Oh dear God....

[Cat's Cradle]

So I write the sotry and find the genre, rather then the other way around.

I really-really appreciate your taking the time to write this all out LittleStar..that's wonderful of you! It's all very interesting, and very helpful. There's a lot to consider...a lot to take in. (I LOVE Coraline! The book especially, but the movie too.)
I think I will give this story a go, over the summer...I might be posting some more excerpts for critiques, too. It's been a very cool experience, thank you all! CC

 

[JoanDrake]

I really liked this. It was very funny. It was also rather well written, clear and engaging, and it left me wanting more.

A bit of a homage to Naruto, is it not?

Please write and post something else soon. I will look forward to it.

 

[Cat's Cradle]

Wow, thanks so much, Joan, for the kind words! I will be posting another excerpt soon--this one with a lot more dialogue. Then this summer I think I will try to expand the story, and see if there's anything there.

And though I am fairly obsessed with Naruto, this was not a conscious homage to the manga...but what the subconscious mind wishes to achieve is beyond my control. But again, thank you...the positive reactions to this excerpt have been very inspiring to me.

 

[J Riff]

Nicely pawcrafted, easily understandabobble for Nits and nuts alike.

 

[Droflet]

Just spotted this, late in again. Good on ya for jumping in at the deep end. Nothing much to add except what they all said.