Antemurale
Member
Hello!
I am writing a story that can be summarized as speculative historical science fiction. It takes place in deep time, ranging to the recent past. I am achieving this by presenting the story as a series of "primary" sources that detail efforts by non-humans to genetically engineer a species to serve them in a bureaucratic role. Put simply, my story as I envision it does not have a traditional narrative structure. The reader is meant to construct their own narrative through the progress outlined in the "primary" sources with sparse exposition.
However, detailing the characteristics of the non-humans up front and presenting the story in a linear fashion spoils the end of the story. So I thought I would skip right to what I call the experiment logs, and then introduce one of the engineered individuals a few chapters in to take over as a scribe for ongoing experiments and to detail the events that led to his creation, as well as the events yet to come after the experiments end.
However, the non-humans in this universe are wholly non-human - lacking concepts like self and identity, war, deception, and the value of life. They do not express themselves as individuals. They have no names. They have no personalities. They are conduits for information. As a result, the first several chapters - insofar as that word applies - read as cold and impersonal.
Due to this, my problem is that I don't have a solid hook. When I gave the first experiment log consisting of 3 sections, or chapters I suppose, to a few people to give me their thoughts, I did get the desired "what happens next" but also a few of them were concerned with what can be best summed up as "who are these people and why do I care?"
So my question then is how do I humanize the inhuman, without making them too human and shattering the illusion, while at the same time maintaining the in media res approach, which I am quite satisfied with.
I am writing a story that can be summarized as speculative historical science fiction. It takes place in deep time, ranging to the recent past. I am achieving this by presenting the story as a series of "primary" sources that detail efforts by non-humans to genetically engineer a species to serve them in a bureaucratic role. Put simply, my story as I envision it does not have a traditional narrative structure. The reader is meant to construct their own narrative through the progress outlined in the "primary" sources with sparse exposition.
However, detailing the characteristics of the non-humans up front and presenting the story in a linear fashion spoils the end of the story. So I thought I would skip right to what I call the experiment logs, and then introduce one of the engineered individuals a few chapters in to take over as a scribe for ongoing experiments and to detail the events that led to his creation, as well as the events yet to come after the experiments end.
However, the non-humans in this universe are wholly non-human - lacking concepts like self and identity, war, deception, and the value of life. They do not express themselves as individuals. They have no names. They have no personalities. They are conduits for information. As a result, the first several chapters - insofar as that word applies - read as cold and impersonal.
Due to this, my problem is that I don't have a solid hook. When I gave the first experiment log consisting of 3 sections, or chapters I suppose, to a few people to give me their thoughts, I did get the desired "what happens next" but also a few of them were concerned with what can be best summed up as "who are these people and why do I care?"
So my question then is how do I humanize the inhuman, without making them too human and shattering the illusion, while at the same time maintaining the in media res approach, which I am quite satisfied with.