Jun 9th: 132046 => 137662
I'm declaring draft2 done and am in sort of the same state as
@sknox : The start and the finish are pretty solid. There are bits in the middle that need a lot more work and are more draft1 or even in a bullet point/fragments stage.
I also had a brainstorm about a subtle change to world-building that might improve the plot and character development and am excited to try it out.
In short: The "antagonist" of the story is a force ("X") that is destroying the world and our heroes quickly realize they have to do everything they can to stop it.
In the current version X is a new flavor of a familiar thing. I don't have compelling reasons for why X is familiar. It allowed me to start the story ominously, with characters dismissing X because it feels like a familiar thing. But I didn't write a suspenseful story where X starts out innocuous and we slowly figure out X is terrible: Bad things happen and we figure out it's X right away.
As I was writing, new characters suddenly appeared that wanted to use X for selfish gain, even though X is destroying their world. I liked the tension these new characters introduced. This in turn made me think that making "X" a completely new and strange thing will improve dramatic effect: Here's strange "alien" tech.
Ooh, can we use it? No, leave it alone! Oh no! It's destroying the world! We have to get rid of it!
No! I want the power for myself!
Anyhow: I think the proper thing for me to do at this stage is read through the whole story making notes and step back and see how it feels as a
gestalt. But I know myself, I'll get nerd sniped and start working on some chapter or the other. But I'll try and be grown up and just read through making notes and no edits.
We'll see how that goes ...