TonyHarmsworth
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It is a shame the chapter is too long to be put here in full, but I've put half a chapter below.
This is a story I've had in mind since about 1980 and is based close to where we live as a friend said I should write a novel about a place I knew really well.
I haven't done any 'word loss' editing on this yet.
This is a type of post-apocalyptic story, but has a serious difference which I believe to be unique to this type of storyline. There is no explanation of what has happened. That comes later.
**** CHAPTER 1a ****
Mark levered himself upwards over the vertical chassis of the Ford Transit van which blocked the road.
Nothing.
"All quiet?"
"Since yesterday, Mark. They could be trying to make their way up and over the top of the hill, though."
"Yes, we've warned the MacKenzies and they'll keep alert. I'll pop in to see them on the way back. There were only one or two, you think?"
The older man eased himself downwards until he could drop to the road. "Yes. Come see," he grunted as he fell the last fifteen inches onto the tarmac.
Mark, in the prime of life, scrambled more agilely to the tarmac and waited while Calum MacKintosh, straightened up his aging body, pushing a hand into the small of his back as if to help his spine remember the time when it was once young and straight. Nevertheless, he was patently a once fearsome individual, excelling at the 'heavy' events in the Highland Games in the past. There was a time when he could lift a tree and toss it cartwheeling across the games field. Long ago, now, but the essence of his steadfastness still emanated from him. One shovel-like hand retrieved his .22 rifle from the ground while the other gripped a sturdy staff he had lent against the barricade. He used it to steady himself as he limped towards the pastel green and white touring caravan parked hard against the rock face.
The younger man overtook Calum and opened the door. Inside they sat either side of the table, almost salivating to the aroma and crackle of cooking sausages. Mrs. MacKintosh's bulk filled the narrow passage to the right as she fussed over the bangers, skilfully cracking five eggs into the second pan, wiping spilled albumen on the apron which protected an old-fashioned tweed skirt.
"You'll take a bite with us, Mark?" she queried.
"Aye, Mrs. MacKintosh. It'd be very welcome."
"Keep your voices down. Jim's asleep at the back," she said.
Calum turned the laptop so that they could both see the screen. The image showed the view along the road from the barricade. The time-code showed 10:12am. A light coloured pick-up truck appeared from around a distant bend in the road. When the driver saw the barricade he must have slammed on the brakes. It came to a halt, smoke rising from the rear wheels.
At 10:15am two men emerged from the vehicle, each carrying a police riot shield.
"Is there any sound?"
"No lad, but it is about now I shouted for them to say who they were, what they wanted and where they were from."
A puff of smoke was visible from a rifle pulled to the shoulder of the passenger. A second shot was fired and they ran back to the vehicle and reversed it beyond the bend.
"You didn't fire back?"
"No, they just vamoosed."
"Nothing else on the video?"
"Yes, keep watching." The two men peered at the screen.
"There, d'you see that? They're both peeking around the cliff face. I shouted to them to come forward and explain who they were and what they wanted, but they disappeared from view and we've not seen hide nor hair of them since."
"Here y'are. Get that inside you," said Mrs. MacKintosh, placing two steaming plates of egg, sausages and fried potatoes in front of the men. Calum shuffled along the seat to give her space to join them and they both needed a lot of space compared with their more athletic looking guest.
The video returned to a live view from the barricade, showing the road at the centre running into the distance until it disappeared around the jutting cliff. The rock face was about eighty or a hundred feet high. Above that was a forest of larch and spruce which extended several hundred feet up the hillside. To the left the precipitous rock face continued downwards to the surface of the loch, covered in birch, hazel, rowan and ash. The barricade had been well placed to stop anyone from coming from the direction of Fort Augustus or Skye.
Lunch finished, Mark stood to go, Mrs. MacKintosh got up and took the plates to the other end of the caravan and Calum eased himself out from the confinement between the table and seat.
"I'll be sending half a dozen men along this afternoon, Calum."
"Nah, we don't really need them. I'm enough with young Will and Jim."
The aforementioned Will, a twenty year-old well-built man was sitting atop a mechanical digger, watching the road over the barrier.
"We can always blow the rock face if needs be."
"Rather safe than sorry, Calum. We don't want to permanently block the road yet in case we want to raid the Fort again, so last resort. Anything you need from Drum Mrs MacKintosh?"
She thrust a small sheet of paper into Mark's hand. "That's a list. Thanks."
The younger man scanned it briefly then left the caravan, stopping in the doorway to say his goodbyes and to remind them to call if there were any further sign of the strangers.
Mark mounted his 50cc motorbike, kick-started it and headed along the A82 road away from the barricade and towards Drumnadrochit. Loch Ness was moody today, its surface gunmetal grey and with low cloud skimming the tops of the southern hills. Mark enjoyed the wind in his face, but his hands were cold. Autumn would soon deepen into a Highland winter.
He'd barely travelled a mile when he turned up a steep, narrow single-track road to the left. The barely standing wooden sign at the bottom said 'MacKenzie Boglashin'.
****
Sorry, no hook to read on here as it is only half way through the chapter.
This is a story I've had in mind since about 1980 and is based close to where we live as a friend said I should write a novel about a place I knew really well.
I haven't done any 'word loss' editing on this yet.
This is a type of post-apocalyptic story, but has a serious difference which I believe to be unique to this type of storyline. There is no explanation of what has happened. That comes later.
**** CHAPTER 1a ****
Mark levered himself upwards over the vertical chassis of the Ford Transit van which blocked the road.
Nothing.
"All quiet?"
"Since yesterday, Mark. They could be trying to make their way up and over the top of the hill, though."
"Yes, we've warned the MacKenzies and they'll keep alert. I'll pop in to see them on the way back. There were only one or two, you think?"
The older man eased himself downwards until he could drop to the road. "Yes. Come see," he grunted as he fell the last fifteen inches onto the tarmac.
Mark, in the prime of life, scrambled more agilely to the tarmac and waited while Calum MacKintosh, straightened up his aging body, pushing a hand into the small of his back as if to help his spine remember the time when it was once young and straight. Nevertheless, he was patently a once fearsome individual, excelling at the 'heavy' events in the Highland Games in the past. There was a time when he could lift a tree and toss it cartwheeling across the games field. Long ago, now, but the essence of his steadfastness still emanated from him. One shovel-like hand retrieved his .22 rifle from the ground while the other gripped a sturdy staff he had lent against the barricade. He used it to steady himself as he limped towards the pastel green and white touring caravan parked hard against the rock face.
The younger man overtook Calum and opened the door. Inside they sat either side of the table, almost salivating to the aroma and crackle of cooking sausages. Mrs. MacKintosh's bulk filled the narrow passage to the right as she fussed over the bangers, skilfully cracking five eggs into the second pan, wiping spilled albumen on the apron which protected an old-fashioned tweed skirt.
"You'll take a bite with us, Mark?" she queried.
"Aye, Mrs. MacKintosh. It'd be very welcome."
"Keep your voices down. Jim's asleep at the back," she said.
Calum turned the laptop so that they could both see the screen. The image showed the view along the road from the barricade. The time-code showed 10:12am. A light coloured pick-up truck appeared from around a distant bend in the road. When the driver saw the barricade he must have slammed on the brakes. It came to a halt, smoke rising from the rear wheels.
At 10:15am two men emerged from the vehicle, each carrying a police riot shield.
"Is there any sound?"
"No lad, but it is about now I shouted for them to say who they were, what they wanted and where they were from."
A puff of smoke was visible from a rifle pulled to the shoulder of the passenger. A second shot was fired and they ran back to the vehicle and reversed it beyond the bend.
"You didn't fire back?"
"No, they just vamoosed."
"Nothing else on the video?"
"Yes, keep watching." The two men peered at the screen.
"There, d'you see that? They're both peeking around the cliff face. I shouted to them to come forward and explain who they were and what they wanted, but they disappeared from view and we've not seen hide nor hair of them since."
"Here y'are. Get that inside you," said Mrs. MacKintosh, placing two steaming plates of egg, sausages and fried potatoes in front of the men. Calum shuffled along the seat to give her space to join them and they both needed a lot of space compared with their more athletic looking guest.
The video returned to a live view from the barricade, showing the road at the centre running into the distance until it disappeared around the jutting cliff. The rock face was about eighty or a hundred feet high. Above that was a forest of larch and spruce which extended several hundred feet up the hillside. To the left the precipitous rock face continued downwards to the surface of the loch, covered in birch, hazel, rowan and ash. The barricade had been well placed to stop anyone from coming from the direction of Fort Augustus or Skye.
Lunch finished, Mark stood to go, Mrs. MacKintosh got up and took the plates to the other end of the caravan and Calum eased himself out from the confinement between the table and seat.
"I'll be sending half a dozen men along this afternoon, Calum."
"Nah, we don't really need them. I'm enough with young Will and Jim."
The aforementioned Will, a twenty year-old well-built man was sitting atop a mechanical digger, watching the road over the barrier.
"We can always blow the rock face if needs be."
"Rather safe than sorry, Calum. We don't want to permanently block the road yet in case we want to raid the Fort again, so last resort. Anything you need from Drum Mrs MacKintosh?"
She thrust a small sheet of paper into Mark's hand. "That's a list. Thanks."
The younger man scanned it briefly then left the caravan, stopping in the doorway to say his goodbyes and to remind them to call if there were any further sign of the strangers.
Mark mounted his 50cc motorbike, kick-started it and headed along the A82 road away from the barricade and towards Drumnadrochit. Loch Ness was moody today, its surface gunmetal grey and with low cloud skimming the tops of the southern hills. Mark enjoyed the wind in his face, but his hands were cold. Autumn would soon deepen into a Highland winter.
He'd barely travelled a mile when he turned up a steep, narrow single-track road to the left. The barely standing wooden sign at the bottom said 'MacKenzie Boglashin'.
****
Sorry, no hook to read on here as it is only half way through the chapter.