Confess your unusual phrasings...

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I was thinking recently about the use of unusual words, and that odd hate when a writer seemingly discovered some new obscure word and litters their entire manuscript with it.

It got me thinking about my own work, and my own use of words. I can't say I've ever been guilty of that particular crime (okay, maybe once or twice) but I did realise I have several word choices or phrasings that I prefer, that aren't perhaps the "standard" or "default" option.

Sometimes when I find myself putting in these unusual words I contemplate whether I should swap them out for a more "normal" one (as I did recently with the word "inconstant"), ever conscious of the crime cited above. Mostly, I leave them as is, as the "normal" options never seem to capture quite the same feeling, and I tend to go with instinct.

One of my most common examples is the use of "before" to mean "in front of". I find it much more succinct, and less disruptive to the flow of words than any of the more common options.

I can trace my tendency for this word back to high school though, and a single incident I retain a fond bitterness for. It was a photography test, and for one question we had to define "depth of field". Anyone who is familiar with photography will know that the definition of "depth of field" is that part of the image either side of the focus point, which is acceptably in focus.

For my answer I used "the part of the image before and behind the focus point". My teached marked me wrong on this question because it should have been "in front of and behind", and they were deaf to my claims that "before" was not limited to a temporal meaning.

I think perhaps, ever since I have used "before" to spite her!
 
Maybe not a writing pecadilloe, but I have a similar story from my childhood. At the age of seven, my teacher - Mrs Hughes - told me that I'd have to 'pull my socks up'. Not understanding metaphors at that age I wondered for ages what the elevation of my soft footwear had to do with anything and have worn my socks defiantly at half-mast ever since.
 
I tend to have one overused word per book. In one ot was 'gout' (as in gouts of blood'. in another it was 'capricious'

Try using Wordle - it gives you a great word picture o your novel and all those overused words really show up...
 
I have the same thing, my wife read one of my stories and picked up on a point where I'd used the same word about three times in the space of two paragraphs. I try to keep an eye out for it these days.

I'll give Wordle a look, see what it's all about. Thanks for that.
 
One of my most common examples is the use of "before" to mean "in front of". I find it much more succinct, and less disruptive to the flow of words than any of the more common options.

and they were deaf to my claims that "before" was not limited to a temporal meaning.

I think perhaps, ever since I have used "before" to spite her!

"Is this a dagger I see before me?"* :D

I can sympathize with that -- I would do the same thing, in your place!

I can't think of any of mine at the moment, but there are plenty.



*Dead Poets Society
 
I can always tell when I'm getting emotionally wound up. I start alliterating.
My favorite example is this one time, I was trying to explain how frustrating it was when I would loose the word I wanted mid-sentence, then stand their gibbering and gesticulating trying to recover. In impassioned tones I said "It's unbearable! I can feel the fail falling from my face and there's nothing I can do about it." which of course went counter to my point, but I solved that by deciding afterward to simply voice my fumbling for the sake of amusement and help.
On point, I recently asked my mom for a "Hand un-wet-er" as I had forgotten the word "towel" which she then brought up at dinner when I tried to correct my son's speech pattern. Using the wrong tense of the right word was alwably preferable to forgetting words all together. But I thought it a very low blow for her to try and discredit me in my child's eyes.
 
Trailed. We use it very differently here, like we trail people from the room to indicate how you'd take a child home. So not actually the physical action of trailing if that makes sense. I have a collection of ? From betas.
 
'Before' does mean 'in front of' doesn't it? :confused:

Erm. Caught myself using the word 'gurt' (very West Country word meaning 'great' but 'great' as in terms of size, not uh... greatness) in my YA stuff and had to delete it.

I used to, but have managed to stop myself since it was pointed out to me on this very site a few years ago in crits, do backwards sentences. Again, a very West Country thing. (Polish friend told me I sound like Pirate Yoda).

I fancy I use the word 'fancy' a lot. Also 'little,' 'pretty' and 'wondering/wondered/wonder.'
 
Tatterdemalion, meaning a scruffy ragamuffin. I heard it in the lyrics of Fairy Feller's Master Stroke (by Queen) and used it in both books to date, I think.

It can be hard to guess what some consider unusual, though. I was surprised when one chap included 'immolated' in a list of unusual words.
 
It can be hard to guess what some consider unusual, though. I was surprised when one chap included 'immolated' in a list of unusual words.

Sometimes unusual words work better than "standard" ones. Just beware of the Stephen Donaldson syndrome displayed in the Thomas Covenant Chronicles.
 
I take it he used obscure terms to an excessive degree?
 
Try using Wordle - it gives you a great word picture o your novel and all those overused words really show up...

KMQ, I can't thank you enough for this... not for my MS... I have been developing flyers for next years training in Ghana and the word cloud thing is amazing. I now have all the participants' vests/tees designed. I am so made up I can't describe it. :D:cool: Seriously.

As far as my overuse of words go, I am not sure. I have not been told by any of my readers (as in betas and critiquers, not bona fide reader-readers) that I favour certain words, but I have been told from time to time my writing is overly plummy (english-y) or formal.

My favourite author, Michael McDowell tended to use a word which then overpopulates the pages for a while before disappearing. In my favourite book of his (or, indeed, ever), The Elementals, he repeatedly uses 'illumined' which drove me doolally first time round. It sounded so prissy. :mad:

pH
 
Here's my Wordle:

MM_Wordle


http://www.wordle.net/show/wrdl/6976883/MM_Wordle


I guess that makes my MC's name pretty obvious.

I'm not sure about any of my weird phrasings, though I tend to write with a bit of a formal structure. I suppose the only one I can pick out from the wordle is the use of "still" to mean "quiet."
 

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