DISCUSSION -- December 2014 75 Word Writing Challenge

Seasons greetings to one and all of all faiths! Tis another end of the year, and our final 75 for this year is brought to us by our very own, story-winning, Chrons member...PHYREBRAT. Treating us with....

A Hardboiled Festive Season Noir

Robert Mackay - We're started off with a jolly offering starring, Mr Klaus, as a known traffic offender. This red-suited menace was finally apprehended, and brought up on charges that will have him spending the holidays in prison, getting tattoos and...ah, other things. Nicely written sir.

Willwallace - What-ho! A Sherlock Holmes tale! This story is slick humored and sprinkled with candied goodness. I always enjoy the classic Holmes and Dr Watson characters popping up in the challenges. I'd give you a cookie for this story, but ol' Saint Nick ate them all.

Holland - Terrific science fiction entry that has Santa in big trouble for illegally skipping around Earth using fantastic technology. This fine entry was given a cool title, that took me many tries to pronounce it correctly. After unting my knotted tongue, I soaked it for hours in eggnog.

Ashleyne B. Watts - Whoa! I finish reading three funny tales that had me filled with playful glee. Then, WHAM-MO! I'm hit with a gory, blood-drenched horror tale that knocked the icicles off my house. Tremendously graphic, but diabolically delicious offering that stunned me.

Juliana - I thought my job was tough. I couldn't even begin to imagine the chore of going over a monstrous list of people asking for X-Mas presents. An overwhelming job, presented darkly in this incredbily wonderful tale that insures there'll be no lumps coal for the writer.

Remedy - Get your trench coat on and follow the creator of this noir galore story to the scene of the twisted frozen crime. I enjoyed the classic touch of grim narration which highlighted this offering that unfolds like a detective drama, in paperback form. Good stuff.

Springs - Heh heh. I've listened to people who tell me stories about themselves, when they were kids, and their parents threatening to cancel Christmas if they didn't behave. You have captured the pure essence of that in this holiday treat. Marvelous, simply marvelous.

Glen - Very cool noir story, and very dark chocolate covered, but bitter sweetened candied offering that illustrates quite well the grim side of the holidays. Stark images filled my mind and gave me uncomfortable feelings of gloom. Well done sir. You deserve a nightcap too.

Teresa Edgerton - Like a classic gritty, pulp magazine from the past, comes this excellently written story that holds our attention as the narrator of the tale describes his astonishing encounter with an Angel. High marks for your heavenly entry.

Farntfar -The spirit of the holidays touches the heart of an individual who wants to bring joy into a poor unfortunate's life with a Christmas dinner. Such a sweet tale that warms the soul. It reminds us that not everyone has a home, and there are people out there, who do care enough to help the needy.
 
It would indeed be a challenge. I have no experience with either Hardboiled or Noir whatsoever. Not my time period, I suppose. (To be honest, I always found that particular time period-around Prohibition/Depression and coming out to be extremely boring.)

You better bl**dy enter Karn, seeing as I chose this over horror, and if you know what my initial idea for genre was... oy... you can thank the mods for steering me clear of that one ;)

Now, if you haven't got time or inclination to read any noir, just watch Bogart and Bacall in The Big Sleep... even if you don't like the 40s, I defy you to find those electrifying performances boring :D

And come on... who can resist a genre whose favourite curse word is 'Nuts!' ;)

pH
 
I love them 1940's films too. I always love the way people spoke, colorfully, without swearing.
 
Thanks for the review Starbeast.
I don't really feel I have succeeded with an Xmas tale until I have evoked "uncomfortable feelings of gloom".
Right, off to confirm to release the hounds on the carol-singers.
 
Thanks for the review, Starbeast!

I think I am picking up most of the references hidden or not-so-hidden in the stories this time (like farntfar's modernization of a certain Christmas carol).
 
HA! Brilliant, reiver33 ;):D

Thank you for the review SB. Great stuff.
 
Thanks for the review Starbeast.
I don't really feel I have succeeded with an Xmas tale until I have evoked "uncomfortable feelings of gloom".
Right, off to confirm to release the hounds on the carol-singers.

Heh heh. You're welcome Glen. Ahh, does my heart good to see hounds munching on carolers.

Fab you, Beasty. Thank you! Marvellous works for me!

You're very welcome Springs.

Thanks for the review, Starbeast!

I think I am picking up most of the references hidden or not-so-hidden in the stories this time (like farntfar's modernization of a certain Christmas carol).

You're welcome Teresa. I highly agree, a lot can be said in a few words. Try your hand at reviewing.

HA! Brilliant, reiver33 ;):D

Thank you for the review SB. Great stuff.

You're immensely welcome Remedy.




A Hardboiled Festive Season Noir
(part two)

Talysia - Nicely done. You have taken the classic song, Twelve Days of Christmas, and turned it into a crime story. Check the pear tree and dust everybody for fingerprints. Then take everyone's statement as to their whereabouts on December 2nd, at 12:50 pm (CMT).

Ratsy - Ho, ho, ho my goodness. This is quite a shocking holiday nightmare you've illustrated here. I almost expected the ending to find Santa brought down by a hail of bullets. I'll warm up some hot chocolate for you on an awesome entry, then warm up an electric chair for Psycho Santa.

Alex The G and T - Entertaining as a late night, black and white detective movie. I enjoyed the 1940's stytled narration which dazzles the mind with colorful imagery. You left me wanting more, and I want to know what happens next.

Cat's Cradle - Such a bitter/sweet story that broke my heart, slammed it against the wall, then you made the terrible drama go away, all within a few words. Sheer excellence. Wow. I feel emotionally drained. I need a tissue. (HONK HONK)

Kerrybuchanan - The Force is definately strong with you. Yoda would be proud of you, but currently he's a ghost scaring me in the basement. I was taken far far away with this galactic poem, that was jam-packed with Jedi goodness. "Son of Sebulba". Heh heh. That's funny.

SciFine - Firstly, nice to meet you. And second, you've duplicated exactly the anger of a newcomer to the northern states of America, when they experiance winter here. I still hear people talk like that today, even from southerners who moved north. Spectacularly written.

Bowler1 - Oh man. I'm getting a lump of coal this year, for laughing at this amusing tradgic tale of Santa being arrested. Now I have these awful images in my mind of each reindeer being blasted. Comet (BANG). Vixon (BANG). Rudolph (BANG). Thanks for the memories.

Reiver33 - Chrons site. Night. Enjoying another fine hardboiled festive story that begins with, Chicago. Winter. I love it. Cause I'm near it. And I really enjoyed your hard edged tale, fierce and fueled with fire. Well done sir. "Death riding shotgun". I like that.
 
A Hardboiled Festive Season Noir
(part three)
Victoria Silverwolf - Oh my word Victoria. You have written an outstanding piece of drama that grabbed me by the heart and made me shed a tear. Beautifully crafted holiday entry that truely choked me up. You're amazing.





Thank you very much, Starbeast! Lovely review. :)

You're very welcome Juliana. I'm just overwhelmed with all of the dark tales. Well, noir is noir.
 
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Robert Mackay -- Through the use of a realistic style, the author allows us a subtle glimpse of the miraculous.

willwallace -- This merry pastiche is sure to tickle any Baker Street Irregular.

holland -- The language of advanced technology casts an old legend in an new light in this imaginative tale.

Ashleyne. B. Watts -- With the talents of an artist of the macabre, the author offers the reader a unique taste of Grand Guignol.

Juliana -- The author captures the style of the giants of Black Mask and applies it with a wink.

Remedy -- With a sure touch for the telling detail, the author creates a new myth to mesmerize the reader.

springs -- A creative approach to the challenges of parenting is offered in this nostalgic account.

Glen -- A richly realized character is created in this stylish slice of life.

Teresa Edgerton -- The author creates an effective urban fantasy with a powerful emotional effect.

farntfar -- With wisdom and compassion, the author shows us the importance of simple humanity.

Talysia -- Elements from a familiar ballad are combined in new ways in this clever story.

ratsy -- A striking new view of an old legend is presented in this highly original creation.

Alex The G and T -- The narrator's voice is perfectly captured in this droll parody.

Starbeast -- An unexpected twist blends two fictional characters into a wholly new creation.

Cat's Cradle -- In a few words, the author creates a profound work of wrong, regret, and redemption.

Kerrybuchanan -- Popular culture is teasingly twisted to result in much amusement in this outrageous offering.

SciFine -- The eternal struggle of humanity against the elements is sharply depicted in miniature in this tale.

Bowler1 -- Dark humor fills this wild revision of a classic legend.

reiver33 -- A haunting new character is created in this moody story.



 
You better bl**dy enter Karn, seeing as I chose this over horror, and if you know what my initial idea for genre was... oy... you can thank the mods for steering me clear of that one ;)

Now, if you haven't got time or inclination to read any noir, just watch Bogart and Bacall in The Big Sleep... even if you don't like the 40s, I defy you to find those electrifying performances boring :D

And come on... who can resist a genre whose favourite curse word is 'Nuts!' ;)

pH



Yes, I do find the era boring. Very boring.


And personally I would have far preferred horror. I'm on a semi-horror kick for entertainment right now, and I'm far more experienced with it.
 
How nice, Christmas comes a little early with these wonderful reviews from Starbeast and Victoria! Thank you both for the very kind words! I actually feel kinda-sorta like a writer when I read your amazing reviews! :)

Starbeast, I love the twist at the end of your own story, well done! (I was sooo jealous that you thought to use Christmas red for your title, too...wonderful touch!) And Victoria, I just read your story..very-very powerful, and very gritty. Killer last line!
 
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You folks wear trilbies. Over here it would be a fedora.

And very dashing they always looked, too.

Edit -- Karn and I cross-posted.
 

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