(And the fault could well be mine for not managing to convey the concept properly--it certainly didn't seem as good a story after I read the rest.)No, because then both my face and the slapper's hand would soon be red and bloodied.
As Pyan said once a while back, with one of my earliest postings in Critiques-I have the skill down, but not the art.
Not really, Mouse. Characters are my only strong point in writing.
I felt that it simply didn't have the depth or the conflict that First Failure or Having You For Dinner had....
What else? A mouse-shaped cake with milk-chocolate ganache, I think.
Eek! I didn't read it literally! I thought it was metaphorical!! Blooming heck. None of this is helping. And I've only got a few hours left...
Mouse, I wanted you to know that you have my son's vote. Unfortunately, he's not allowed to vote, but there you have it.
He was watching as I ran through the stories again, and stopped me with "who put those capital O's there?" As I scrolled back, he said, "Oh, it's a mouse! I'd vote for that one!"
By the way, I did actually forget to include your story in my short-short list; I guess I was trying to make it shorter, because it was really seven.
