The Bloated One
Well-Known Member
Hi Everyone,
Sorry if this sounds confusing. I am writing in the third person, but for one sentence I add a narrator's omniscient comment. Is this grammatically correct? The sentence is in italics. See below;
Background - It's about time travel, one of the ships is a camper van the other a Peterbilt lorry. They're landing by a lake
Kent settled the camper van next to Georgia’s Peterbilt rig by the lake, hidden within her ship’s cloaking shield.
“Georgia Blade!” Enthused Tratchett, “I really should interview her. Remember the last time we met her!”
Kent certainly did.
Opening the camper-van door, Tratchett was met by a wart encrusted face, a trilby hat and the barrel of a Higgs Bosun pointing at him.
TBO
Sorry if this sounds confusing. I am writing in the third person, but for one sentence I add a narrator's omniscient comment. Is this grammatically correct? The sentence is in italics. See below;
Background - It's about time travel, one of the ships is a camper van the other a Peterbilt lorry. They're landing by a lake
Kent settled the camper van next to Georgia’s Peterbilt rig by the lake, hidden within her ship’s cloaking shield.
“Georgia Blade!” Enthused Tratchett, “I really should interview her. Remember the last time we met her!”
Kent certainly did.
Opening the camper-van door, Tratchett was met by a wart encrusted face, a trilby hat and the barrel of a Higgs Bosun pointing at him.
TBO