DISCUSSION THREAD -- September 75 Word Challenge

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The tune for my filk song was "At the hop". To quote "The song was released in the fall of 1957, and reached number one on the US charts on January 6, 1958, thus becoming one of the top-selling singles of 1958. "At the Hop" also hit number one on the R&B Best Sellers list.
The song became more prominent after it was performed by rock and roll revival act Sha Na Na at the 1969 Woodstock Festival and featured in the 1973 coming-of-age teen drama American Graffiti.


Ah, well, not much of a market for filk, I see
Cutting a poem down to size is a bit like sawing up a piece of furniture, with the intention of making the bits into different furniture. Shortening a song, though, is just a question of deciding which verses not to sing. I did this one from memory, and only checked against the original "At the hop" (by Danny and the Juniors) after managing the seventy five word limit, only to discover the last line in the chorus had been added in a later version. I think I'll go down to the bouée and perform the complete version; this was intended to be sung not read as a poem.


Here's the straight story I wrote – well, the one that could be cut down, the other I might blog.

"A leaper, definitely carnivorous," said the palaeontology professor, at the holographic scanner screen, "but too much skin for the skeleton. These flaps – almost wings."
"Perhaps it inflated them?" His obligatory beautiful daughter, glancing at his handsome assistant who agreed:- "Yes, many reptiles inflate portions. Greater jumping range, perhaps?"
"Marsh gas or hydrogen- lighter than air."
"I suppose it burnt it to come down. That would explain the artefact."
A partially melted shield, embossed "Georgius fecit".
 
Congratulations, Paranoid Marvin and FeedMeTV for being tied for first place. Wow!

This was unexpected and exciting. :)
 
Luiglin, that's a great story -- you already made my shortlist, but that one wouldn't have fallen off, either!
 
Cheers Dusty. It was going to be the one I posted until I came up with the "day of the evolution" last line and had to back write a story to use that.

I had real trouble getting writing anything near funny this month with it being a requirement compared to previous months where humour came really easy. Still fell short of the shopping trolley part though ... maybe next month :)
 
For anyone who did not get it, mine was an attempt to do something really different and address the issue of missing 'hidden messages' in the stories of late!. With the task I set myself I did not really expect something that funny, just did my best and this was the result - the fact that I got two mentions was a massive and pleasant surprise for me.

I initially tried to do the thing colour coded letter by letter, but the number of colour changes went down like a lead model of the Titanic. Instead if you take each coloured section and take the first letter (and sometimes second letter - I had to cheat a little), you will find a few words may just come to light. :)

The years ran nonsensically surging amid undulating rivulets.

United souls rebounded existentially
, trying, reaching in certain rapturous attainment to perceive something of tomorrow.

Omnivoropteryx gasped, “Oh, so all us reptiles ultimately smashed
by a meteor!
“But in response a perfectly terrible other race
will ascend.”

Diplodocus howled unrestrained, “Really? So terrible! I am
vexed! Look closely it resists analysis! Pigeonhole this outlandish replacement.

Shopping Trolley enigmatically gave only stillness. Simply an unmoving reflection. Unborn steel.


Tyrannosaurus Rex
Triceratops
Otogosaurus
Bambiraptor
Wadhurstia
Velociraptor
Stegosaurus

There is a missing dinosaur that was involved in this endeavour, and is probably as much part of the story as any of the written words, and that would be the infamous and intellectual reptiel the Thesaurus.
 
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I saw that, Perp, though I have to admit I was flummoxed by Bambiraptor and Wadhurstia. I bow to your superior knowledge of dinosaurs. :)

The amazing thing is that not only did you sneak the (some not so) little reptiles in, but the entry worked well.
 
Don't feel foolish, MT. I only saw it for the first time after someone commented on Perp's hidden message in this thread. I went back and looked again and kicked myself. Hopefully (one can hope ;)) I would have picked up on it later though, as I always read through them two or three times before voting. I'm going to keep telling myself that. :D
 
I didn't spot that either. I went for a more obvious Father Ted character names in mine which strangely seemed to fit. If I had thought better I would have gone for the more oblique names of those in a new sitcom in the UK on Sky called Trollied. Doh!
 
Thanks PM.

I think it is a safe bet that no matter what the subject is I'm writing something straightforward. This one hurt my brain.

Which leads me to my original entry type thing...

My main idea involved a cyborg dinosaur mercenary on a shopping expedition for cornflakes.
 
Okay, I'll join in and explain mine.

I can't really write aliens, but when I do, I try to make them as ignorant about humans and earth as possible. Mainly because I always see aliens as completely benevolent or hell-bent on destroying. Cosmic stupidity is just something that appeals to me.

Blame this quote:

"Some scientists claim that hydrogen, because it is so plentiful, is the basic building block of the universe. I dispute that. I say there is more stupidity than hydrogen, and that is the basic building block of the universe." - Frank Zappa
 
There is a missing dinosaur that was involved in this endeavour, and is probably as much part of the story as any of the written words, and that would be the infamous and intellectual reptiel the Thesaurus.


Arrrrrgh! Why didn't I think of THAT for a dinosaur story? That would have been classic!

I must admit that I missed several of your hidden ones, by virtue of never having heard of them. I found several, as well, because the word patterns were odd and I had to look around and figure out why.
 
First off thank you to chrispy for the vote! That really made my day, especially when I know you are a stickler for the spag test, the theme test and the genre test, so I am really very happy!

Secondly, here I was logging on after a busy weekend to see who won and found a tie break! Well as FMTV had my original vote I voted the same again. (I just loved how he was dangling his claws and sulking)
 
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