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Introductory from a WIP. It's to be a Western, it may have fantasy elements or may not.

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The bullet clipped her boot heel a good second or more before the report cracked the sky overhead, making her horse shy just a little. Lannister pulled the Winchester from it’s scabbard, leaned down behind the animal, and did her best to flow onto the ground below, being careful to grab the extra long reins as she rolled onto her back, away from the hooves. She scanned the high and rocky skyline beside her. Nothing.

Without hesitation she rolled onto her belly, dropped the reins and began to crawl toward a small boulder, about ten feet to the left. Something impacted the sand ahead of her and then the sky cracked loudly again. She stopped, looked up at the rocks briefly and then she quickly came to her feet in a very low crouch, sprinted to the boulder, and wriggled down behind it, doing her best to crawl under the rock, though that proved as impossible as she had expected it to.

No further shots came immediately and seconds ticked by. Lannister counted thirty and nothing happened.

She surveyed the area, carefully leaning around the boulder’s lower edges for furtive glances but seeing a sandy waste in all directions save the high outcrop her assailant was behind. It was actually very lucky even this little boulder was here

Damn, Damn, Damn, She thought. She had known she should have worked around this area, stayed in the rocks, maybe even went further North and tried to find a nice shady forest, though it was fat chance of that in this climate. But she was tired, and hungry, and wanted to get to Kingslin before nightfall.

And now thirsty, it came to her as she remembered the canteen still on the horse.


It isn’t fair, she thought uselessly. The war is over, there shouldn’t BE anyone shooting at me.

‘Life isn’t fair’ the tired, futile and bitter, old platitude suddenly brought back that awful day in 1865 at Petersburg. The shock and sudden terrible grief she had felt then flowed over her like a cloak of awful darkness. To go all that time, to suffer all she had, and then…

She heard a soft pattering noise just above her and felt shards of hot rock land on her neck. A second later the sky cracked again.


He’s trying to flush me she thought, he's getting impatient. .

She assessed her situation. She had a full magazine of 7 shots in the Winchester and more in the ammo belt. She even had a loaded Colt in the holster at her side, a surprisingly good distance weapon though probably useless here. No problem with bullets.

Otherwise, she was back with the 12th at Petersburg. It was only a matter of time. Soon, he’d work his way around to somewhere he could see her. The very thing that made the boulder cover now would then hold her fast and allow him to shoot her at his leisure.

She chanced another look around the boulder’s edge. Her horse was still standing where it had been. Good animal, maybe battle trained, she thought, but horses are cheap and this one just looks old rather than brave. This guy is probably after me because I have full saddlebags


I wonder if he’d be willing to let them get away. She brought the Winchester to her shoulder and shot underneath her animal, once and when it didn’t move, quickly once again. The animal shied and fled.

From a place on the high rocks a shot echoed out, then another and another. The smoke was as clear as an Indian’s signal. Lannister brought the repeater up and emptied her magazine at the rockline directly under the smoke as fast as she could work the lever. Even from where she was she could hear the ricochets chipping shards.

She dived back around the boulder and reloaded with the clear and fast precision she’d been taught. Then she turned back and brought the weapon to bear on the same area again while nearly standing. This time she laid two shots on her previous target then rapidly raked the rockline out from it, alternating right and left until empty. She dived again, reloaded and then counted to thirty, and then thirty again. After giving it another full minute for good measure she stood up and faced toward her so far invisible foe, keeping her weapon leveled.

There was silence for a good two minutes before she relaxed.


It seems he prefers easier prey, but she still kept the Winchester leveled.
She heard an even more distant shot behind her. In a moment of sick panic she turned and saw distant figures approaching from the vast wasteland to the rear, but then noted that one of them was waving a rifle to which he had attached a white handkerchief. She waited a few moments and then waved her gun back, heaving a sigh of relief as she noted that they seemed to be in uniform

Strange looking, she thought as they approached. She wished she had the spyglass now still on her horse. Looks like Zouaves, a little, but what would Zouaves be doing this far West?

She placed her rifle to one side and sat down on the rock. She still wore the Confederate butternut coat because it hid well the inconvenient fact she was a woman. She had heard there were still active Confederates here though, and didn't want what seemed Union soldiers to mistake her for a hostile one. That would be the cruelest irony, to die for the one thing she hated most in the world, after it was no longer even useful.
 
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Overall this is vivid and interesting. In most places your word choices are strong and your style effective. I do have some quibbles:

Just as a reminder to us all, "its" always means "belonging to it" and "it's" always means "it is."

Good word choice with "flow" but I would drop the italics.

"Impacted" is weaker than your usual word choices. "Hit" would be better.

The last sentence is the second paragraph could be broken up into shorter, stronger sentences.

"Actually very lucky" is weaker than the rest of the scene. Something like "Thank God for this little boulder" or whatever would be appropriate for the character.

Be consistent with placing thoughts in italics. Also, you almost never need to say "she thought." Readers are used to seeing thoughts in italics and pick up on that very quickly. (Damn, damn, damn! is enough.)

You seemed to really get into the flow of things after this point, so I don't have any other quibbles. It's a good story; just give it a little polishing.
 
Lannister is a good cowboy name, Louis Lamour would like it.
I dunno, I would leave out any extra adjectives and description near the beginning of the story. A good second or more, leaning down, flowing onto the ground, etc.

The bullet clipped her boot heel, and the report cracked across the sky (overhead) an instant later. Lannister slid the Winchester from its holster as she rolled off her horse, doing her best to flow onto the ground. She scanned the rocky skyline, but nothing moved.
Without hesitation) She began to crawl toward a small boulder about ten feet to her left. Sand leapt skyward ahead of her and the sky cracked loudly again.

A running gun battle like this should be as terse as you can get away with, I think. Probably.
Nice to read some Western action for a change, boy howdy, hyuhp.
 
Howdy (I know, it's corny) JoanDrake,

Potentially a great scene; really wanted to get into it as I like action to kick things off, only feel it just needs a bit of tweaking/editing to polish it up. Often comes as surprising that what seems a tiny bit of editing can make a huge difference to flow/readability.

The action/excitement isn't coming across very strongly at the mo -she's in a life or death situ so it needs to. One way to help convey the action, is short snappy sentences (they're currently all a bit too long) e.g. "A gunshot. She dived to the ground as a bullet clipped her heal." Reckon the horse would react a bit more if it were being fired at, even if old & battle-trained, e.g. "Lightning(?) whinnied, flashing the whites of his eyes, but she managed to keep a firm grasp of the reins" or something.

Agree with Victoria Silverwolf you don't need the 'she thinks'.

Just some quick other thoughts:
"ten feet to the left" -advice is usually to avoid exact measurements; maybe 'just a few feet away', or else leave it out.

Few too many adverbs; e.g. cut 'just a little'. +some sudden/suddenly's

For the 'life isn't fair...', I'd have thought being shot at would bring back the battle scene more than anything.
 
Hi Joan,

As with Greenwoody, I'd see about shortening some of those sentences.

She stopped, looked up at the rocks briefly and then she quickly came to her feet in a very low crouch, sprinted to the boulder, and wriggled down behind it, doing her best to crawl under the rock, though that proved as impossible as she had expected it to.

could maybe be changed to something like:

She stopped, looked up at the rocks and quickly came to her feet in a low crouch. She sprinted to the boulder and wriggled down behind it, doing her best to (try to) crawl underneath it, though that proved as impossible as she had expected it to.

I'm no expert (as you'll see when I get around to posting my own stuff, haha) but that just seems snappier to me and in a life or death situation, snappier seems to fit better.

Good luck!
 
The big thing that jumped out as I read it was the number of sentences that begin with she. Varying sentence beginnings can really have an impact and improve the flow.

Otherwise I agree with Victoria's assessment.
 
She seems to be a hundred things before she hits the ground, which doesn't fit how I'd react to a gun shot. I'd flowing to the ground, grabbing a gun and the reins. I'm guessing you want to show she's reacting in a well trained way, but at the same time I think there needs to be a sense of impact, speed and urgency. She's already done three things by the time she's acting "without hesitation", dropping the reins she had a hold of and started to crawl.

"No further shots came immediately" - you don't really need immediately here, just no further shots came.

"She had known she should have worked around this area, stayed in the rocks, maybe even went further North"
That should be "maybe even gone further North", not went.

Why are we being reminded that her canteen is on the horse? Unless the scene continues and her laden horse becomes a large aspect of it, I'd stick with how she's feeling rather than what her horse is carrying. If she's thirsty then her throat is dry and with her senses on edge she's a lot more alert to every discomfort.

I think that her firing under her horse would illicit some reaction on the first shot. It seems odd that the horse just utterly ignores a first shot and then decides to run on a second.

I think the uncertainty of the new arrivals in the last couple of paragraphs could be expressed more clearly. Seems he prefers easier prey, they seemed to be wearing uniform, seemed to be Union soldiers - find a couple of new ways of expressing those ideas. They appeared to be wearing uniform, for example. Or if not changing the words, rewrite it entirely. What is she feeling about what she perceives these soldiers to be?

It's an interesting scene, just needs to be tightened up, relived and retold a little :)
 
Thank you all so far, and please keep the critiques coming. They're both helpful and encouraging

I want a good opening for this one because I think that will help the story to sustain itself. Most of my stories come from situations I think up and I can't really make them carry a plot. In this case, however, the character and her backstory came first and I've been told that's the best way to evolve a narrative
 
As soon as she's safe behind that rock, she can reminisce till the cows come home. Cowboys n' girls ride long lonely stretches acrost the tundra, they have plenty of time to think, but not when they are being shot at from ambush.
Some Louis Lamour SS are very good, always tense, maybe four guys break out of a prison and ride away with the federales in hot pursuit, something like that.
Cowgirls... well I don't know if anyone has ever really written a six-gun slinging heroine up. Most cowboy SFF is pretty silly, tho Valley of Gwangi had some good moments when they rope a tyrannosaurus and like that.
 
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Just as a reminder to us all, "its" always means "belonging to it" and "it's" always means "it is."
While totally agreeing with the sentiment, the pedant in me has to point out that it'ss (as well as he's and she's, although the unapostrophied versions of those would be rather strange plurals) can sometimes be a contraction of "it has" (as in "it's been a long time"), though the present predominates.

A second pedantic comment; a second's delay between the arrival of the bullet and the sound of the weapon? That's modern sniper weapons, with telescopic sights. Most civil war weapons, certainly with black-powder cartridges (you've mentioned the smoke, so it wasn't one of the smokeless powders, which only became available in quantity for the Winchester she was carrying in the 1890s, anyway) had a muzzle velocity below the speed of sound, and even assuming a craftsman piece which could achieve twice the speed of sound, about the limit for the metallurgy of the time, a second would indicate 450 ft distance, a lot for accuracy at that time.

And the Winchester was brought in after the end of the hostilities, so she wouldn't have been trained in the rapid reload techniques in the military.

And I'm no gun nut; a true connoisseur will be stricter on these details than a mere technical pedant.
 
Most cowboy SFF is pretty silly, tho Valley of Gwangi had some good moments when they rope a tyrannosaurus and like that.

The Dark Tower series is going well for me, so far.

In terms of female protagonists...if you put Brienne of Tarth (A Song of Ice and Fire) in a cowboy environment I think she'd be quite an interesting read.

Also, if there hasn't been much done in the way of cowgirls then that leaves a nice little niche for Joan to exploit :)
 
...being careful to grab the extra long reins

The extra long bit was strange for me. Is it important to her that they are extra long? Are they odd to her for some reason?

Something impacted the sand ahead of her and then the sky cracked loudly again.
Impacted is a bit highfalutin, I think, and misses an opp to be more visual. How about "hit and sprayed sand..."? (I think the run-on sentence works great here, but I'd drop the then after the and.)

She stopped, looked up at the rocks briefly and then she quickly came to her feet in a very low crouch, sprinted to the boulder, and wriggled down behind it, doing her best to crawl under the rock, though that proved as impossible as she had expected it to.

I don't think this run-on works nearly as well, so I'd put the comma in after briefly. Actually that is a lie. What I would do is break this big old sentence into a bunch of shorter, snappier sentences. Maybe some fragments even. This sort of action scene just works better with a staccato rhythm, I think.

No further shots came immediately and seconds ticked by. Lannister counted thirty and nothing happened.

Back to back run-ons. I've read enough of your feedback and posts to think these are intentional, and I think these both work, so I won't go on pointing them out unless they really fall flat for me. I'd still be all staccato here, myself, but that's a matter of style.

It was actually very lucky even this little boulder was here

Very. That's an ugly word, very. I'd cut it, if for no other reason, then to avoid back to back adverbs.

Damn, Damn, Damn, She thought. She had known she should have worked around this area, stayed in the rocks, maybe even went further North and tried to find a nice shady forest, though it was fat chance of that in this climate. But she was tired, and hungry, and wanted to get to Kingslin before nightfall.

Why the caps on the damns? And shouldn't they be italicized seeing that you italicize thoughts in the next paragraph? I don't think north should be capitalized either, not unless it's "the North." I like the name Kingslin. A lot.

And now thirsty, it came to her...

What came to her? Her thirst? This sentence is a bit awkward to my ear.


she thought uselessly.

This is a common enough phrase that I've never much cared for -- I just don't get how one can think uselessly.

She heard a soft pattering noise just above her and felt shards of hot rock land on her neck. A second later the sky cracked again.

Nice! Cept, I'd drop the "she heard." You've done a good job of getting close to character, and this just takes you back out. If there's a sound described, we know she heard it... same with felt.

He’s trying to flush me she thought, he's getting impatient..

As an aside, I think it's interesting that she automatically makes the (presumed) stranger a male! Hm. In her world, is a woman in her role so unordinary that she would jump straight away to assuming the person trying to kill her is male?

She assessed her situation. She had a full magazine of 7 shots in the Winchester and more in the ammo belt. She even had a loaded Colt in the holster at her side, a surprisingly good distance weapon though probably useless here. No problem with bullets.

The first sentence here is a bit of distancing narration prepended onto an otherwise excellent paragraph.

She chanced another look around the boulder’s edge. Her horse was still standing where it had been.

I'd go with a bit more description. Where had the horse been? Even a word or two, just to create a scene.

She brought the Winchester to her shoulder and shot underneath her animal, once and when it didn’t move, quickly once again. The animal shied and fled.

Calling the horse an animal is weirdly distancing, like she doesn't care about it at all. Which may work, but then, calling it "her animal"... I think that when we use a possessive pronoun in our thoughts to refer to something living, it's usually something we care about. I'd go with horse instead of animal throughout or switch to "the animal" for that one reference. (I know this is way nit picky. Just a thought.)

From a place on the high rocks a shot echoed out...
Sound doesn't echo out from its source. It echoes out from a reflecting surface. Maybe rang out?

She dived back around the boulder and reloaded with the clear and fast precision she’d been taught.

The end of this sounds awkward to my ear. I think you at least need to put the that in: "with the clear and fast precision that she’d been taught." Dived also pokes at my eyeballs, so even though it's proper english, I'd probably use dove.


After giving it another full minute for good measure she stood up and faced toward her so far invisible foe, keeping her weapon leveled.

Did she pull out her pocket watch to make sure it was a full minute? ;) I think the counting used earlier is much more effective: you can actually visualize her lips moving silently as she counts. Same with the two minutes below. It's just too exacting.

Strange looking, she thought as they approached. She wished she had the spyglass now still on her horse.

The now still jars. When you hit the word now, it means she wishes she now had the spyglass, but by the time you finish the sentence, now means the spyglass is currently with the horse. Still.

She still wore the Confederate butternut coat because it hid well the inconvenient fact she was a woman...

Aaand... my earlier question is answered! She is, indeed, in a non-traditional gender role.

This was fun to read. Furthermore, I suppose I could add that everything I've read of yours, be it a critique or post, has been well thought out and interesting to read.

I would say that, for me, the voice could stand to be much more terse. Plainly spoken. The action, staccato. Like Noir, Western material just fits that style so well.
 
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A second pedantic comment; a second's delay between the arrival of the bullet and the sound of the weapon? That's modern sniper weapons, with telescopic sights. Most civil war weapons, certainly with black-powder cartridges (you've mentioned the smoke, so it wasn't one of the smokeless powders, which only became available in quantity for the Winchester she was carrying in the 1890s, anyway) had a muzzle velocity below the speed of sound, and even assuming a craftsman piece which could achieve twice the speed of sound, about the limit for the metallurgy of the time, a second would indicate 450 ft distance, a lot for accuracy at that time.

And the Winchester was brought in after the end of the hostilities, so she wouldn't have been trained in the rapid reload techniques in the military.

This is the kinda feedback that makes me love this forum. Beautiful, beautiful knowledge. :)
 
Please do NOT take anthing I say in this post as an argument. I am only making some explanations in hopes I can find some way to save a character I've already found myself liking.




While totally agreeing with the sentiment, the pedant in me has to point out that it'ss (as well as he's and she's, although the unapostrophied versions of those would be rather strange plurals) can sometimes be a contraction of "it has" (as in "it's been a long time"), though the present predominates.

A second pedantic comment; a second's delay between the arrival of the bullet and the sound of the weapon? That's modern sniper weapons, with telescopic sights. Most civil war weapons, certainly with black-powder cartridges (you've mentioned the smoke, so it wasn't one of the smokeless powders, which only became available in quantity for the Winchester she was carrying in the 1890s, anyway) had a muzzle velocity below the speed of sound, and even assuming a craftsman piece which could achieve twice the speed of sound, about the limit for the metallurgy of the time, a second would indicate 450 ft distance, a lot for accuracy at that time.

And the Winchester was brought in after the end of the hostilities, so she wouldn't have been trained in the rapid reload techniques in the military.

And I'm no gun nut; a true connoisseur will be stricter on these details than a mere technical pedant.

Oh, how I truly wish you were a gun enthusiast. I desperately need a good book, (or preferably website, since I have no money and little library access), on the state of the art in marksmanship just before and just after the ACW, since this novel is intended to be largely based on that. The best description I can think of is she will play a character much like Tom Selleck in Quigley Down Under, except she's female, a lot younger, not a recognized champion, and has a lot more issues.

Didn't Custer have multishot repeaters at Gettysburg? And weren't they lever action Sharps?

She is supposedly a member of one of the special marksmanship battalions who disguised her sex so as to join the Confederates in a search for her husband after finding them needing good shots and willing to overlook her small stature and "odd" appearance. Her rifle would have to be a Sharps, taken from a dead Union. (Winchester is totally wrong, you're right. Overlooked in haste, sorry) I intend the battalion to be totally fictional.

Harry Turtledove got away with a disguised woman soldier as main character in Guns of the South, so I'm hoping to pull it off here.



The extra long bit was strange for me. Is it important to her that they are extra long? Are they odd to her for some reason?


Impacted is a bit highfalutin, I think, and misses an opp to be more visual. How about "hit and sprayed sand..."? (I think the run-on sentence works great here, but I'd drop the then after the and.)



I don't think this run-on works nearly as well, so I'd put the comma in after briefly. Actually that is a lie. What I would do is break this big old sentence into a bunch of shorter, snappier sentences. Maybe some fragments even. This sort of action scene just works better with a staccato rhythm, I think.



Back to back run-ons. I've read enough of your feedback and posts to think these are intentional, and I think these both work, so I won't go on pointing them out unless they really fall flat for me. I'd still be all staccato here, myself, but that's a matter of style.



Very. That's an ugly word, very. I'd cut it, if for no other reason, then to avoid back to back adverbs.



Why the caps on the damns? And shouldn't they be italicized seeing that you italicize thoughts in the next paragraph? I don't think north should be capitalized either, not unless it's "the North." I like the name Kingslin. A lot.



What came to her? Her thirst? This sentence is a bit awkward to my ear.




This is a common enough phrase that I've never much cared for -- I just don't get how one can think uselessly.



Nice! Cept, I'd drop the "she heard." You've done a good job of getting close to character, and this just takes you back out. If there's a sound described, we know she heard it... same with felt.



As an aside, I think it's interesting that she automatically makes the (presumed) stranger a male! Hm. In her world, is a woman in her role so unordinary that she would jump straight away to assuming the person trying to kill her is male?



The first sentence here is a bit of distancing narration prepended onto an otherwise excellent paragraph.



I'd go with a bit more description. Where had the horse been? Even a word or two, just to create a scene.



Calling the horse an animal is weirdly distancing, like she doesn't care about it at all. Which may work, but then, calling it "her animal"... I think that when we use a possessive pronoun in our thoughts to refer to something living, it's usually something we care about. I'd go with horse instead of animal throughout or switch to "the animal" for that one reference. (I know this is way nit picky. Just a thought.)


Sound doesn't echo out from its source. It echoes out from a reflecting surface. Maybe rang out?



The end of this sounds awkward to my ear. I think you at least need to put the that in: "with the clear and fast precision that she’d been taught." Dived also pokes at my eyeballs, so even though it's proper english, I'd probably use dove.




Did she pull out her pocket watch to make sure it was a full minute? ;) I think the counting used earlier is much more effective: you can actually visualize her lips moving silently as she counts. Same with the two minutes below. It's just too exacting.



The now still jars. When you hit the word now, it means she wishes she now had the spyglass, but by the time you finish the sentence, now means the spyglass is currently with the horse. Still.



Aaand... my earlier question is answered! She is, indeed, in a non-traditional gender role.

This was fun to read. Furthermore, I suppose I could add that everything I've read of yours, be it a critique or post, has been well thought out and interesting to read.

I would say that, for me, the voice could stand to be much more terse. Plainly spoken. The action, staccato. Like Noir, Western material just fits that style so well.

I definitely have to work on run ons as they're no conscious part of any "style" I have and I don't want them to be. It's difficult but trying, (then again, so am I:rolleyes: ) Everything else you and everyone else has said is right and gone already.

The praise in the second to last para of your critique was about the nicest and most encouraging thing anyone has said to me here or on even anyplace else yet. Thank you so very much.
 
Oh, how I truly wish you were a gun enthusiast. I desperately need a good book, (or preferably website, since I have no money and little library access), on the state of the art in marksmanship just before and just after the ACW, since this novel is intended to be largely based on that. The best description I can think of is she will play a character much like Tom Selleck in Quigley Down Under, except she's female, a lot younger, not a recognized champion, and has a lot more issues.

You are more likely to find specialists your side of the Atlantic; the British are not generally firearm savvy, and most Europeans know little of the American internal difficulties.

Baens bar, which I visit fairly frequently and to which I contribute occasionally, swarms with gun freaks of the "minié ball, load your own, percussion caps, take it down to the firing range and measure it" style, particularly in the 1632 bits (that is they're thre in the Weber Honorverse too, but more inton gravity shear and laser heads, where I can hold my own). Go in there and act the "damsel in distress", perhaps don't mention my name, and you'll have them swarming round you with titbits of information and delails my poor worn memory has never had reason to discover.
 
Sorry, I'm back. Talked to a friend of mine who has a Winchester on his wall (along with many guitars and a Japanese sword).

Can't be the Sharps; that was a single shot rifle (though breech loading), which would completely ruin your scene. The most likely culprits are:- the Henry repeating rifle

Type Lever-action rifle
Place*of*origin United States
Service history
Used*by United States (Union), CSA (Confederacy)
Wars American Civil War, Indian Wars
Production history
Designer Benjamin Tyler Henry
Designed 1860
Manufacturer New Haven Arms Company (which later became the Winchester Repeating Arms Company)
Produced 1850s to 1866
Number*built 14,000 approx.
Specifications
Weight 9 lb 4 oz
Length 44 3/4"
Barrel*length 29"
Caliber .44 Henry rimfire
Action breech-loading lever action
Rate*of*fire 28 rounds per min.
Feed*system 16 round tube magazine
Which , while never issued to the troops was frequently bought privately,
or the Spencer repeating rifle
Type Manually cocked Lever Action Rifle
Place*of*origin *United States
Service history
Used*by United States Army United States Navy Confederate States of America Japan
Wars American Civil War, Indian Wars, Boshin War
Production history
Designer Christopher Spencer
Designed 1860
Manufacturer Spencer company, Burnside Rifle Co, Winchester
Produced 1860–1869
Number*built 200,000 approx.
Specifications
Length 47 inches (1,200*mm) rifle with 30 in barrel
39.25 inches (997*mm) carbine with 22 in barrel[2]
Barrel*length 30 inches (760*mm) 22 inches (560*mm) 20 inches (510*mm)
Cartridge .56-56 Spencer rimfire
Caliber .52 inches (13*mm)
Action Manually cocked hammer, lever action
Rate*of*fire 14 or 20 rounds per minute[5]
Muzzle*velocity 931 to 1,033 ft/s (284 to 315 m/s)
Effective*range 500 yards
Feed*system 7 round tube magazine

For which the Confederacy was apparently unable to manufacture ammunition and which thus became useless to them as their original stocks dwindled. These were the ones used by Custer and the Michigan brigade at Gettysburg.

When later Custer was eliminated at the little Bighorn, the Indians (native Americans) were apparently armed with repeating rifles, while the US Cavalry, to encourage them to be parsimonious with their ammunition perhaps, had single-shot Springfield model 1873 carbines; the results suggest that the economy wasn't that effective.
 
Thank you so very much. This is precisely the kind of info I am looking for. Any more you come across will be greatly appreciated.

I have been to the sites you suggested and they have a wealth of information I am looking through at present. Thank you for them as well.

I have to echo Glisterspeck. I think this is the only writing site where I could get this kind of knowledge set just in the context I need it.
 
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