Hollis? I’ve never been one for long goodbyes.”

Hollis nodded but remained silent, thin-lipped. We shook hands and I stepped back, letting them go. Both men became transparent, indistinct, and were gone. Gone like the fading memory of a dream, but one that left footprints in front of me.

I shivered and suddenly felt hungry, as the concentration required to summon the dead burs me out like heavy exercise. Some of those I’ve brought back cling to the moment, desperate for whatever extra time I can offer, and cutting them loose tears at my very soul. At least when I’m dealing with the police they generally have an underlying realisation of how badly things can turn out. Not fatalistic, exactly, more a grim acceptance that the chance of violent death goes with the territory, and that’s enough to make the transition a good deal easier.

It started to snow - large, lazy flakes that drifted like blossom in the still air. One landed on my upturned face and stung for a moment, then faded like a lost soul.
 
Cool, dead Mounties get their man.:)

I kept well back in (within, behind? ) the tree line, in case this ( hadn't been) wasn’t an accident and there was still someone out there, viewing their handiwork. Even from my limited vantage point it was obvious that the underground petrol storage tanks had gone off like a bomb, levelling Bob’s Fuel & Food. ( I like Food and Fuel better- no reason:rolleyes:) The diesel tank was still burning, sending up a thick column of smoke into the wintry sky like some latter day funeral pyre. I’d half-expected there to be crows circling in the early morning sky, waiting for the flames to die down, but I guess they didn’t like their meat that( so) well done.

So much for the anonymity of witness protection.


Hollis and Barnes came walking up the slope towards me, leaving no footprints in the fresh snow. They were semi-transparent until close up, when they kind of slid into reality, crunching to a halt in front of me. There was a moment’s embarrassed silence until (before) Barnes spoke.

“Bit of a bugger, eh? Well, at least you’re still in one piece.”

Neat. If you want to stay Canuckular- 'Bit of a bugger' is a bit Brit...and gas, never petrol, eh?
 
Great, as usual, but a bit British for a Canadian setting (speaking as a Canadian, eh?). JRiff nailed most of them (I say bugger, but I watch a lot of British TV (because it is better than the Hollywood crap)), but here's the one that smacked me:

“You’ve been bleeding,” Barnes cut in, “a scalp wound, right side. It’s been tended to. I can see sticking plaster under your cap.”

Canadians never call them "sticking plasters". Band-Aids (though that is a brand) is the common term, or bandage is what we'd say.

Also, be very careful where your story is set, as the RCMP are not the local police in every jurisdiction in Canada. The Horsemen (slang for the RCMP) serve as provincial police forces in most provinces, but Ontario and Quebec have their own (the Ontario Provincial Police (OPP) and Surete du Quebec, respectively), so be careful of where your story goes. Major and even small cities in Canada have their own police forces. By the place names, it sounds like your story is in BC or Alberta, or perhaps the Yukon Territory, so you are okay with RCMP, but be careful if you head into Vancouver, Calgary, Edmonton, etc.

This kind of stuff really upsets Canadians. As an example, there was the kerfuffle over an episode of the West Wing where terrorists entered the US from Ontario's border with Vermont. The trouble is, Ontario has no border with Vermont, only Quebec does. It is this damn inferiority complex we have existing next to the cultural elephant of the United States, so we get touchy about obvious details about our country (we are not, as Homer Simpson called us, America Jr., and we are unbelievably and unreasonably sensitive about it:rolleyes:). Except when it comes to hockey. There, Canadian superiority is undeniable.:)
 
Thanks for the Canadian feedback, and I have to admit I was hesitant to use this location, but that's just where I knew the story starts (BC).

A couple of questions, if I may;

What do you use in place of the mild expletive 'bugger'?
If petrol is 'gas', what is gas (natural and LPG)?
Sticking plaster is a Band Aid, which is fine, but if it's a 'bandage', what is a real bandage?

Cheers,

Martin
 
From memory of time spent in NA natural gas is still just gas.

Not sure there is too much to fault in regards to the story. How do you feel about it as the author. Another rewrite or two would probably reap benefits.

As a reader the concept grabbed me but I didn't feel too much tension in the story. If you follow me.
 
I started this with a specific viewpoint in mind; a still winter morning, standing amongst the pine trees such that you can see down the slope but there is no clear vista. The crunch of footsteps on frosted snow, a sky like cotton wool, the tang of burning fuel in the air. I don't know what the hell I was dreaming about but that was the image I remembered on waking.

In terms of the narrative I set out to try for unease rather than immediate tension as it didn't sit well with the sense of detached voyeurism the main character experiences.

The MC isn't really raising the dead but he is able to manifest, to make real, the idealised version of someone. Perhaps 'idealised' isn't the right term - what you get is the concensus version of how a person was, in the opinion of others. If I have time tomorrow night I'll advance the narrative and hopefully this will become a bit clearer. Or not...
 
He might say 'that's a pain in the butt.' :) They watch a lot of American TV here, so the cops would talk like that. But it is safe to put 'eh' at the end of almost any sentence. It's the national word of Canada, eh? and an excuse to use lots of question marks.
 
This is so weird...

Well, I've read a lot of SFF, but I've never, ever seen this take before: Kudos for that !!

IMHO, it flows fairly well. You may be able to tweak it a bit more, but I like it as it stands.
 
Thanks for the Canadian feedback, and I have to admit I was hesitant to use this location, but that's just where I knew the story starts (BC).

A couple of questions, if I may;

What do you use in place of the mild expletive 'bugger'?
If petrol is 'gas', what is gas (natural and LPG)?
Sticking plaster is a Band Aid, which is fine, but if it's a 'bandage', what is a real bandage?

Cheers,

Martin

"Oh, bugger!" = "Oh crap!" = "Oh, sh*t". Actually, just about anything works.

The long word for gas is gasoline, and natural gas is called "natural gas" or just "gas". If propane gas, then just "propane".

Bandage is a bandage, whether it is a sticky piece of cloth or plastic with a small badge of gauze on it, or a major, post-surgical wrap.

And JRiff, we don't say "eh" that much, eh?;)

*Clansman fades to black, doing his best Geddy Lee/Bob & Doug MacKenzie imitation (see SCTV episodes circa 1980 for reference)*

Take off! To the Great White North!
Take off! It's a beauty way to go!

Koo-roo-koo-koo, Koo-koo-koo-koooooooo!
....
 
I suppose you can take comfort in the fact that the criticism is lodged firmly in cultural details. I would say that makes the piece a bit of a success.
 
Not much happens in this section, I'm afraid...

Two

I waited until all the emergency services had arrived before leaving the trees and floundering down the slope. The snow was knee deep in places and my legs were chilled long before I reached the road. At least I recognised one of the Mounties watching my approach; big Pete Frobisher, a regular at Bob’s as it was one of the few places on this road you could get a cup of coffee after hours. Although I’d owned the place less than a month you make friends quick up here, or not at all. As I struggled up the gravel bank he held out his hand.

“Don! Hell of a thing, eh? What happened here?”

I’d been chewing over what to say and decided to write Anderson out of the scenario. I couldn’t account for his absence and didn’t think he’d have spent the night nearby only to hang back now.

“Damned if I know, Pete. Something woke me around three and when I went out back there was a bear nosing around. Great big beast, raking through the trash. Anyway, you know how I’m still taken by the novelty of life out here so I just hunkered down to watch it a while. Next thing I know its like a bomb went off. Huge blast, the buildings went down like a house of cards. I figured it was the underground gasoline tank, but I didn’t fancy getting close enough to check it out.”

“Yeah, that’s what it looks like. Electrical fault maybe, if the pumps had been left on. Look, who else was here? The fire department are all for letting the diesel tank burn itself out, as there’s no risk to life or property. We can’t get near the site just now, but if there are bodies in the debris…”

He trailed off and I put on my resigned voice.

“Yeah, Pete, I’m afraid so. Bill Anderson is away in Edge City but his two friends, Ray Hollis and Todd Barnes, were still staying with us. I don’t see how they could have survived.”

“Ray Hollis? I knew an officer Ray Hollis some years back, but there you go.” He scratched his chin. “Hell of a thing, hell of a thing. We’ll need contact details, next of kin, whatever information you have concerning the deceased.”

“Can’t be of much use, Pete. Like I said, they were Bill’s friends, just here to help us get up and running.”

Frobisher looked over spread of scattered and smouldering timbers.

“You were damn lucky, and that’s a fact. Not getting caught in the blast and then surviving out here all night, given as how you’re not dressed for it.”

I caught the questioning tone in his voice and decided to head off that part of the investigation, or at least buy some time. Turning, I pointed back up at the ridge.

“There’s an old cabin up there, a ways back from the tree line. Still weather tight, so I laid up there until you dragged your sorry ass out of bed.”

He followed my gesture and frowned.

“Can’t say as how I noticed any wood smoke.”

“It’s not exactly equipped as a rescue station, Don, and I had nothing to light a fire with. Couple of old blankets and my own company is all I had.”

He hesitated for a moment and then his stance relaxed.

“Right then, you go get checked out and I’ll have the fire crew start dampening things down. There’ll be a fire investigator along presently and I guess he’ll want to talk to you as well. You’ll be staying local, I take it, until things get sorted out?”

“Ah, yeah, yeah. I expect Bill and I will try the inn back in Mountain Gap.”

“Brave man.” He turned to go and then hesitated. “Insurance?”

“What? Sorry?” I tried to appear flustered, caught unawares, but I knew exactly where the conversation was going. Bob’s had never been much of a money spinner and unlikely to make us rich, so arson had to be a consideration. “Well, we have a small safe, if it survived in one piece, and all the documents are in that. Bill handled that side of things, so I couldn’t even tell you who the policy was with. Sorry”

Frobisher nodded, more to himself than me.

“Not something to worry about just now, Don. You go see to yourself and we’ll talk later, when your partner gets back.”

I evaded his contemplative gaze and sought out the ambulance crew, who supplied me with dry trousers and a pair of over-large boots to be going on with. I’d barely sipped the obligatory cup of coffee when Frobisher and another officer came over, their body language tense and formal. Pete sounded well pissed off.

“Mr Wylie. I’ve been instructed to place you in protective custody. You are to be transported immediately to the RCMP station in Edge City. Officer Rogers will drive you there. Apparently they even considered having you airlifted out, but there’s a weather front moving in and your safety is of paramount importance. Before you go, is there anything you wish to add concerning recent events?”

I guessed my name, or at least my current identity, had caught the attention of someone in higher authority and they’d decided to spirit me away. The big no-no in witness protection is ever admitting you’re part of it, even to local law enforcement. Pete Frobisher was a decent guy and I disliked lying to his face, but I stuck with ‘bewildered innocence’ as a defence mechanism.

“I don’t know what to say, Pete, honestly. Maybe Bill Anderson has something to do with this, although I can’t see how. I must have friends in high places, eh?”

I tried a half-smile in an effort to lighten the atmosphere but no one returned it. Pete nodded to Officer Rogers who took up position behind me.

“You’ll be required to make a formal statement later. Good day to you, sir.”

We semi-marched over to the car and Rogers put me in back – I didn’t even rate the informality of riding shotgun. As we pulled out I saw that the bus to Mountain Gap had stopped and a few passengers had got down to chat with the firemen. One sallow-faced onlooker stood out, if only because he was wearing a suit amidst uniforms and winter clothing.

Vigo Hanesh.

A man I knew to be dead, because I’d killed him.
 
Three

I blinked, rubbed my eyes, and when I looked again Hanesh was gone. Realising how tired I must be, having been up all night, I relaxed. I’m pretty much the poster boy for port-traumatic stress disorder, so hallucinations like that are part and parcel of the recovery process. The only thing that stood out was the normality of it all, it really had looked like Hanesh was just standing there, gawping, not even gazing in my direction. Satisfied I wasn’t really being haunted, I sat back and tried to let time pass.

The road meandered either side of the arrow-straight single railway track which led to Edge city, and I kept an eye out for Anderson’s car as we travelled. The gap in my memory stubbornly refused to yield any answers, not that I was concentrating too hard. I have the kind of imagination which would start to fill in the gaps if pushed, and I didn’t want a concocted, though plausible, scenario to block reality when it decided to put in an appearance.

Bill’s disappearance really bothered me, though, as he wasn’t the type to just bug out like that – especially if two brother officers had just gone up in flames. Why he’d left me behind remained a mystery, and I’d discounted the possibility he was in some way connected with the explosion.

The miles passed, snow continued to fall.

Eventually we reached Edge City, which is actually a fair sized settlement but not exactly what you’d call metropolitan. The RCMP station there is stone and brick, quite a substantial building, and as we pulled into the cinder covered car park a sergeant stepped out of the side entrance to greet us. To greet Constable Rodgers, actually, as they left me in the car during their conversation, and neither man looked overly pleased when it finished. The sergeant motioned for me to join them and I quit the tepid security of the cruiser for wet snow and obvious irritation.

“I’m Sergeant Muldoon and you’ll be staying with us for a while, Mr Wylie. Apparently some bigwigs are flying in to question you, although…” he looked up at an overcast sky the colour of a dead salmon, “…that could take a while. Follow me, please.”

We went inside and at least they put me an interrogation room rather than a cell; a blank-walled box containing four chairs, a Formica-topped table and a buzzing overhead strip light. What it lacked in amenities it made up for with an absence of charm. I sat and waited for almost two hours, with only one cup of coffee to break the tedium. Eventually the door opened and a man entered; thirties, suit, tie, shoes not boots. Short dark hair, thin mouth, close-cut fingernails. He had one blue eye and one gray. Mr Neat placed a manila folder on the desk between us and sat down facing me.

“My name is Walker, Mr Kelso…” I winced at the use of my real name, or rather the recent past associated with it, “…and I’m here to manage this situation. Let me be quite clear at the outset, we only took you on as a favour, a professional courtesy, to our British cousins. Apparently at some point you had expressed a desire to see Canada and, quite frankly, they wanted rid of you. Naturally we requested a copy of your file, in case your presence here posed a threat to our national security, but what we received was so heavily redacted as to be almost useless. The most we could glean was that you were a compromised intelligence asset they wished to protect from any potential retribution as compensation for services rendered. We, in turn, passed you over to the RCMP witness protection program, who undertook to provide you with a suitably low-profile lifestyle here in British Columbia.”

He opened the file and scanned the first page before continuing.

“The result of all this time and effort being two officers feared dead and a third missing, your place of residence reduced to matchwood, and you sitting here without a scratch.”

Instinctively I raised a hand to the Band Aid on my head, but given what had happened to Hollis and Barnes I decided not to make a big deal of it.

“Sorry, Mr Walker, but who are you again?”

“CSIS.” I must have looked blank because he sighed, exasperation written clearly on his face. “Canadian Security Intelligence Service. Look, Kelso, the RCMP, or at least those in the know, want you turned over for questioning. I’ve read the initial report from the scene of the explosion and there’s no indication this was other than a tragic accident. So normally we wouldn’t concern ourselves, as even those in witness protection have the right to blow themselves up through incompetence.”

He sat there, his composure recovered, waiting for some response from me. I cleared my throat, trying not to sound as nervous as I felt.

“So I take it something happened to make this out of the ordinary?”

He turned to another page in the file.

“Around the estimated time of the explosion we, not the RCMP, received a phone call. Just a name, ‘Donald Wylie’, from an untraceable cell phone. We’re working on that. Obviously the call red-flagged your file so when formal notification of your involvement reached us we decided to take charge, regardless of the preliminary evidence.”

“So, now what? I get moved on? Another identity, another out-of-the-way spot?”

Walker smiled, although it was more a ‘problem solved’ satisfaction than genuine good humour.

“No. The good news for us is that you obviously still pose a threat to someone out there, so as an active intelligence asset you’re being handed back to the British. Internal flight to Calgary and then direct to Glasgow, as soon as the weather improves. Hell, if it doesn’t improve in the next eight hours I’ll drive you out of here myself.”

There was a hard knot in my stomach at the prospect of being thrown back into a life I’d barely survived the first time around.

“Someone wants to kill me? This is good news for us, how, exactly?”

“Sorry, Kelso, I was using ‘us’ in the sense of ‘not you’. Sorry for any confusion. Look, if someone wanted you dead they would just walk up and put a bullet in your head, or use a car bomb. Something obvious, especially if it made the point that witness protection couldn’t save you. The problem with that approach is it would trigger a mandatory investigation by the RCMP into how they found you, and, more importantly, a review by the intelligence community of those cases you were involved with. It would seem you know something, the significance of which has escaped both you and your erstwhile handlers, or they would never have let you go in the first place.”

He sat back, looking slightly smug, and I could feel a pit opening up beneath me. I had no desire to plunge back into that twilight existence of scorn, disbelief and half-truths. Walker closed the file and while he didn’t exactly wipe his hands clean, the inference was there.

“So, you’re out of here ASAP, Kelso. Unless you can come up with a damn good reason for us to keep you around.”

Now it was my turn to sit back, hands in my lap and out of his sight. His gaze hardened as he tried to work out why my eyes were fluttering, obviously worried I was experiencing some kind of fit.

I showed him the pair of Enfield .38 revolvers I was now holding.
 
It's going well for Kelso so far. Mybew you could hack out a few words in this bit

I blinked, rubbed my eyes, and when I looked again Hanesh was gone. Realising how tired I was (must be), having been up all night, I deliberately relaxed. I’m pretty much the poster boy for port-traumatic stress disorder, so hallucinations (like that) are part and parcel of the recovery process. The only thing that stood out was the normality of it all, it really had looked like Hanesh (was just) standing there, gawping, not even looking in my direction. Satisfied that I wasn’t really being haunted, I sat back and tried to let time pass.

The road meandered either side of the arrow-straight (single) railway track which led to Edge city, and I kept an eye out for Anderson’s car as we travelled. The gap in my memory stubbornly refused to yield any answers, not that I was concentrating too hard. I have the kind of imagination which would (will) start to fill in the gaps if (when) pushed, and I didn’t want a concocted scenario, however plausible, to block reality when it decided to put in an appearance.


Or not. It reads pretty good as tis. Northern B.C. huh? There's only one road up there.
 
Four

He took it quite well, all things considered. When I pull a stunt like that there’s always the chance my ‘audience’ will try and jump me or go for their own weapon. As I didn’t know Walker’s background he could have been one of those taught to regain the initiative, regardless of risk, and that could have been very messy.

Producing the revolvers had been the easy bit and now I had to stage manage the aftermath.

I ducked the guns under the table and jumped to my feet, showing him my now empty hands. For good measure I raised them above my head, as I knew how this was going to play out in the short term.

Walker jerked upright like a puppet on a string, Glock materialising in his hand like one of those quick-draw guns strapped to your forearm. He wasn’t pleased.

“Preston! King! In here now!”

The door burst open and two other men in suits appeared, guns drawn. All three covered me while I stood there, arms up, trying not to smile. Walker gestured with his firearm.

“Preston, frisk him. King, look for weapons taped to the undersides of the table and chairs.”

They went through the motions while Walker slammed the door shut and stood with his back against it, fuming.

“He’s clean.”

“Nothing here either, sir. No weapons of any kind.”

There was a tic in Walker’s left cheek and I wondered if I’d pushed him too far.

“Get out. Both of you. Make sure no one disturbs us.”

His two associates exchanged glances.

“Sir, perhaps it would be best if-“

“I said get out!”

Neither man actually shrugged, but the way they holstered their weapons and left the room gave me the definite impression this interview was heading into the realm of ‘no witnesses required’.

Walker and I stood for a moment, facing each other, and then he seemed to regain his composure.

“Sit down, Kelso, and keep your hands where I can see them. “

We returned to our chairs and he placed his Glock on the table in easy reach.

“So, neat trick. What was it, some kind of subliminal suggestion? If it was a straightforward illusion then you’ve obviously missed your calling.”

Despite his warning I reached inside my jacket and pulled out a Glock. Walker went white-faced, trembling, and for a moment it looked like he might go berserk. I slowly reached over and placed the pistol on the table in front of him.

“Pick it up, Walker. It’s your gun, after all.”

He stared at the new weapon and then lifted both, one in each hand, to inspect them. I saw his knuckles tighten.

“The serial numbers match. You could only have pulled this off in collusion with my superiors. Which means this whole incident has been stage managed from start to finish.” He pointed both guns at me. “Care to tell me just what the hell is going on?”

I tried to keep my voice soft and reassuring.

“Put the second gun down, out of my reach. It isn’t going to be here for long.”

The tic in his cheek had returned but his eyes were hard, locked on mine. Nevertheless he placed the duplicate Glock down and sat back, so as to keep both it and me in plain sight.

The gun wavered, became transparent, and was gone.

Walker was breathing heavily, a trickle of sweat running from the hairline down past his right ear, but the gun in his hand didn’t waver. When he spoke I could hear the strain of a man barely under control.

“You’ve got ten seconds. Then you attack me and I’m forced to shoot. Ten.”

Despite the countdown I hesitated, as I have a set spiel to explain what I do, but generally not in front of so hostile an audience. I opted for the cut-down version.

“Ideas exist. Ideas of people, of places, of things. They exist in what Jung called the collective unconscious. Like a sea, a pool of ideas shared by everyone. Everything that people think about, dream about, in a place where they exist independently of the real world, the conscious world. I’m able to tap into this place and make these ideas real, for a while at least.”

Walker flexed his fingers, getting a better grip on the Glock.

“********. Try again.”

I could feel sweat on my brow.

“If enough people believe in something, in an idea of something, then it exists as, as a tangible entity in the collective unconscious. Some of us can get in there and, ah, replicate the physical form of that idea in the here and now.”

Walker frowned.

“What, you thought up those two revolvers? Out of nothing?”

I leaned forward, trying to sound eager and trustworthy.

“No, no, I saw them coming in here, in a display case. Look, the more people believe in something the more real it becomes in our world. I couldn’t keep those guns here for long because only a few people know about them. Same with your Glock. The idea of it was nearby, in a manner of speaking, because it featured so prominently in your mind. Conscious and unconscious. What you saw, and touched, was the idea, the ideal, of your gun. It’s pure form.”

Walker sneered at me.

“Parlour tricks. It’s nothing more than mental conjuring, even if I believed it was true. Get a stage act together and impress the gullible.”

I sat back, suddenly feeling weary of banging my head against a wall of official scepticism.

“While objects are here, they’re real. If you’d shot me with that second Glock I’d be just as dead as if you’d used the original. Of course forensics would have a field day, as the bullet would match the remaining gun which hadn’t been fired.”

“So, what? You were some kind of assassin for the British? Or maybe an armourer, able to supply temporary weapons in high security environments?”

I shook my head.

“There was a man called Vigo Hanesh. He produced, he made real, the bomb which destroyed the American embassy in London. Then all forensic trace of the device simply vanished, although the effects of the explosion were permanent.”

Walker stared at me.

“You can do this? Manufacture ordinance out of thin air?”

“No, nothing so major, and Hanesh is dead, so that threat is gone. My fear is that someone else is about to attempt something similar, and they want me out of the way so they won’t be traced. Imaginary weapons, the next big thing.”

I gave Walker a half-smile.

“You can’t fight an idea whose time has come.”
 
Reiver, you know I don't post often to you, but this time - after reading your other thread - I started to wonder why these two stories are so similar? Why they keep repeating the same ideas? You do these noir sort of things, but you never get out from out your habbit and really write a long continues piece that so many people ask from you. Is there a reason for it?
 
I’m not sure I understand how the two pieces that have been updated recently can be compared, other than I always write in a first person POV. At the risk of hijacking my own thread the following is a breakdown of my ideas as I see them;

The Collective Unconscious (Ideas made manifest in the real world)
Memory Mine*
Great Divide
Between*

Supernatural Noir (Angel Heart territory)
The Angel Draw*
Will This Night Never End (WIP)

Virtual Realities & Synthetic Personalities
The Cold Hand (complete)
Paper Tiger/Beggars & Choosers (parts of the same storyline)
Sailing To Tarshish (complete)
Does Not End Well (lost in the Great Crash)

Policing With A Twist
Not Here, Not Now (offline)
Like Tears In Rain
Seven By Seven

Alien Mind Transfer
Flesh Is The Key*

Synthetic Boxing (Bladerunner territory)
Ringside (complete)

Some Characters Just Happen To Be Vampires
Whisper My Name (offline)

Far-Future SF
Out Of The Dark
Dust 'til Dawn
The Bright And Hollow Sky
(All the above are parts of one story arc and I really should do something about them)

Straight-Up Fantasy
Under A Darkening Sky (needs a rewrite)
Catch My Shadow (offline)

Those marked * are really undeveloped ideas, which generally gave rise to another thread. E.g. Great Divide is a kind of sequel to Memory Mine, even though the latter never got written down (although it’s in my head). Those marked ‘offline’ are worked on spasmodically when I have the time. Just about everything else is in development limbo…(sighs)
 
Sorry Mister Reiver, what I meant to say didn't come out as I meant to say. I see a lot rinse and repeat operations in the process. As I was reading your latest entry straight after reading your other thread to latest entries, I started to notice the similarities in the writing. In this thread and in the other thread the action is unfolding pretty much similarly, in both cases the main character faces the situation where he's facing the baddies on a gunpoint. That's what I meant to say.
 
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