The Quantum Accident

[Martin Gill]

a quantum slit is created, and the Minnesotan professor's (Julia) contraption begins to run-a-muck, scanning the two children and the maid, due to anomalous DNA--then transmitting them, one subatomic particle at at time through the quantum slit into the twin sister universe.

Now we are getting somewhere. There's nothing wrong or too complex with this idea. Just have it happen, let us experience it from the characters perspectives... their emotions, fears, etc... then explain what happened afterwards as they learn about it. that way we are connected to the characters, and there's a sense of reveal as we piece together what's happened to them.

 

[Hoverdasher]

Now we are getting somewhere. There's nothing wrong or too complex with this idea. Just have it happen, let us experience it from the characters perspectives... their emotions, fears, etc... then explain what happened afterwards as they learn about it. that way we are connected to the characters, and there's a sense of reveal as we piece together what's happened to them.

Thank you. I needed that. It's so scary putting one's self out there like this. I appreciate your encouraging words of inspiration

 

[Hoverdasher]

It's not the events you are struggling with, but the storytelling process itself. So I'm simply going to repeat what I said in your other thread, and that's that you would benefit from reading Wonderbook by Jeff Vandermeer, as that gives you all the information you need to to write a novel.

In fact, as you've already been given a lot of advice, but have yet to digest and follow it, I'm going to move this thread to your other one, as the same criticisms in general apply.

I just got funding to purchase Wonderbook, On Writing & Save the Cat! Yay. I apologize for the second-opinion post. To be honest, it was an ego thing. I grew attached to Hoverdasher. I'm now creatively letting go of the omniscient professor, and restructuring, according to the advice here--which I have printed and placed with the printed novel. The three above books will come, first--before any revisions. I must first learn how to write, or as you said, story-tell. I'm going for third person, maybe. We'll see once the studying is complete. I've composed a six month plan for just studying the advice in this thread, studying the three books above, and learning from this community in other forums. I've been impressed with everyone's writing, thus far. I'm wanting to reciprocate, and have been working on two stories I've printed from the critique section. I don't know how to write, yet, so critiquing will certainly be soft and neophytish. Hope this is okay. I thank you for your thoughts, and advice. I believe the Quantum Accident can be turned into something worthwhile--even if it never gets picked up by an agent or pub house.