Discussion thread -- October 2015 75-word Writing Challenge

Well there you go. Totally unexpected, seriously, until the votes started to come in. The Ministry was actually my second attempt at a story for the month. The first week or so was spent trying to shoehorn what I thought was a completely different, really quirky idea into the brief. But the more I tried to squeeze it in the more mangled and deformed it became, until it died, and I went back to the drawing board.

Congratulations, DG :)

This is probably the first time I had a problem getting down to the word limit. Originally my story was almost double the 75 count, and cutting it down really gutted it. I should have done as DG did and started over. Oh well, next month is nearly upon us!

Thanks also for the mentions, and delightful reviews.
 
Congratulations DG! A very moving story and a very well deserved win (as I've mentioned, I came ridiculously close to voting for you anyway :LOL:).

Now I wonder what will be the next theme... horror I hear you say? Why, an excellent choice ;)
 
Congratulations to DG Jones - a deserved win - and thanks to the people who mentioned my Faust/Shakespeare mashup, and particularly to The Judge for the vote.
 
[Edit: Droflet tricked me into posting this in the photo challenge thread instead of here, so I am pasting it forthwith!]

Congratulations DG! Once again I voted for the winner; surely that's got to appear on one of these grids of terror (spreadsheets) that keep being produced. I am the Anti-Jonah; a vote from me is a sure win!

Thank you for all the short listings - I was so disappointed by my effort I was genuinely relieved to get a fair mention. Also thanks to DG for his review of my entry. What you wrote was exactly what I was trying to get across (from 296 words on first draft!) but I felt it lost sense at 75. Your review allowed me to breathe again.

pH
 
Congratulations D.G.! That was a fine story, as I said before there were so many good stories that they were really hard to sort. Your story had a sort of "1984" George Orwell feeling to me. It made me think, which is always a good thing. (A drunken discussion does seem logical for an idea where language is taken away as punishment. ;))

As to my own story, it arose out of a two pronged insight. First, (probably obviously) it was a shot at governments which seem to have such tunnel vision that they can't believe that they could possibly be wrong about something. And Second, my experience as a preacher tells me that people can understand you to say something that not only did you not say, but something you would never say. Their internal filters are so strong that off handed comments and confusion can sound like dire insults. I've learned to be very careful about off-handed comments because of getting burned like this more than once.
 
Congrats DG! A dominate victory

Thanks to any one who mentioned my silly story. I tried to incorporate two instances where language wasn't needed, the first being the language of love(maybe lust), and then the ol' dad holding a shot gun, made for space, which gave quite a universal meaning. I wrote it quickly, more to just get something in so I didn't have to think about it.
 
Well before I do anything else I thought I should start putting up the translations, and the language they were written in.

In doing so I realised there is one missing, and it looks like I never actually did one. I think, even worse, it is the second month in a row, so Hazel Rah many apologies and I'll try and rectify that tomorrow (Off out tonight).


Glen - (Spanish) A beautiful representation of a man losing the ability to communicate, trying desperately to hold on to the words that define you.

Luiglin – (German) The servant comes up out, is not the only medium of communication to demonstrate that a solid, and while the dark each other's servants size get the girl. Or young.

Victoria – (French) a remarkable love letter to the divine nature of the world around us and its symbiotic relationship with humans.

Vaz – (Italian) An example of the power of an education and to be able to use the things you learn to your advantage, especially when surrounded by those not so well learned

Travis Woodward – (Portuguese) How easily different languages can lead to misunderstandings. The roar of a monster may seem threatening, but without a reference point of all is the sound, to what extent is found.

LittleStar – (Greek) very clever puns, designed to make my pain in the brain, brilliant and intelligent and a coherent story too.

Ashleyne – It’s a dog’s life when the aliens come to town, and ignorance may indeed be bliss, because communication is possible if you don’t know what you are talking to – and things we would not conceive of, might actually work in alien hands. (Ukranian)

Droflet – A good fun tale that teaches the importance of not judging by appearances, never presume that people don’t know what you are talking about, and to be prepared for the consequences. (Japanese)

CC – Some of the stories are really quite ingenious, different approaches to how we see and use language. This is one such playing with singular and plural personalities with an ease that is both clever and entertaining.(Hindi)

Bowler – Well someone was going to have to lower the tone at some point, why am I not surprised it was Bowler? He does raise, though, the very real problem of mistakes being made when uhhh speaking in other languages. I‘m tempted to say that his protagonist is well and truly… but then this is a family friend forum. (Dutch)

Juliana – as always there is a story that springs out of nowhere and makes me laugh out loud. This month the honour belongs to this entry, that not only is it funny, but it uses some very clever word play to get to its conclusion, making sense on a number of different ways. I’m glad the writer did not chicken out and posted it! (Arabic)

Kerry – A wonderful enchanting tale, that gives the power of names over living things. It is a remarkably well told 75 word masterpiece with a pitch perfect ending. All excessive words have been weeded out perfectly. (Chinese)

Farntfar – Oh the fun that ensues when there are different races sitting around a table. The language barrier gets crossed so many times it’s become blurry. It is also true, though that what we see here shows that no matter how different there is common ground in the middle. (Bulgarian)

Hex – What a lot is conveyed in this wonderful story. I’m not sure I would call it one of love, but of being brave enough to take on a position through marriage, and all the sacrifices that entails in order to make sure it works; while holding onto the loss of the life left behind. (Affrikaans)

Mr. Orange – a valuable lesson. Never completely trust translations. Who knows what might be misinterpreted. And the misunderstandings it might lead to are probably not something that you would want to contemplate. Like here. (Albanian)

ratsy – A thoroughly entertaining tale, that shows the dangers of being caught up in experience that you may not realise that there really is a universal constant and no matter how alien the surroundings, the situations remain the same. (Zulu)

Chris – As we have come to expect a magnificently crafted masterpiece, that uses language to its full, filled with fluidity and rhyme, showing though, that no matter how masterful an artificial life form may master speaking, it is still not enough.(Yiddish)

D G Jones – A story that might seem quite light to start with but rapidly becomes a nightmarish horror story, where punishment is meted out with the reduction of one’s vocabulary, removing a form of expression a punishment that is chilling in the extreme. (Yoruba)
 
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Eep, been so incredibly busy with work I barely had time to vote at all, but I have a space few minutes so belatedly...

Congratulations to DG Jones, definitely a worthy winner!

My vote went to Harebrain, but the others I particularly enjoyed were the entries from Jo Zebedee, HazelRah, Ratsy, and of course DG Jones.

And thank you for the mentions from Glen, Cat's Cradle, Phyrebrat and Bowler1! :) I knew when I saw this month's theme it was going to be a tough month for me - I've never been much of a wordsmith and there were some truly wonderful entries from everyone else. Looking forward to next month!
 
My story was a piece of nonsense, so a stupendous mile long line of graffiti for the short- and long-listings and honourable mentions from Parson, Hex, Juliana, Titanium, Glen, VB (hoary, c'est moi!), Phyrebrat, Starbeast, Bowler, Grimward, farntfar and AFW, and a splendiferous baroquised gongoristic graffito for the very welcome vote holland. All greatly appreciated.

You're very welcome Judge. Well done as always.

I haven't forgotten. I was just procrastinating, umming and ahhing until the final hours. My vote goes to Love at First Smell by Bowler1

A massive thanks to Hex, Droflet, Juliana, Cat's Cradle, Starbeast, HazelRah, Grimward, HareBrain, farntfar and A. Fair Wells for the mentions and listing. As always, a ginormous thanks to Victoria and Tim James for your magnificent sets of reviews. And last but not least, a gargantuan thanks to Glen and Saharren for the votes.

You're immensely welcome Lady Ashleyne. It's always a treat to have you join the competition.


My Inspiration:

Roughly a month (or so) ago, I was discussing the subject of Ufology and Native American cultures. Both subjects stuck with me for a while. When the new challenge for October arrived, I was thinking about doing a horror story (for Halloween). However, "Languages", was part of the challenge. While I was thinking about what to write, I was watching a lecture by a Native American, and he touched upon the subject of "aliens". That's when an idea flooded into my mind. I would write about a visitation, the alien's dialogue would be in Lakota (Sioux tribe), because they knew the people. The main character would be a medicine man (Sky Fire Wheel), and his name would reflect the period of time (1800's - because the wheel was known to the tribe then), AND, he was named after a UFO sighting on the day of his birth. Plus, his grandson would be a kid living in the 1950's.

After posting, I looked back in the discussion thread, and noticed Tim James was using different languages. Heh heh. I thought I was the first.
 
Congrats, DG! A very good story, it only just missed out on my vote, not that you needed it!

Many thanks to willwallace for the vote, and thanks also to those who mentioned my little story. I wasn't struck by inspiration, so I had to kind of force it a bit this month. Don't know where the story came from to be honest, considering I don't even drink!
 
Congratulations DG, a great win and a terrific story.
I had a pretty poor month, no votes and only 1 mention (I think) so I guess my story didn't work well
It actually comes as an offshoot from my WIPIYCCIP (Work in progress, if you can call it progress) where an evil race send secret messages to each other through attacking strangers, but I didn't really write much down until late on, I should really work on these earlier in the month.
Looking forward to next month's theme and genre.
 
Well before I do anything else I thought I should start putting up the translations, and the language they were written in.

In doing so I realised there is one missing, and it looks like I never actually did one. I think, even worse, it is the second month in a row, so Hazel Rah many apologies and I'll try and rectify that tomorrow (Off out tonight).

Don't worry Tim, I had taken the omission as a glowing review in the language of silence :rolleyes:

And thanks to Travis Woodward and Ashleyne for the mentions :)
 

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