Discussion -- 300 Word Challenge #5

[RJM Corbet]

RJM CORBETT: The first paragraph is beautifully described, and a brilliant action scene.

Thanks Springs!

To me, the first paragraph is where it's at, with this 300 word one.
Then the second paragraph, etc.

Was just for fun. Doubt it's in competition with the good stuff.

Then, a few days after posting, I came up with a real winner but, oh well ...

 

[Perpetual Man]

Thanks for the comments Springs.

I actually miss doing them (on both this and the 75 word challenge) and they certainly help me make a decision when it comes to the voting.

After Zachary's first night at home I can't see myself being ready to do them again next month, but with any luck I'll be back in the routine by the time the next 300 worder comes around.

Now back to bed.

 

[alchemist]

ALCHEMIST: Where's my rubber suit ....

Being fashioned by the rubber vats of a thousand elves...

(and ty very much for the review)

 

[Warren_Paul]

WP: a really nice first poem with a hauntingly evocative first and last line

Thanks for the review, Springs.

 

[allmywires]

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ALL MY WIRES: this started off very Tolkien-esque and then turned to a quiet horror. And then a double ow. Excellent.

ty very much, Springs Tolkien-esque, wow!

 

[Abernovo]

Thank you for your kind words of review, Springs.

 

[Glen]

I've said it twice now...

...and thank you twice over.

 

[Vertigo]

Thanks Springs! Much appreciated. But axes? Not sure where they came from.

 

[David Evil Overlord]

DEO: Oh, no, what a moment. very original, as ever, and evocative.

Thank you, Springs.

I won't say any more until voting is done.

 

[Jo Zebedee]

Gah; hammers. Sorry, Vertigo. It was late and I had about eight pages of notes and a not fully functioning brain.

 

[Vertigo]

No worries, I figured as much and was only teasing!

 

[Mouse]

'Beautifully written.' I'll take that any day. Ta very muchly indeed, springs!

 

[Gary Compton]

The fact you want to take me to court for writing a story is very disappointing Springs even if you did laugh at it.

See you in in front of the Judge

 

[Glitch]

GLITCH: eerie, stays with me this one, with a lot of layers.

Thanks springs.

 

[chrispenycate]

Thanks Springs! Much appreciated. But axes? Not sure where they came from.

Doubtless the plural of "axis", from the two dimensions of time you require to make the story function not what you were intending to make kindling with, at all, at all.

 

[StilLearning]

Thank you Springs, very much: 'It will stay with me'.....thats 100% mission success for me.

 

[crystal haven]

Thank you, Springs.

 

[Arkose]

Thank you springs for the comments. I did put a good amount of time in researching my story. I just need to have my writing and grammar up-too-par. I did come up with the story in an interesting way, and I think after the voting is done, I will start a thread to see how everyone else came up with theirs.

 

[Vertigo]

Doubtless the plural of "axis", from the two dimensions of time you require to make the story function not what you were intending to make kindling with, at all, at all.

I'll have to come back to that one after the voting

 

[chrispenycate]

OK. It's vastly shorter than it could have been, but adding anything felt like padding, so I've posted. Now to get back to the voting on the 75…