Guttersnipe
mortal ally
@Joshua Jones @BT Jones @MatthewKonerth @sule @TheEndIsNigh @msstice
I have finished the redraft. This is no longer the same story. I am breaking it down into parts because typing on a PS4 taxes me.
2122 A.D.
"Dad," the young girl asked, "What's a Capricorn?"
The man put his arm around her as they rocked slowly on the swinging bench.
"There's only one Capricorn, dear," he answered, "and he's a sea goat. And therein lies a tale from Greek mythology."
For a while, they rocked in silence.
"Tell me the story, please," she said, "Greeks worshipped Zeus, right?"
Her father feigned astonishment.
"You're a smart girl, Lora. Only in second grade and you know about Hellenismos!"
"Huh?" The girl cocked her head. Her father chuckled.
"Well, maybe not too much. Capricorn--let's see. There once was, according to the Greeks, a god named Cronos. He was the god of time. He
made a sea goat, the first one, and his name was Pricus. Now Pricus could rewind time, just like his creator. He had children. These children were
smart, too--just like you. But they wanted to go on land."
"Why?" Lora asked. Her father shrugged.
"Why do cats like to sit at windows? So, the little sea goats crawled onto land. When they were on land, they became regular goats. They were no
longer smart, and could no longer speak. So Pricus rewinded time. But even when he did this, his children would choose land over sea. Pricus was
lonely. He was also immortal. He couldn't bear to spend eternity without his children. So Cronos took him and threw him up into the stars. Now he
can see his children no matter where they are. That's who Capricorn is."
Lora smiled to herself and watched the stars with her father in pleasant silence.
"Rewind time," she thought...
I have finished the redraft. This is no longer the same story. I am breaking it down into parts because typing on a PS4 taxes me.
2122 A.D.
"Dad," the young girl asked, "What's a Capricorn?"
The man put his arm around her as they rocked slowly on the swinging bench.
"There's only one Capricorn, dear," he answered, "and he's a sea goat. And therein lies a tale from Greek mythology."
For a while, they rocked in silence.
"Tell me the story, please," she said, "Greeks worshipped Zeus, right?"
Her father feigned astonishment.
"You're a smart girl, Lora. Only in second grade and you know about Hellenismos!"
"Huh?" The girl cocked her head. Her father chuckled.
"Well, maybe not too much. Capricorn--let's see. There once was, according to the Greeks, a god named Cronos. He was the god of time. He
made a sea goat, the first one, and his name was Pricus. Now Pricus could rewind time, just like his creator. He had children. These children were
smart, too--just like you. But they wanted to go on land."
"Why?" Lora asked. Her father shrugged.
"Why do cats like to sit at windows? So, the little sea goats crawled onto land. When they were on land, they became regular goats. They were no
longer smart, and could no longer speak. So Pricus rewinded time. But even when he did this, his children would choose land over sea. Pricus was
lonely. He was also immortal. He couldn't bear to spend eternity without his children. So Cronos took him and threw him up into the stars. Now he
can see his children no matter where they are. That's who Capricorn is."
Lora smiled to herself and watched the stars with her father in pleasant silence.
"Rewind time," she thought...