Discussion thread -- July 2016 75-word Writing Challenge

DG Jones said:
My story was a probably-too-obscure-and-too-impersonal riff on Pink Floyd's "Echoes", but from the perspective of Dave Gilmour (Gil), after Rick Wright, the keyboardist, had died. In an interview with the Graun, Gilmour described the song "Echoes" as a musical conversation between him and Wright, but one he could no longer have after the latter had died; in practical terms he meant not playing the song again live. So Rick Wright appears, literally, as an echo of the past, mimicking the lyrics of the song, to show Gilmour that he can continue playing the music because they live on in each other.
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Thank God! When I was trying to write up the review for that one I stumbled across the Pink Floyd link but I was worried I'd just made it up!

Thanks for the mentions from everyone. I'll confess I'm a little disappointed in my performance this month but, as is often the case, I thought of way to pep it up _after_ I'd posted. Maybe next time!
 
There's always the Improving thread, Shyrka, which might throw some light on your story from a voting perspective, if you're disappointed.

For newbies -- since we don't allow critiques of the stories in the Discussion threads, we have a specific thread where we can ask for feedback on our 75 worders once voting is finished. Improving our 75 Word Stories -- READ FIRST POST
 
mosaix said:
I'm cross about my entry. I use Open Office and it counts open quotes as a word so I omit quotes to get the word count right and them add them when I post - but I forgot. Stupid but there is is. Lesson learnt.
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The Judge said:
Ah! I spent ages wondering why you'd omitted all the quotation marks, and I finally decided this was your way of showing that what we were reading was the later transcript of what had happened after the walls were listened to -- ie the conversation between the two was in the past and the murderer had indeed murdered the scientist, and the transcription for some reason didn't use quotation marks to differentiate between voices. Which I thought was an interesting idea. Just goes to show that sometimes it's possible to read too much into things!
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Ahh, yes, I say sagely. I, too, wondered why ... ... ... aww, screw it -- I didn't notice. :oops:
 
I missed the vote.
Not just that, but I missed the vote and the MIGHTY CHRISPY won with an entry I would have voted for.
We all know what must happen next.
All those who miss the vote must be shot.
Oh dear....
Bowler1 slowly pulls out his pearl handled RAY GUN (a beautiful weapon if I say so myself).
Some dithering, as you'd expect.
With a steady hand I raise the gun and hold it to my yellow temple... and fire....
Asnhy ahytg whojj trib effect, bubblering GUN, Wibible wibble ripple gipple.
 
Parson said:
I believe if I were to write more she would be a villain, which is very unusual for me.
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I think you should write more, I know I'd at least like to read more. :)
mosaix said:
I'm cross about my entry. I use Open Office and it counts open quotes as a word so I omit quotes to get the word count right and them add them when I post - but I forgot.
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I had to go check, I remembered reading it with quotes in...

I blame dyslexia, and the minds propensity to fill in what it expects to be there.

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I tried a reincarnation of Echo from her mythical origins to a modern model. Tried six-ways-to-the-wratheren-wood to have the bloke die in the end. But she just kept giving me this look. I'd already had to drop speech modifiers so as she repeats back with differing inflection, the clarity of that difference was left up to commas (not a strong suit with me).

I liked that I limited her repetition to within the last three words, made for interesting dialog construction (if not interesting dialog... Idk, I'm no judge of my own dialogue yet.) And not a few rewrites.

But by the end I realized how little of the original myth I had left, hence the punned up title Building a Myth-es.
 
I feel bad for not voting. I was planning to on the last day, but I fell asleep and when I woke, it was too late. Thanks to all those who listed my story, and a massive congratulations, chrispenycate.
 
Thank you all (I think) for the congratulations, and preceding them, the votes. I was not expecting that, especially not with verse. I considered the ban (voluntary) on voting for me still effective - but apparently the years have eroded it.

Parson said:
@chrispenycate: For solid incomprehensibility!
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But, as my theme is the difficulty of transmitting information through repetitions, that sort of fits, no? So what's my excuse for all the others…?

Write what you know - as a sound engineer I am well accustomed to the loss of comprehensibility due to delayed versions of a signal mixing with the original - surely, as light seconds become light hours when setting out to the stars, this will only become more marked?
 
I realised I forgot to congratulate Chrispenycate and thank the members who shortlisted me this month! Apologies, and thanks to

Vaz
johnnyjet
CC
Mad Alice
Ursa
Littlestar - thanks for the compliments, too. Petramnemonics it is, then! ;)
TJ - I’ve really got to stop gazumping your stories, I’m sure you and I have written parallel in the past. I’d say I was ashamed, but as you said ‘egregious’ which is one of my favourite words, I’m rather chuffed…

CONGRATULATIONS,
Chrispy AKA John Hammond​

pH
 
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