AnyaKimlin
Confuddled
I know I've asked this before but it was about a different story. The other one I solved by putting in a prologue. I suspect it might be my only solution here.
This one is I'm not sure what kind of fantasy - possibly urban/contemporary. My big issue is my main character is not my magic character and the magic only comes in once he starts to investigate his brother's disappearance and the death of a little girl that happened forty years ago.
I've got two families - the Creams and the Blacks. In about 1690 someone stole nine of fairy kings diamonds (I figured there were enough legends about why the Nine of Diamonds became the Curse of Scotland that one more wouldn't hurt) and he demanded certain conditions from the Cream family (landed gentry) who he believed stole them, including the sacrifice of their youngest child every fourth generation. I've managed to tie it into the Tay Bridge Disaster, Glasgow Banking Collapse and the Highland Famine. There are things involving demon possession & Witchcraft with the family.
The Blacks are baliffs, sherriffs, police officers etc that originally worked for a rival landed family and it was their job to "rescue" the child in danger so the Cream family will remain cursed.
Flash forward to 2013 and Ian Black is a retired police officer who knows nothing about this, initially. His ex wife slept around a bit and he knows two of his children are really his brothers. What he doesn't know is the head of the Cream family fathered another of his sons. His son is the youngest and the one supposed to be sacrificed.
The only "magiclike" characters on Ian's side of the battle are his missing brother the Roman Catholic Priest and the son who is a hippy type & artist.
I can't seem to make it seem like more than a mystery before chapter seven when he finds his father's diary with the family legends in it. There is plenty going on in the previous chapters which all at present appear to have a rational explanation.
Would you as a fantasy reader be satisfied if I just included a prologue based on the original events ? I'm just hoping posting it might shake some ideas loose.
This one is I'm not sure what kind of fantasy - possibly urban/contemporary. My big issue is my main character is not my magic character and the magic only comes in once he starts to investigate his brother's disappearance and the death of a little girl that happened forty years ago.
I've got two families - the Creams and the Blacks. In about 1690 someone stole nine of fairy kings diamonds (I figured there were enough legends about why the Nine of Diamonds became the Curse of Scotland that one more wouldn't hurt) and he demanded certain conditions from the Cream family (landed gentry) who he believed stole them, including the sacrifice of their youngest child every fourth generation. I've managed to tie it into the Tay Bridge Disaster, Glasgow Banking Collapse and the Highland Famine. There are things involving demon possession & Witchcraft with the family.
The Blacks are baliffs, sherriffs, police officers etc that originally worked for a rival landed family and it was their job to "rescue" the child in danger so the Cream family will remain cursed.
Flash forward to 2013 and Ian Black is a retired police officer who knows nothing about this, initially. His ex wife slept around a bit and he knows two of his children are really his brothers. What he doesn't know is the head of the Cream family fathered another of his sons. His son is the youngest and the one supposed to be sacrificed.
The only "magiclike" characters on Ian's side of the battle are his missing brother the Roman Catholic Priest and the son who is a hippy type & artist.
I can't seem to make it seem like more than a mystery before chapter seven when he finds his father's diary with the family legends in it. There is plenty going on in the previous chapters which all at present appear to have a rational explanation.
Would you as a fantasy reader be satisfied if I just included a prologue based on the original events ? I'm just hoping posting it might shake some ideas loose.