Significant Omission

That particular example probably has something to do with the Narnia books being intended for children. Gory details (literally, in this case) probably aren't appropriate.

I thought this too, but I don't know if I would have left it out quite as much. After all, there are plenty of children's films and books that include this sort of thing. It depends on the target age and tone, I suppose.
 
Mostly significant omissions leave me feeling frustrated and done badly can smack of laziness.

Done well, it is very pointient. The best example I can think of off hand is in David Weber's War of Honor where two warships are sralking each other. They finally head towards each other to do battle. It then cuts to the next scene where casualties are being wheeled into the hospital.

Something about that was executed so well that it was even more pointient than seeing the battle itself.
 
So I've seen lots of successful writers use this technique. Someone already mentioned GRRM who used the technique more than once in the first book of his Song of Fire and Ice. One character is knocked out early in the battle. On another occasion, a character not involved in a battle merely recounts the experience of listening and worrying about her loved ones. Then people return and inform her of the battles results.

GRRM uses the technique less and less in subsequent books. I think that says a lot about the value of using significant omissions. Instead, he uses a cliffhanger at the end of a chapter, switches to different characters for a few chapters, then returns to the original character where the cliffhanger is resolved but then builds up some new tensions or suspense. It's a very powerful tool as you don't even notice that many of his cliffhangers end up not being real threats to the character. However, there are enough cliffhangers that are truly a cliff, so to speak, and thus the reader has trouble catching on. In the end, they aren't really significant omissions since what happened in between wasn't significant, but merely a way of maintaining suspense as long as possible.

Tolkien uses the technique once in the Hobbit when Mr. Baggins is knocked out during the final battle, a technique echoed by GRRM.


I believe the one hard and fast rule I can say for significant omissions is that you can't omit the climax. You just can't. GRRM doesn't do it. Tolkien maybe did it but that guy could do whatever he wanted.

In other works, the technique seems to be used mostly for battle. This is likely due to combat being difficult to write well, so most writers avoid it entirely. I admit that it's tempting. Prose is not the most effective medium for fast-moving, high-stakes scenes. But I still think we should try.
 
I may be wrong, but my recollection from a Song of ice and fire, is that GRR does not show us the 'king in the north' scene in which Rob's wolf's head is paraded on his body, we hear about it through a report in King's landing. Perhaps this is something different though as even via hearsay we get a clear image of the event.

Of course for the tv show, we got to 'see it'.
 

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