I annoyed myself by using the word "suddenly" everywhere. I then disciplined myself and stopped using the word. It has been hard and I feel that I do want to convey suddenness fairly often. How do you folks do it?
“But what if I kill her?” Kit shouted. For the first time she expressed her biggest fear. She ate the last of Dizzy’s pie and wiped her hands on her school uniform skirt. The fear of what she might have done this morning consumed her as she put her fiddle to her chin.
Laurel and Hardy dressed in brightly coloured legwarmers and jangly bangles, appeared in front of her and her heart jumped.
“She said she was going to kill me. Did you hear her?” said the fat one.
“Yeah, I did. How scary is that?” said the thin one.
The man listened, tapped his foot and for a moment Kit thought he was going to let the music take him. His expression was like the one her mum wore when Kit played. He shook himself, stopped his foot tapping and stared at Kit. He tipped his hat and walked away.
A knock pulled Kit back into her bedroom.
She checked her alarm clock and sighed. She hid the book under the pillow and went to open the window. Stale smoke, sea air and a faint whiff of bad drains hung in the frosty air.
I agree it can be overused - like any other word - but I also think it's one of those handy invisible words
You do need them sometimes though.
He could not analyse the sound, but the fact that there was any sound at all in such a place at such an hour increased his suspicions that dark doings were toward which would pay for investigation. With stealthy steps he crept to the head of the stairs and descended.
One uses the verb “descend” advisedly, for what is required is some word suggesting instantaneous activity. About Baxter’s progress from the second floor to the first there was nothing halting or hesitating. He, so to speak, did it now. Planting his foot firmly on a golf-ball which the Hon. Freddie Threepwood, who had been practising putting in the corridor before retiring to bed, had left in his casual fashion just where the steps began, he took the entire staircase in one majestic, volplaning sweep. There were eleven stairs in all separating his landing from the landing below, and the only ones he hit were the third and tenth. He came to rest with a squattering thud on the lower landing, and for a moment or two the fever of the chase left him.
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