Discussion Thread - SEVENTY-FIVE WORD WRITING CHALLENGE March 2013

[johnnyjet]

Thanks, Perpetual Man, for your awesome comments on my entry. I'm humbled.

 

[Perpetual Man]

Evil super villain? Moi?

I think there might be a little hint in the name , you know?

Thanks for the comments Alcu, Perp, SB, and Victoria! Apologies if I've put anyone off their cereal - I tend to wake up and skip straight to lunch.

A pleasure, of course. And no worries about putting me off my breakfast, I'm skipping this morning as well. (Unless you include water as breakfast.)

Thanks, Perpetual Man, for your awesome comments on my entry. I'm humbled.

No problem. I really enjoyed it, a pleasure to read in fact.

 

[Bowler1]

I didn't want to go with the basic banshee because they are not really "evil" in and of themselves. They're undesired, but do not actually directly interfere with mortals.
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No their nice (unless your about to peg it, then a Banshee is the last thing you'll want to hear!), but we have loads more naughty spirits and what have you. Just in case anyone is lacking ideas for this month 75 worder, the list below should help!

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/List_of_legendary_creatures_(T)

I was hoping the Irish would put up a good showing on the list but the Japanese have it hands down from what I can see - how disappointing!

 

[Karn Maeshalanadae]

Except, with the Japanese, in the Kanji dialect, their folklore mythological creatures can be pretty well sub-categorized under one lump type: Yokai. Which is supposed to literally translate to "otherworldly being" but includes spirits of the dead, demons, "angel" type characters, what have you. Not sure if combined creatures or such would be included, like the Naga, or mortal creatures such as solid undead-zombies, walking skeletons, vampires-or things like involuntary shapeshifting-cursed creatures like werewolves would be included under the term.

 

[Perpetual Man]

Stormcrow – A tale with some beautiful imagery, and the core of an idea that could well be developed into a larger piece. For me the idea of someone raising something in a state of ignorance to one of wisdom is a noble ideal, but there is more to it than that, the last line seem to offer a subtle, sinister conclusion that makes it fearful to trespass in the garden at night!

Starbeast – A fun entry that should have even the humourless smiling, from the very use of language, to the names and the high point (for me) the description of Venus. It is the abstract, bizarre and totally insanity of the story that makes it such a magnetic piece. In short nothing less than I have come to expect from the writer at his very best.

Glen – A very interesting entry that is thought-provoking to say the least. A brilliant quandary that is well thought out, and exceptional idea. What would a hero do if the path to make things right, is worse than the 'bad' life they have been given. Is it right to fight the evil in order to bring suffering in the name of right? A beautiful obliqueness, that blurs the line between good and evil so it is hard to tell one from the other.

 

[Abernovo]

Thank you, Starbeast, for that review.
Chuffed.

 

[stormcrow]

Thank You Perp Man; for your comments!

"..some beautiful imagery.." is a huge compliment...seriously; thanks.

 

[Victoria Silverwolf]

Glen -- presents the narrator's ethical crisis in an effective manner

 

[Perpetual Man]

Thank You Perp Man; for your comments!

"..some beautiful imagery.." is a huge compliment...seriously; thanks.

No problem Stormcrow. The first sentence particularly. (There was another but I can't remember exactly where it was!) and the alliteration of the P words in the last line worked perfectly.

As far as my own entry goes I thought I'd written something really clever. Then I read it to Mrs Perp - and she did not get it at all. And she should have. So, back to the drawing (or writing board) I guess

 

[Bowler1]

As far as my own entry goes I thought I'd written something really clever. Then I read it to Mrs Perp - and she did not get it at all. And she should have. So, back to the drawing (or writing board) I guess

I get the same with Mrs Bowler all the time, but as I don't get votes maybe I should listen more?
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I've thought about it, I'll carry on as I am!

 

[Christopher Lee]

Long time no see, everyone! Great stories so far and I'll be entering one soon. Contemporary fantasy . . . ack! Keep up with the stories everyone, they rock!

 

[Victoria Silverwolf]

Grizzgreen711 -- a mysterious and evocative tale, with a elusive, mythic quality

 

[Victoria Silverwolf]

nixie -- uses two statements to imply a complex tale of intrigue

barlennan -- effective, eerie images, with the result left to the reader's imagination

 

[Perpetual Man]

Grizzgreen711 – Nice to see you back! It seem to be an interesting topic that this month has raised a number of almost philosophical currents to the stories, and this is no different. The idea that a city and its people is being judged by its creators is good enough, but the reason for being judged a failure is a clever one and thought provoking. Very profound.

Nixie – As the title says we are shown different view points and it is always interesting to see just how different the same thing can be, and it makes you wonder about the common ground. To one an ineffectual ruler is little more than a failure who should be made to toe the line, on the other he that talks against her is a traitor who needs to put down. Of course that they both do what they believe is best for the country makes the answer all the more interesting.

Barlennan – An interesting take on the challenge, that might just seem to be the adventure of youth, the excitement of kids leaving their beds to fight battles amongst themselves in the dead of night. That in itself is a sense of wonder, a wonderful idea well presented, but the last line seems to indicate to me that something else might be drawn to join in, those perhaps that the kids emulate and that gives the story are more ominous feel, and a solid ending.

Perp – WHAT?!? WHAT!?! WHAT???

 

[nixie]

Thanks Vic and Pep

 

[Perpetual Man]

No problem, Nix, you know how much I enjoy your stuff anyway!

 

[Christopher Lee]

Thanks Victoria! And thanks as always Perp! Nice to see that you are still giving us your profound insight.

 

[Perpetual Man]

I'm trying my hardest, can't keep up with Victoria though, she is speed itself when it comes to her comments!

 

[Starbeast]

Thanks for the comments Alcu, Perp, SB, and Victoria! Apologies if I've put anyone off their cereal - I tend to wake up and skip straight to lunch.

You're welcome Lenny. When I was a kid, Rice Crispies was one of my favorites. It was fun to see it incorporated into a story.

Starbeast – It is nothing less than I have come to expect from the writer at his very best.

Wow, thank you Perpetual Man for that awesome review.

Thank you, Starbeast, for that review.
Chuffed.

You're welcome Abernovo.


AMB - Rhys vs Faerie King, battling one another in (to my stunned surprise) a video game. That made me smile.

BigJ - Excellent situation, two powerful beings meet on a midnight subway ride. I liked the dialogue. Very cool.

Springs - A mighty and magical being dislikes the wares at a unique gift shop and expressees his distaste. Good stuff.

Talysia - A very cute and marvelous tale of a little shape-shifter who wanted to help fight crime. I love it.

AnyaKimlin - I like this, an angel and a devil trying to help Tom make a decision. But, a newsagent may set Tom on the right path.

Ratsy - An exorcism story, that's great! A man saves his wife from being possessed by a demon, that's love, that's great!

Glisterspeck - Whoa, an assassin targeting a holy man? Or is he? Let the public decide, WOW! I like the way you left me hanging.

AlcubierreWarp - A firefighter vs fire elementals, that's fantastic. I love it that you chose a firefighter to be a magical hero.

Mangara - It's an interesting tale you've created, about using a new method of torture to set free a criminal. Very creepy.

David Evil Overlord - Excellent, science and magic crossover in a role-playing game. You made me chuckle with this.

 

[Perpetual Man]

A pleasure SB.