Discussion -- June 2011 Challenge

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Congratulations, mosaix!



My rejected Kipling-y poetry which didn't make the grade:

An Army Marches on its Stomach?

When a fightin’ man’s a-hungry
You’ll be sure to find him angry,
For a fightin’ man wants grub, and wants it now.
..................We needs it now.

So the ’eathen’s not a winner
As jumps us afore dinner
’Cos we’re fightin’ mad then, spoilin’ for a row.
.................We wants a row.

But the ’eathen as comes after –
Well, you’ll hear black-’earted laughter,
’Cos we’re slow and soporific, stuffed with chow.
................We’re stuffed, alright. And how!


Nourishment

Eat yer bellies full, boys
Grab what grub yer may.
Take yer fill of vittels, boys,
Tomorrer’s another day.

Drink the barrel dry, boys,
Don’t fret the “Who’s to pay?”
Take beer and ale and all, boys,
Tomorrer’s another day.

Make merry while yer can, boys,
Whatever preachers say.
The girl’s a-willing – grab ’er, boys,
Tomorrer’s another day.

Eat yer bellies full, boys,
Drink the barrel dry.
Make merry while yer can, boys,
Tomorrer we’ll likely die.


(That last one is over word count but when I realised it wasn't working I gave up on it)


EDIT: Have just seen I had a mystery vote last night! Thank you mystery voter whoever ye be! I'm really chuffed with that.
 
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I'm not sure if you're aware of it, TJ, but the first two verses of An Army Marches on its Stomach can be sung to the tune of A Policman's Lot is not a Happy One. (Or, at least, the version of the tune that's in my head.)
 
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Er... not the way I sing it...


But, however, I shall take it as my theme tune:

When a troll is not engaged upon his trolling (on his trolling)
Or maturing his disruptive evil plans (evil plans)
His capacity for simple idle lol-ing (idle lol-ing)
Is just as great as any honest man's (honest man's).

My feelings with great difficulty I smother (-culty smother)
When moderating duty's to be done (to be done)
Ah, take one consideration with another (with another)
A Judge's lot is not a happy one.

When the enterprising spammer's not a-spamming (not a-spamming)
When a newbie doesn't post threads in critiques (in critiques)
He loves to watch a nit-pick go a-damning (go a-damning)
And listen to the innocent eek-eeks (:eek: :eek:)

When the Chronner's finished flaming on his brother (on his brother)
He loves to see the Writing Challenge fun (Challenge fun)
Ah, take one consideration with another (with another)
A Judge's lot is not a happy one.

Ahhh
When moderating duty's to be done, to be done,
Then a Judge's lot is not a happy one (happy one).


:D
 
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Excellent though TJ's parody is, I sincerely hope no-one has the bright idea of a G&S theme for a writing challenge...
 
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pyan said:
Excellent though TJ's parody is, I sincerely hope no-one has the bright idea of a G&S theme for a writing challenge...
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Oh, I don't know, though (Hums ' This particularly rapid, unintelligible chatter
Isn't generally heard, and if it is it doesn't matter')

I'm going to put in the correct edit for my entry and, if all goes well, the grid up till now…

When mortality defeats us
‘Appens to everyone, sometime,
‘E’s a dragon, an’ ‘e eats us,
Chaplain ‘ates it, it’s a crime

An’ an ‘eathen ceremony.
But alternative is worse;
Unmarked grave in wasteland stony
Death statistic, local curse.

With imperial resources
We can die in furren climes
Less important than the ‘orses
That we eat ourselves, sometimes

Dragon, officer or soldjer
Mates your frontier’d back defend
Better than forgotten boulder
Being tiffin for a friend
 

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Re: DISCUSSION the 75 Word Challenge JUNE 2011

Congrats, Mosaix! :)
 
Re: DISCUSSION the 75 Word Challenge JUNE 2011

TJ, I love your first alternate!

Fortunately, I don't have my first story handy, and if all goes well I won't remember to post it later when I do.
 
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Congratulations Mosaix, talk about leaving everyone else in the dust, although Para Marvin was only a length or two behind ...
 
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The Judge said:
But, however, I shall take it as my theme tune:

When a troll is not engaged upon his trolling (on his trolling)
Or maturing his disruptive evil plans (evil plans)
His capacity for simple idle lol-ing (idle lol-ing)
Is just as great as any honest man's (honest man's).


(etc.)
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I love it! (Perhaps we need a moderators' song the rest of us can use ...)


And thank you Aun Doorback for the vote, and everyone who put my story on their lists!
 
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Hearty congratulations, mosaix!

I'm genuinely overwhelmed with all the mentions - many thanks to marvin, TDZ and Platty, in addition to the people I've already thanked. And I received my first ever vote in the challenges... very much appreciated, Boneman! Just about to raise a glass in your honour. :)
 
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I am proud to say that I voted for MOSAIX, great job!
I actually got a vote and a few mentions, thank you very much.


Now, IF Mosaix will be kind enough to come up with something easy, I would be a happy man, cuz I got nuttin, I may not enter next month, my mind is blank, it's gonna be too tough ! The Zebra made me do it!
Bob
 
Re: DISCUSSION the 75 Word Challenge JUNE 2011

Congratulations Mosaix , a great entry and a well deserved winner!

Thanks again to everyone who made me smile with comments,mentions and votes on my work.

Bravo to Chrispenycate for setting such an enjoyable and interesting Challenge.

And a hearty pat on the back to everyone who entered this most challenging of Challenges ; I'm sure we've all taken something positive away from the experience.
 
Re: DISCUSSION the 75 Word Challenge JUNE 2011

For the sake of completion here is my alternate. I dropped it before I really worked on it, so it is a little over 75 words, but I'm sure I could have got it down a bit.


Listen well and I shall tell you of how the Dragon got his flame. He was lost, and far from home, his scales lost of their hued tones. No rabbit, sheep nor man, no prey and dragon starved, there was not even a drop of water.

He came upon a pool of molten rock, bubbling from down below and in desperation he did drink.

Quenched was his thirst, but Best Beloved, it ignited a fire in his mouth that never went out.
 
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