subtletylost
Formerly fishii
I have a thread here: http://www.sffchronicles.co.uk/forum/536884-description-in-405-words.html and in lieu of a fight I thought it would be better to post a poll and get opinions on the subject of "Is there such a thing as too many brand names in a description?"
Or rather which version is the better description.
version one:
or version two:
Or rather which version is the better description.
version one:
I wouldn’t say that I have the best room in the house. However, I would say it’s a pretty sweet one. When I come in my room I just like to stop and take it all in; strange, I know, but I still can’t believe Mama and Papa let me give it a Nintendo make-over. The walls are all painted up like video games. Professionals can do some amazing things. The left wall is painted Zelda style, the one directly across from the door is Mario fashion and to the right is painted Pokemon. The wall with my door has all kind of posters.
The walls are not all I pimped out. Against the Mario wall is the desk that my friends and I tricked out with Pokemon, Mario and Legend of Zelda. On it my notebook sits open, waiting for me to write in it. The desk and window in my room are positioned perfectly, no matter what time of day I sit in that desk and stare out the window, the sun is never in my eyes. My bed is tucked in the corner where the Mario and Pokemon walls come together; it sits lengthwise against the Pokemon wall. It’s probably the only nonNintendo thing currently in my room. It usually has a Zelda blanket on it, but two weeks ago it got ripped badly during a slumber party and Mama shipped it off to her mom to be fixed. Against the left wall I have a dresser and desk, both painted up to look like they are covered in ivy. On the desk is my desktop, also Zelda-ized and my laptop that’s been decked out Star Wars style. On the dresser is a triforce jewelry box.
My carpet is plush and soft, it’s the same color green a spring grass. My ceiling has been painted twice; once it was painted with special glow-in-the-dark-paint, to look like the night sky and then it was painted to look like a blue sky with white fluffy clouds. I don’t know how they did it but it’s cool the way that it’s a day sky in the day and a night sky at night.
My room is the only room in the house with access to my special walk in closet. It’s that closet, with it’s door painted to blend in with the wall, that brought my friends here today.
or version two:
I wouldn’t say that I have the best room in the house. However, I would say it’s a pretty sweet one. When I come in my room I just like to stop and take it all in; strange, I know, but I still can’t believe Mama and Papa let me paint it. The walls are all painted up like a forest. Professionals can do some amazing things; I never would have been able to paint such realistic trees. The wall with my door has all kind of posters.
The walls are not all I redid. Against the far wall is my writing desk; on it my notebook sits open, waiting for me to write in it. The desk and window in my room are positioned perfectly, no matter what time of day I sit in that desk and stare out the window, the sun is never in my eyes. My bed is tucked in the corner where the far and right walls come together; it sits lengthwise against the right wall. It’s probably the only non themed item currently in my room. It usually has a Legend of Zelda blanket on it, but two weeks ago it got ripped badly during a slumber party and Mama shipped it off to her mom to be fixed. Against the left wall I have a dresser and desk, both painted up to look like they are covered in ivy. On the desk is my desktop, that has been remade to look a character from my favorite video game, and my laptop has a couple of Star Wars stickers on it. On the dresser is a triforce jewelry box.
My carpet is plush and soft, it’s the same color green a spring grass. My ceiling has been painted twice; once it was painted with special glow-in-the-dark-paint, to look like the night sky and then it was painted to look like a blue sky with white fluffy clouds. I don’t know how they did it but it’s cool the way that it’s a day sky in the day and a night sky at night.
My room is the only room in the house with access to my special walk in closet. It’s that closet, with it’s door painted to blend in with the wall, that brought my friends here today.