Universe_Man89
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Hey, I'm like new to the site here, and would like a little feedback on a story I did in school at the beginning of this year. Tell me what you think of it, like the underlying messeges, is it coherent? Tell me what I could do to perhaps make it better, more streamlined, dynamic.... Thanks alot, great to be here!
Twenty thousand years from our present day, Mankind has continued to survive and overcome many obstacles that would have wiped out any lesser sentient race. Throughout the years, scientific understanding as well as technology advanced astronomically, and the human race became the masters of nature. The everyday problems of present day man had been rendered less than trivial for these fortunate descendants. Man was on the verge of complete technological ascension; they became the Gods that they once believed in, and nothing was out of reach. All of this was the product of humanity's most insatiable thirst for knowledge, which led them to a final question; one that would be considered the ultimate pinnacle of human achievement and understanding: Why does the universe exist, and where does its true origins lie, in effect, existance?
Finding the ultimate truth, as it had become known, became the personal drive and purpose for every human's now immortal life. Time passed, as it always had, hundreds of years became thousands, which in turn became millions. Finally, after two million years of research, study and experimenting, a final conlusion was reached. If there were a supreme creator of this grand design called the universe, where had that creator come from? If the universe sprung from a singularity of infinite mass billions of years ago, what happend before then? Do such questions even have meaning? With every possible explanation, there was a question mark on the other side of the equation. This was when the realization was made; the universe is undefined. The universe was infinity, something of nothing, a nonexistant quantity. The true origins and the "Ultimate truth" could never be known.
Due to the shock of this ultimate revelation, the human race as a whole stopped, and lay inert. They could not die, although there was no reason to live, and they didn't. There was essentially no longer initiative for life, as there was nothing left to understand. Humanity remained unthinking and unmoving from that day, and due to thier exploitation of nature, were condemned to eternal conciousness. The fate of mankind came not from disease or from an astroid, but from its insatiable thirst for knowledge...
Sorry if it is bad...Need to work on it some more... My purpose of writing was to express my viewpoint on human nature. Why do we have the urge to continue living day by day? To solve problems that plague us? The unknown is unusual; we fear it, but at the exact same time, it is our driving force, its what keeps us going. we therefore need the unknown to continue.
Twenty thousand years from our present day, Mankind has continued to survive and overcome many obstacles that would have wiped out any lesser sentient race. Throughout the years, scientific understanding as well as technology advanced astronomically, and the human race became the masters of nature. The everyday problems of present day man had been rendered less than trivial for these fortunate descendants. Man was on the verge of complete technological ascension; they became the Gods that they once believed in, and nothing was out of reach. All of this was the product of humanity's most insatiable thirst for knowledge, which led them to a final question; one that would be considered the ultimate pinnacle of human achievement and understanding: Why does the universe exist, and where does its true origins lie, in effect, existance?
Finding the ultimate truth, as it had become known, became the personal drive and purpose for every human's now immortal life. Time passed, as it always had, hundreds of years became thousands, which in turn became millions. Finally, after two million years of research, study and experimenting, a final conlusion was reached. If there were a supreme creator of this grand design called the universe, where had that creator come from? If the universe sprung from a singularity of infinite mass billions of years ago, what happend before then? Do such questions even have meaning? With every possible explanation, there was a question mark on the other side of the equation. This was when the realization was made; the universe is undefined. The universe was infinity, something of nothing, a nonexistant quantity. The true origins and the "Ultimate truth" could never be known.
Due to the shock of this ultimate revelation, the human race as a whole stopped, and lay inert. They could not die, although there was no reason to live, and they didn't. There was essentially no longer initiative for life, as there was nothing left to understand. Humanity remained unthinking and unmoving from that day, and due to thier exploitation of nature, were condemned to eternal conciousness. The fate of mankind came not from disease or from an astroid, but from its insatiable thirst for knowledge...
Sorry if it is bad...Need to work on it some more... My purpose of writing was to express my viewpoint on human nature. Why do we have the urge to continue living day by day? To solve problems that plague us? The unknown is unusual; we fear it, but at the exact same time, it is our driving force, its what keeps us going. we therefore need the unknown to continue.
