Discussion 75 Word Challenge -- MARCH

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Hm. It wants to be about 150 words. I've mercilessly trimmed it down to 72 (by Word counter, 73 for me as I'm going to take one hyphenated unit as two words) but most of the uncan* seems to have gone with the lost ones. I wonder if I can choose the right two to put it back…

*If you grease, something. it becomes greasy. If you slop it, you're considered sloppy. So, adding uncan to something…
 
Thanks for the review, Karn, much appreciated. It was agony deciding which of my four completely-written-out-and-75-worded ideas to enter. But it wasn't really my choice - fate had a plan, and I wasn't going to get in its way.
 
Reiver 33 – This catches the theme perfectly, where else in a world where magic is commonplace would you find a business such as this, but there is more to the story, of course. Possible assignation/murder from an alternate version of yourself – and it happens more than once a week? You could get a full novel out of that idea!

PM – What I liked about this one was the double, perfectly executed mislead. When you start to read the story you cannot help but think of a husband and his philandering ways, but the rug is pulled out when we realise that he might not be human and the nightly excursions might be werewolf orientated. Bravo, she’s going to take matters in to her own hands and save the day. But then we get the second twist and realise he is a step ahead of her...

DEO – An excellent discourse on the juxtaposition between fantasy and reality. When one reads about a place of mystical learning it is easy to see that it might be a wonderful life. Of course practical reality often has all the dark bits fully intact that are skimped on or dropped completely. Here the magical becomes horrendous, made all the more real, warts, hogs and all.

Southron Sword – High stakes gambling in the world of the arcane. Another facet of life in a magical world, and what a good way to tell it. In a game where all kinds of tricks and talents can be utilised, then why not magical talent? Of course not sure whether the player should have beaten such an important figure, but then that’s all part of the fun...

Alchemist – A story that from the outset seems so obvious and straightforward that you fall right into the trap of just knowing how it is going to end, even while something in your head cries out that it is too obvious... and then with one word the whole thing is turned on its head in the last line. From mundane to genius. A real top notch story.

Glen – One to stretch the old synapses and fun to boot. I’m not sure whether I fully comprehend the tale, but I enjoyed what I got from it – two different philosophies arguing over the story, and how it should be presented, leaving no room for the actual story or indeed the man who should be writing it. Clever.

Nixie – Other than this being another damn fine story I found it rather touching as well. IN a place that exists only to help the homeless the idea that funding can come to an end is all too real. But they mystical twist of a magic stewpot that never empties is a positive interpretation that magic can sometimes help, and does not need to have a sting in the tale. Loved it. (and the stew).
 
Esfires: From the unknown comes the...well, the unknown. A new entrant here tonight, yet with a quality piece that can certainly plant doubts of a peaceful afterlife into the minds of those who read it. The soul in question clearly believed themselves to be destined for the light, only to find themselves in a personal Hell. It reminds me strangely of The Raven, in atmosphere and narrator's emotional state. If one were to continue this poem, you could perhaps torture him through eternity with a time loop.


Thanks for the review, Karn. It's always nice to have someone pay attention to your work, especially for a new member. Honestly, that piece ended up being a lot darker than I thought it would be. Most of my work tends to be more uplifting, forgiveness and redemption type stuff. I don't really have a clue where this piece came from.
 
Thanks for the reviews, Karn and Perp. Sometimes, I don't know how you do it.
 
I have nothing, notta, not even a nuance. This theme and genre might well prove the undoing of a streak I was quite proud of. Especially since I'm much less than a novice writer.
 
I have nothing, notta, not even a nuance. This theme and genre might well prove the undoing of a streak I was quite proud of. Especially since I'm much less than a novice writer.
I have faith in you, Parson.;) A poor attempt at humour, but also true.

I would have thought this genre would be right up your street: strange, perhaps inexplicable, events occurring in a relatively real world setting; events perhaps beyond normal comprehension.

You've got plenty of time yet, though.
 
Starbeast: Clowns. Why'd there have to be clowns?

Why not?

I never understood those who don't like clowns. Bad experiance as children with them perhaps? They look creepy because they wear paint on their faces and wear colorful clothes? Horror movies? Coulrophobia?

When I was growing up, clowns and puppets filled kid shows. In North America BOZO the clown was popular throughout the country with his tv show, I watched Bozo from when I was a little kid till I was in my teens. The show was live and bloopers abound, sets sometimes fell over, props wouldn't work and adlibs made everyone laugh. There was a magic performing clown called Whizzo, and Bozo would always make him laugh with his quick wit (Bozo was great at that).

The voice actor who speaks for Krusty the clown from the SIMPSONS tv cartoon show based his vocal talant after Bozo's (Bob Bell from Chicago) rough sounding voice.

Ah well, I'm probably in a very small minority group who still like clown humor.

Don't worry folks, my March entry will be my last clown story.
 
Hoops – a story that is quite horrific if you look at it from one angle, miraculous from another. I try to see it from the second, someone rebuilding a beloved toy or such, but I fear there is more a Frankenstein vibe going on, and the omission of one little bit might well be a terminal mistake for the creator – unless he can just reach a little further.

Aun – A world where magic is common place would really change the way things work, and having magic users working in hospitals seems a rather perfect fit. But here it seems that the necromancers et al, are working against the medical staff, bulling the person into death... or perhaps there is more going on than we realise. All the same quite a creepy feel to the end of the tale.

Juelz4sure – I’m not sure if I am reading this in the way that Juelz intended it, but I just love the synchronicity of the piece and I am rather partial to my version of events! Some form of immortal figure, claiming those that deserve death, until he at last reaches someone who does the same, perhaps even a replacement, as he is judged and fails, just as so many did before him.

Stormcrow – A truly clever story that sees (I think) an alternate war fought by mystical creatures, juxtaposed onto ‘real life’ situation. Very clever as the way it is presented feels just right, from the references to the fall from the sky, to the final resting place to the beetles waiting to dismember. Excellent.

Vertigo – A total inversion of the norm where the mystical masters bicker and argue about what makes the world work, and then crazy belief that somewhere there might be a world that is held together by science. Now this is true fiction.... or is it the start of the end of the world?

Hope – How strange? And to start with I thought we were going to have a hellish opus conducted by a large rock singer. (which reminds me IO have not listened to that in ages?). Instead we have an unsettling tale of a disgruntled committee representing the community of a fridge taking things into their own hands. If I knew the refrigerator had life like that inside it, and was left a message in sauce on the door it get the best clean of its life. Which reminds me...

r j dando – As with so many of the stories there is much left unsaid, and rather than underselling the story it opens the imagination, and this is one such story. On the face of it we have someone making a deal with another, but we are not told what, only what she will lose. And that is the stroke of genius it allows our thoughts to run wild with just who it is in the hospital and what is so precious that they are prepared to sacrifice one of the happiest days of their life. For just an hour.

MemoryTale – Another story that is open to interpretation, I like to think that Bob is someone who is a baseline normal person, in a world where everyone else is more than normal. Obviously it makes him a target for ridicule and teasing, he does not fit in and it just makes him different. A clever take on the theme, well executed.
 
Perp Man – Thank You for such a positive and insightful review, I've no idea how you’re able to produce these reviews and avoid any need for ‘spoiler alerts’!
Delighted that the main story elements came across for you, and that the parallelism worked!
 
Why not?

I never understood those who don't like clowns. Bad experiance as children with them perhaps? They look creepy because they wear paint on their faces and wear colorful clothes? Horror movies? Coulrophobia?


Blame it on Stephen King and Pennywise. :p



And a side note, I'll see what I can do for the next batch of comments, but I've come down with a cold and I don't feel so well right now, so, things may have to wait a while...
 
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