What a Joe Abercrombie rough draft looks like

[Brian G Turner]

Joe Abercrombie has posted a page from a rough draft of his current WIP on Twitter - good to see even bestselling authors are constantly correcting and rewriting.
Joe Abercrombie on Twitter

 

[J Riff]

Look,he shifts a pargraph up a few paragraphs and deletes lines. Handwrit corrections, this is from ancient times. )

 

[Brian G Turner]

An interesting exchange:
Joe Abercrombie on Twitter

You need a comma after 'now' in para 3 and after 'soot' near the end. Sorry; linguist with a punctuation obsession!

I feel the slightly confusing run-on quality conveys the panic of the character. For me, emotion beats clarity in this case.