DISCUSSION -- MAY 2017 75-word Writing Challenge

@Shyrka

I didn't get that from your story. I went somewhere completely different.

*Questions where modern times forces brain to jump to*(n)

If I was a better reader, knowing what you intended the story to be, I think you would have snagged my vote and won before any tie-break.

I'm not sure if that's guna make you feel better or worse though:unsure::confused:

Congrats to both you and TDZ though.
 
Thank you, thank you, everyone, for the kind words!

I would have thought TJ was the Queen of the Tie-breakers, so that's a pleasant surprise! I was shocked to see that it had been three years since the last one, though -- I knew time was flying and it had been a while, but wow. :eek:

Now that it's too late and nobody can take their votes back, I'll explain something that may not have been obvious to everyone in my story. Last week, just before the end of the Challenge (read: the day I write my stories), the very last Ringling Bros and Barnum & Bailey circus was performed, after they'd run for nearly 150 years. There was a lot of sentiment floating around, on both sides of a divide. Since I have two friends from childhood, sisters, who grew up to spend years working for that particular circus, and I know that they are people who would burn the place to the ground if there was any abuse of animals there, I am confident that RBB&B did not treat their animals badly -- but I know also that there are plenty of circuses, petting zoos, and such who do. Anyway, my story addressed some of the reasons people have always given for having displays of animals, from the opposite angle, and a tragic consequence. I wasn't sure if the circus thing would be evident across the pond, but it seems to have stood on its own anyway. :)
 
LittleStar said:
@Shyrka

I didn't get that from your story. I went somewhere completely different.

*Questions where modern times forces brain to jump to*(n)
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Now I'm properly intrigued. I don't suppose you could give me any further details? PM would be fine if you'd rather not spam folks here.

LittleStar said:
@Shyrka
If I was a better reader, knowing what you intended the story to be, I think you would have snagged my vote and won before any tie-break.

I'm not sure if that's guna make you feel better or worse though:unsure::confused:
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There's no such thing as being a 'better reader', in my opinion, at least not in this case. If you didn't understand the story as I intended, that's all on me - it's my job to make you understand. That's why feedback like this is so vital for me. Thank you!

As to whether it makes me feel better or worse, it's honestly better. I'd rather think I had a good story that could have been told more clearly than a mediocre story told with perfect clarity! Clarity I can work on.
 
congratulations @TheDustyZebra and commiserations @Shyrka . both great stories

here's my story that didn't make it in. still in draft form and title-less as when i went back to polish it i realised i had missed the boat.

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It’s dark.

Then, it’s light. A glow bug crawls slowly across broken concrete.

I can still hear the fighting, way above. Our thumping guns, the snap and crackle of the greenies' magick. They won't get to me down here.

The bug crawls down a hole, taking its light with it.

It’s cold. And getting colder. I can't move my legs. Mum must be looking for me. She won't get to me either.

It’s dark.
 
chrispenycate said:
OK. My list was:- Cathbad, LittleStar, Shyrka, Teresa Edgerton, The Judge and TheDustyZebra, finally voting for Shyrka.

With HazelRah, Maieius, reiver33, RJM Corbet and Ursa major who hadn't yet voted when I wrote this, but Ensign Shah, farntfar, HareBrain, HoopyFrood and Wruter all voted without having submitted anything to vote for - many thanks.

And thanks for the mentions Kerrybuchanan, Shyrka, Talysia and Vaz, and more so dannymcg, for the vote (he's newish so hasn't learned yet)
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Thank you! And sorry for the late response, Crispin :)
 
Shyrka said:
Now I'm properly intrigued. I don't suppose you could give me any further details? PM would be fine if you'd rather not spam folks here.
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Nothing so sordid that it needs a PM I don't think(n):confused:

I read as he was a terrorist and the train was about to be bombed. Hence the 'modern times' thing. I guess i was stuck on that, as the child's ticket part didn't click until your post here:whistle:

But as I said, fantastic story, now that I'm reading your version instead of mine:ROFLMAO: It's pretty much exactly the sort of thing i look for in these challenges when voting, (and what i try to write) something with real heart. (y)
 
Great job to the two tiebreakers! Dusty, can you stop winning now please?
 
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