Help with third person limited

[Pinkst3r4U]

I'm writing my first novel and recently read an article distinguishing the difference between 3rdOmniscient and 3rdLimited. It explained not to include your primary character's blush but what about the following?

Doran slumped his shoulders with relief at having his memory spurred and everything leading to his current situation reemerged darkening his countenance.

Would using 'darkening his countenance' be 3rd Omniscient?

 

[Fishbowl Helmet]

Welcome to the Chrons.

Probably. In that sentence you're both inside this character's head (describing their thoughts) and outside the character's head (literally describing the look on their face).

Omniscient means you can be inside anyone's head, but you don't have to be. You can also be outside everyone's head and just describe what's happening.

Limited means you can only be inside one character's head at a time, and only explain the world through their POV.

 

[Pinkst3r4U]

Welcome to the Chrons.

Probably. In that sentence you're both inside this character's head (describing their thoughts) and outside the character's head (literally describing the look on their face).

Omniscient means you can be inside anyone's head, but you don't have to be. You can also be outside everyone's head and just describe what's happening.

Limited means you can only be inside one character's head at a time, and only explain the world through their POV.

I forgot to mention I'm doing 3rd limited so I wanted to make sure that part wasn't omniscient.

 

[Brian G Turner]

Welcome to chronicles.

The point about Third Person Limited is that you are in the character's experience. That means you don't see how they look - you experience what they feel.

In the example you gave:

Doran slumped his shoulders with relief at having his memory spurred and everything leading to his current situation reemerged darkening his countenance.

you are providing a visual cue, rather than a sensory feeling. Therefore I would personally advise that you consider editing it accordingly.

Hope that helps.

 

[Pinkst3r4U]

T

Welcome to chronicles.

The point about Third Person Limited is that you are in the character's experience. That means you don't see how they look - you experience what they feel.

In the example you gave:



you are providing a visual cue, rather than a sensory feeling. Therefore I would personally advise that you consider editing it accordingly.

Hope that helps.

I felt so but I wanted to be certain thank you!

 

[AnyaKimlin]

his cheeks burned and he knew, yet again, they were turning bright red.

Something like that is in his head.

 

[Pinkst3r4U]

Thank you!

 

[Shyrka]

his cheeks burned and he knew, yet again, they were turning bright red.

Something like that is in his head.

I was going to suggest something similar.