Under Elysiums Light (Intro/Frontispiece/Prologue/Whatever)

[Perpetual Man]

Although life (and death) has grabbed Perp by the scruff of the neck and has forced him to withdraw (mostly) from the Chrons, he thought he would show he is still around and even able to muddle around with stuff every once in a while. Why he is speaking of himself in the third person is beyond him. Me. Whatever.


Attention all people of the planet Earth. You stand witness to the dawn of a new age, not just for a few, but for the entire population of our planet.

The last few days have seen terrible, necessary tragedy; but with the end of conflict we can look ahead to a new era. This is a time of great change but for this moment please be aware:

As of now all governments are hereby ordered to disband; any such bodies continuing to protest their sovereign rights to their country will be removed by force; any military organisations belonging to these countries are now ordered to return home and wait there for orders from the new command structure.

Earth Force will take charge of all governing duties, all military duties, all policing duties. All further restructuring will be announced over the coming days. The entire planet is now one nation and is to consider itself under martial law until told otherwise.

We will eliminate crime, poverty, famine, greed and all other forms of injustice that plague our world.

Once more: Attention all people of the planet Earth; this is Earth Force: We have assumed control... we have assumed control.

 

[Brian G Turner]

This flirts with being an infodump, but luckily avoids any recounting of backstory. It's an effective opening for the first page of a book - it sets context, setting, genre.

The one niggle is the term "Earth Force" - the term gives the image of peoples of earth coming together behind one organisation, whereas I suspect yours is somewhat more shadowy and a little unpalatable. Maybe some variation of the term so it sounds more like an administrative designation rather than a band of heroic figures. Unless that's your intention...

 

[Perpetual Man]

Thanks Brian, as always helpful words. And that was exactly my intention....

 

[Adam Collins]

As an opening, it grabbed my attention. It was a bit monotonous and monotone in delivery, but that is exactly how officialdom relays information and therefore the scene works. I would suggest adding quotation marks to the voice. I was left wanting to know more...

 

[Perpetual Man]

Thank you kindly Adam