The Flying DutchMan

[Alicia]

This is a poem I wrote awhile ago (it is also my first published work ). It is based on one of the many legends surrounding the Flying DutchMan. I thought I would share it and gain a little insight.

The Flying DutchMan

There once was a man, the Flying DutchMan by name.
The vows he did take, are his sad claim to fame.

"To sail 'round Cape Good Hope," is the oath he did make.
"Even if it takes forever," and forever it shall take.

He gambled his soul to the Devil one day.
Who cheated and won, and took it away.

Now damned he is; forever at sea.
Never to rest; nor ever at peace.

He sails and he gambles, to reclaim his soul,
From the Devil who stole it and cast it in limbo.

Bad luck he does bring, to the sailors who see,
The phantom ship of the DutchMan at sea.

 

[jackokent]

You’re post I did like, it was certainly fun
But the meter and flow were a tad over done


The rhyming was good for most of its course
But some, like limbo and soul, seemed quite forced


Again, with the rhythm, quite jaunty and strong,
But some sentences suffered from just being a little bit too long.


No poet am I, I’ve critiqued what I could.
Enjoyed it I did and keep writing you should.

 

[Cosmo]

excellent... both of you =D=)

 

[Marky Lazer]

I thought this was about me

Anyway, a fun read

 

[Paradox 99]

Nice one Alicia. Well done on getting it published.

 

[Alicia]

Thanx everyone

I loved your's, JackoKent.