Gawian
Starforger
In my story, I have a block of conversation between two characters. Still very WIP at the moment. I have some questions about grammar and formatting.
Here's an excerpt from the conversation.
I'm wondering if I have to use new paragraphs each time the other person starts to talk?
Also, I read somewhere that if you have speech before the rest of the sentence, you have to end the speech with a comma rather than a period, even if you don't plan on continuing the sentence.
For example, seeing that as above, do I have to turn it into this....
Here's an excerpt from the conversation.
“Kale. It’s good to see you after so long. Even in this… particular set up.” His voice was smooth, with every syllable pronounced, but it didn’t hide the worry in his voice. Ryjack was a scientist. Not used to being around such, ruthless conditions.
“Ryan Jackson. Of all the people in the galaxy I never expected to see here, you were top of the list.” Kale stated.
Ryjack turned back to the window. His shoulders slumped. “I almost didn’t come. I couldn’t think of a reason to come here. But I did anyway.”
Kale didn’t move. He looked up and down his old friend, seeing the dataslate in his hand. “Can’t exactly blame you. I take it no-one knows you’re here.”
Ryan turned around, “No. I don’t think the Alliance would approve of a lead researcher meeting their old friend turned crime lord.”
Kale scoffed, “Crime lord might be a strong title. I know that’s what the Alliance media calls me, but I just run an organisation. No different from Parliament.”
“Except your organisation kills people. Steals objects. Deals in slavery.”
Kale sighed, “I take it you didn’t just come here to scold me. So what do you want Ryjack?”
I'm wondering if I have to use new paragraphs each time the other person starts to talk?
Also, I read somewhere that if you have speech before the rest of the sentence, you have to end the speech with a comma rather than a period, even if you don't plan on continuing the sentence.
For example, seeing that as above, do I have to turn it into this....
“Kale. It’s good to see you after so long. Even in this… particular set up,” His voice was smooth, with every syllable pronounced, but it didn’t hide the worry in his voice. Ryjack was a scientist. Not used to being around such, ruthless conditions.
“Ryan Jackson. Of all the people in the galaxy I never expected to see here, you were top of the list,” Kale stated.
Ryjack turned back to the window. His shoulders slumped. “I almost didn’t come. I couldn’t think of a reason to come here. But I did anyway.”
Kale didn’t move. He looked up and down his old friend, seeing the dataslate in his hand. “Can’t exactly blame you. I take it no-one knows you’re here.”
Ryan turned around, “No. I don’t think the Alliance would approve of a lead researcher meeting their old friend turned crime lord.”
Kale scoffed, “Crime lord might be a strong title. I know that’s what the Alliance media calls me, but I just run an organisation. No different from Parliament.”
“Except your organisation kills people. Steals objects. Deals in slavery.”
Kale sighed, “I take it you didn’t just come here to scold me. So what do you want Ryjack?”