Quality of the translation (1400 words)

[Ray McCarthy]

In that context, yes.
Really I'm sceptical you can't do better than your Translator. The Translator does seem like a "technical writer" not a Fiction writer.

 

[Wanderlog]

Ray,

Thanks, I'll keep it in mind. I use this word all the time and can't see anything strange in it (so no, I'm not better than my translator ).

 

[Ray McCarthy]

Father asked perplexedly - ... it doesn't read very smoothly in a text. ... try rewriting it as "Father asked, looking perplexed" or "Father asked, sounding surprised".

perplexedly is a word. But as BrisGirl says, it doesn't quite work. It's also rare. I can't remember seeing it. You only use a rare word if a more common one doesn't suit (otherwise it seems pretentious) or if it's the way an odd character would talk or in a specific setting (perhaps Regency or Shakespearian era historical story).

I'm bad at expressing myself and explaining writing, but I'm happy that BrisGirl has highlighted it clearly.

 

[Wanderlog]

Ray,

Thank you for the clarification.

 

[Wanderlog]

Phew. It took a loot of time. It took MUCH longer and much more efforts and money than I anticipated. However, the book translation is fully finished at last.

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