Guttersnipe
mortal ally
I wrote a psychological horror story for Spooky Season. What are your thoughts? Anything I need to correct? Should I extend it? The idea behind my other story, "The Wrong Bus," is on the back burner (maybe it'll become a creepypasta at some point once I've made more corrections and given it more distinguishing characteristics) for now, so I'm more interested in your thoughts on this one.
"A Clown at Midnight" It was a dark November night when someone knocked on Wendy's door. Wendy, middle-aged and now positively spooked by the intrusion into her quiet routine, looked out her window. Her fears were confirmed; there was a policeman at the door. She'd grown up associating the police with tragedy. She opened the door nonetheless. She recognized the tall, handsome policeman as Officer Kersh, and her anxiety relented somewhat. Officer Kersh had always been kindly to her. She smiled awkwardly at him. "Evening, ma'am," he said, "I've been going around the neighborhood, letting people know that the...uh...Killer Clown is still at large, and has been reported as being seen in your area. You've heard about this?" "Yes, I have," she said, "Such a wicked man. He's been killing women and children, I've heard." "Yes, he has," said Kersh, who seemed a bit nervous himself, "Well, if you see anything unusual, you call us. It's good to see you, Wendy, but I have to go. Stay warm and stay safe." Wendy nodded and closed the door against the frigid wind after watching Kersh walk back into the darkness. She sat on her couch, found the remote, and turned on the TV. Night of the Living Dead, one of her favorite horror films, was on Syfy. During a commercial, she put a bag of popcorn in the microwave. She went to the window to close the curtains for the night. What she saw through the window nearly made her heart cease its beating. Outside, on the other side of the narrow road, lit only by a dull streetlamp, stood a clown--one with a gaudy orange wig, a white, red-nosed mask, a blue jumpsuit, and absurdly large shoes. In one hand, he held a gleaming knife stained with what Wendy knew was blood. His empty, black eyes seemed to regard her balefully. The clown was still as a statue, his knife raised in stabbing position. It occurred to Wendy to scream, but she didn't. Instead, she stared back at the macabre stranger for a few moments. Then, as if it would could him to vanish, she pulled down the curtains. She went to the phone, then remembered, damn it, that she hadn't paid the phone bill. She realized her negligence had trapped her, and desperately thought of running out. But he was out there, and she was sure he would kill her. Wendy stepped quickly over to the curtains again and peeked out. She swore. The clown had moved a few feet closer, his eyes, or lack thereof, focused on her. She rushed into the kitchen to retrieve a knife--she'd never owned a firearm. Perhaps she could convince the masquerader that she was crazier than he was. She tore open the door as if it were a Band-Aid to be discarded. The clown resumed its stance. "Hey," she barked, "Get out of here! Now!" He didn't budge. She stepped closer. Something curious happened. The clown trembled and dropped the knife, throwing up both hands. "No, please!" he cried as Wendy approached tentatively. She stopped. The creeper sounded like a kid. He tore off his mask, revealing a youthful face. "It's a prank!" he said, and his gestures indicating another direction, "They paid me ten bucks to scare you! I'm sorry!" The teenager seemed to not need any more encouragement to leave and ran off. Wendy, still on an adrenaline rush, stood there for several moments, then went back inside, slamming the door and locking it again. She sighed. It was all over. Perhaps she'd let the policeman's warning get to her. Strange, she thought. She looked at her knife as she twisted it in the air, smiling. There was a moan coming from her bedroom. She strolled up to her room and opened the door. The man on the bed, gagged and secured there by agonizingly tight ropes, mumbled what was meant to be a scream. Wendy put on her clown wig and red nose. The man's eyes widened impossibly. "We're going to have some fun, aren't we?" Wendy said. |
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