Please help ... I need to write a convincing 3/4 sentences related to a person being knocked out

[paranoid marvin]

As the third person, you can tell the reader - rather than have to describe from Bill's perspective - that he was only unconcious for a short period. So...

...a tidle-wave of pain , which came crashing down around him and swept him into unconciousness; but only for the briefest of moments.

He awoke to an unfamiliar noise, a kind of odd mechanical buzzing - and the sound of rapidly approaching footsteps. Twisting his body around to face his pursuer, Bill watched with mounting terror as a shape loomed out of the darkness.

 

[reiver33]

I've only been knocked out once (kicked in the head by the bass player of The Fabulous Poodles) and remember nothing about it. I went straight from standing as front-stage security (the bass player missed who he lashed out at) to being dragged along the floor to side-stage. I think where the body has no warning the primary effect is confusion, including 'why does this hurt?'

 

[FibonacciEddie]

Thanks again guys. I don't want to switch POVs for a few lines (too clunky), so I'll tweak the effects that Bill suffers...