Wiglaf
Well-Known Member
Being a Richard, but cut it as the opening.
I read it as an amusing prologue. The way I see it, you have two options. You can title it "Prologue", or you can make it a flashback.
Perhaps...
Kyle the lichen awoke with a throbbing headache. Where was he? More pressingly, why was there a gaping hole in his chest? Slowly the prologue came back to him. Prologue. OK, but why does his head feel funny? Dagnabbit, he resurrected with his foot attached where his ear should be. Blah blah blah
I like what you have written. But when up against 100 other stories, I'm not sure I would choose it; you have to grab me more than your competition does. What happens when the lichen awakes is more likely to do that, I think.
I read it as an amusing prologue. The way I see it, you have two options. You can title it "Prologue", or you can make it a flashback.
Perhaps...
Kyle the lichen awoke with a throbbing headache. Where was he? More pressingly, why was there a gaping hole in his chest? Slowly the prologue came back to him. Prologue. OK, but why does his head feel funny? Dagnabbit, he resurrected with his foot attached where his ear should be. Blah blah blah
I like what you have written. But when up against 100 other stories, I'm not sure I would choose it; you have to grab me more than your competition does. What happens when the lichen awakes is more likely to do that, I think.
