I'll bet that was an interesting discussion!
Yes, 'flat-pack' did raise an eyebrow.
Although I should point out that I counted 'time-travelling' as two words.
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Discussion - January 2012 - 75 Word Challenge
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Yes, 'flat-pack' did raise an eyebrow.
Although I should point out that I counted 'time-travelling' as two words.
Aww, they let you use all those words just to see what the heck it was that you had written!
What Us as if we would
as if we would
Some questions which may, but probably won't, determine what story I put up...
1. Lieutenant-Colonel -- how many words?
2. Freshly-dug -- how many words?
3. Mississippi -- how many...no, that's not it. Does 19th century Mississippi count as the West? (if you know what I'm doing, ssshhhhhh)
1. Lieutenant-Colonel -- how many words?
2. Freshly-dug -- how many words?
3. Mississippi -- how many...no, that's not it. Does 19th century Mississippi count as the West? (if you know what I'm doing, ssshhhhhh)
Aww man, there goes my idea!
(Not really, I have nothing concrete -- or freshly-dug, either.)
AnyaKimlin
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Aww man, there goes my idea!
(Not really, I have nothing concrete -- or freshly-dug, either.)
LOL what about Doug McFresh and his concrete cow (think Milton Keynes) ? I so have a spare entry now as you inspired it feel free to take it
1. I'd say two -- it's not usually hyphenated.
2. Two -- ditto (I would write "freshly dug", as you don't need a hyphen after an adverb).
3. You're asking this when we've had a story set in space??
I'll take that as a dagnabbit, dagnabbit and yeehaw then.
A very eloquent appreciation of the feedback, Alc; could be the first 10 words right there.
Not weird, maybe; surreal certainly.
Hope, I like your story, and that last sentence twist is perfect.
Parson, I like yours too - a lost lamb tale. I had to look up what a soddy was (never heard them by that name before), but it's never a bad thing when a story teaches you something.
Parson, I like yours too - a lost lamb tale
. I had to look up what a soddy was (never heard them by that name before), but it's never a bad thing when a story teaches you something.
Phoenixthewriter
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Thanks. I decided to take weird to the farthest level. I think I succeeded and actually borrowed elements from a short story I wrote in high school (just for fun).
As for the editing, I didn't think of that. I didn't get back to these forums until yesterday because I was busy as heck all weekend. I guess I'll just have to see.
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I just wanted to add that I greatly enjoyed Anya's post. I chuckled at the ending there. Then stormcrow's originality was slow to get through, but proved completely purposeful at the end. Loving what I'm seeing.
Now I just need to get in gear for that 300 worder.
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I was going to continue with the Christmas themed responses but it did not seem right any more...
Cul – So... the Terminator arrives in the old west. Does anything else need to be said. Scrfew any forthcoming films this is the movie that needs to be made. This little moment encapsulated what could be a stupendous teaser for an epic movie. Terminator vrs Cowboys. Wonder if it’s been copyrighted yet?
Mouse – If there was ever going to be a tale that deserved the moniker ‘weird’ then this must be it. As well written piece that catches the flavour of the old west, and adds more than its fair shade of whimsy. I could almost see this put forward as an animated cartoon. Just the right amount of threat and macho old worldy feel, with the garden creatures taking it off on a wild tangent. Excellent.
Starbeast – ....
Stormcrow – out of nowhere this hits you in the face like a cold wave. It is something really different and really clever, although it does take a while to get your head around reading it. The construction is original, and the fact that it reads so well and as a strong story with it is just the icing on the cake.
Starbeast - .... Clowns?
TacticalLoco – A story that is both sad and maudlin. At least that is the way it felt to me. An alternative tale where white man had wiped out the Native Americans, but at the cost of his life, still continuing to exist as an undead creature. Perhaps an allegory if ever there was one. Still the solution to the zombie incursion is both logical and terrible, the perfect end to another great story.
Starbeast - .... I mean clowns?
Phoenixthewriter – This brilliant tale did nothing more than make me smile, and that was enough. The idea of having a western with knights was just inspirational, the mixing of the genres just perfect – I loved the duel, but the twist – the addition of the dragon was brilliant, but what truly made the story, the sting in the ‘tale’ as it were was the sudden payoff with the six-shooters being drawn.
Starbeast – I mean really? Clowns?
Mosaix – Now we have a historical character revealed to be something more. The idea of something being odd about a burial is a good hook at the start of the tale, but it is the payoff that really makes the story shine. Curiosity over a strange funeral is almost certainly going to lead to speculation, and perhaps an investigation in that kind of society, but a box with a future self build gunslinger? Clever, but it’s the last word that really hits the story home.
Starbeast - I can’t put my finger on it but there really is something funny about this one.
Hope – There was something about this one I really just loved. It was the use of language as well as the story. It just worked on so many levels. In some ways it was impossibly simple, in others it just sang. A mysterious figure that walks into town run by a godfat.. mother prostitute is great enough, but the mystical underpinnings are just superlative. I especially liked the descriptive words, it really gave an image of the places. A simple story with plenty of frills.
Starbeast – Okay, this was something really different, and I just loved it. Absurd in the best kind of way, it just threw so many images into my mind that I could not help but enjoy it. Jelly and Ice Cream at a kids party, this is a sroty that is worth reading again just for the fun of it.
Parson – A great, simple, traditional ghostly story. There is something just so perfect in the execution of the story that it is hard to fault it. A little girl lost in a woods, where she has been told not to go, there is almost a sense of dread that she might have come to a terrible end, but the best is saved to last, survival at the hands of phantom. Of course there was never any doubt, when I saw the name of the wood I knew it was too bad a place.
It's time for me to put my hands in the air, stare down the barrel of the Smith & Wesson, and freely admit I'm having problems with this one.
Oh, I've got more than enough attempts jotted down, but none of them feel right. I'm not going to let it put me off entering, but unless lightning strikes I feel my entry is not going to be one I like.
What makes it worse, I really love the theme...
Cul – So... the Terminator arrives in the old west. Does anything else need to be said. Scrfew any forthcoming films this is the movie that needs to be made. This little moment encapsulated what could be a stupendous teaser for an epic movie. Terminator vrs Cowboys. Wonder if it’s been copyrighted yet?
Mouse – If there was ever going to be a tale that deserved the moniker ‘weird’ then this must be it. As well written piece that catches the flavour of the old west, and adds more than its fair shade of whimsy. I could almost see this put forward as an animated cartoon. Just the right amount of threat and macho old worldy feel, with the garden creatures taking it off on a wild tangent. Excellent.
Starbeast – ....
Stormcrow – out of nowhere this hits you in the face like a cold wave. It is something really different and really clever, although it does take a while to get your head around reading it. The construction is original, and the fact that it reads so well and as a strong story with it is just the icing on the cake.
Starbeast - .... Clowns?
TacticalLoco – A story that is both sad and maudlin. At least that is the way it felt to me. An alternative tale where white man had wiped out the Native Americans, but at the cost of his life, still continuing to exist as an undead creature. Perhaps an allegory if ever there was one. Still the solution to the zombie incursion is both logical and terrible, the perfect end to another great story.
Starbeast - .... I mean clowns?
Phoenixthewriter – This brilliant tale did nothing more than make me smile, and that was enough. The idea of having a western with knights was just inspirational, the mixing of the genres just perfect – I loved the duel, but the twist – the addition of the dragon was brilliant, but what truly made the story, the sting in the ‘tale’ as it were was the sudden payoff with the six-shooters being drawn.
Starbeast – I mean really? Clowns?
Mosaix – Now we have a historical character revealed to be something more. The idea of something being odd about a burial is a good hook at the start of the tale, but it is the payoff that really makes the story shine. Curiosity over a strange funeral is almost certainly going to lead to speculation, and perhaps an investigation in that kind of society, but a box with a future self build gunslinger? Clever, but it’s the last word that really hits the story home.
Starbeast - I can’t put my finger on it but there really is something funny about this one.
Hope – There was something about this one I really just loved. It was the use of language as well as the story. It just worked on so many levels. In some ways it was impossibly simple, in others it just sang. A mysterious figure that walks into town run by a godfat.. mother prostitute is great enough, but the mystical underpinnings are just superlative. I especially liked the descriptive words, it really gave an image of the places. A simple story with plenty of frills.
Starbeast – Okay, this was something really different, and I just loved it. Absurd in the best kind of way, it just threw so many images into my mind that I could not help but enjoy it. Jelly and Ice Cream at a kids party, this is a sroty that is worth reading again just for the fun of it.
Parson – A great, simple, traditional ghostly story. There is something just so perfect in the execution of the story that it is hard to fault it. A little girl lost in a woods, where she has been told not to go, there is almost a sense of dread that she might have come to a terrible end, but the best is saved to last, survival at the hands of phantom. Of course there was never any doubt, when I saw the name of the wood I knew it was too bad a place.
It's time for me to put my hands in the air, stare down the barrel of the Smith & Wesson, and freely admit I'm having problems with this one.
Oh, I've got more than enough attempts jotted down, but none of them feel right. I'm not going to let it put me off entering, but unless lightning strikes I feel my entry is not going to be one I like.
What makes it worse, I really love the theme...
Thanks, Perp. Good to know I'm good at weird! (And hey, maybe mine's a bit weird Wild West Country... inspired by farmers rather than cowboys.)
And yay! I thought Cul's was the Terminator, but wasn't sure. Glad I did get it!
And yay! I thought Cul's was the Terminator, but wasn't sure. Glad I did get it!
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(And hey, maybe mine's a bit weird Wild West Country... inspired by farmers rather than cowboys.)
And now that has me chuckling...
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Hang in there, Perp and keep trying. We know you can do this.
Very difficult this month.
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