Robert Mackay: "A story with a reveal in which something about the MC's (and reader's) assumptions about the world turn out to be untrue."
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They were close. Talis could hear them, the crackling of their furnaces gave them away, even when they weren’t moving. She stared up through the tattered hole in the ceiling, watching their smoke as it leaked into the darkened sky, mingling with the embers of her burning home.
The school. It had been her home for as long as she could remember. Lorrence claimed she could remember the day Talis arrived there, a baby in the guardsmen’s arms. Talis had never believed it – Lorrence couldn’t have been more than a baby herself at the time – but now she wanted to. It seemed important that someone should.
For a moment, the crackling quietened. The golems’ thudding footfalls faded. Talis gripped the window ledge and peered up. A cry of dismay rang out and the crackling grew to a violent roar. The golem’s work was mercifully short. Judging from the quiet that soon descended, whomever they had found put up little resistance. Talis’ scanned the horizon, heart hammering in her chest. The courtyard was dark, deserted, lit only by the dull amber sky.
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We end with a true epic; a brilliantly written, full length novella that clocks in at almost 20,000 words. The work and world is multi-layered, a fabulously realised fantasy that rocks between steampunk and magic systems, and has more twists than a twisty-turny thing. Talis and her friend Lorrence, rogue magicians being persecuted by the Hidden Emperor, are faced with monstrous Imperial War Golems, soulless, fire-breathing machines created through the human sacrifice of magicians. But as the story progresses, and the lies and layers are peeled back like so many different masks, to reveal the clever reality of the world and the true motivations of the characters, we are shown a world that is not merely about magic and fire, but power, in all its myriad, seductive forms. As the two characters are separated in an attack of the war golems, they both are set upon paths that reveal to them their own true fates, and as the shuddering climax draws near, the two leads learn how they are able to influence the world in ways they could not have imagined. My only criticism: why write such a brilliant, original piece and not give it a title!? Go to the back of the class!
PS An observation: the longest pieces in the last two Sekrit Santas have both been novella-length pieces with fire as one of the central themes... (the last one was
Resvrgam, by yours truly).
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Right, that concludes the posting and reviewing of all the entries! Phew! I hope you enjoyed them all, and that my reviews enticed you to download at least a few of them. They were all very good indeed, and there were three or four absolute pearlers in there that were a joy to read. You clever people.
I'm off for a coffee, and will get around to posting the details for the guessing game. Let's keep that open until the end of July to give people a chance to read them, and for me to recover and finally get round to writing something for the 300-worder!