j d worthington
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Some passages are just a tad too long (not a great deal, but just over what is needed), for one thing; certain images, while charming in themselves (such as some of those with Carter and the cats) nonetheless jar with the overall tone of the work; the same is true, albeit intensified, in the names of some of the creatures: zoogs, Gugs, etc. This tends to give it at times a slightly childish feel in nomenclature, and can pull a reader out of the mood that is so carefully woven... the same way that Eddison naming his various nations Demons, Witches, and Pixies, etc., can do until one adjusts to the usage....