Discussion -- 75 Word Challenge -- APRIL

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Thanks Warren. It wasn't half as much fun as the 300 worder is going to be ;)
 
Mouse when I read that I went: 'cooool!'. Alchemist you put a lump in my throat.
Hope, thank you for the feedback and kind words! I'm having fun just sitting back and reading all these :)
 
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Karn Maeshalanadae said:
Starbeast:

I have to say here and now-Smith is a freaking wuss. But I suppose not everyone can deal with being left alone on a desolate planet. :D
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Doctor Zachary Smith is childish and self-centered, but through the 1960's TV series (Lost in Space - Jonathan Harris) he began to feel the closeness of family love and understanding that you don't have to lie and cheat to get what you want.

As for being kicked out of the group, well, he must have done something very bad against the Robinsons. It wouldn't be the first time he's been told to leave.

hopewrites said:
Starbeast:

Somehow I get the feeling that Smith is a plant, and the promise he holds is not the one he is obviously making. I see it running in two directions, ether he will come to know and love the people he serves on whatever war-ravaged planet he is on and complete the betrayal circle by turning his back on those who left him there. Or he will remain true to his purpose and spend the rest of his days smuggling information back to the home he truly loves. But that could just be me.

I liked the use of a desperate situation to show Smiths true colors. He is a survivalist what ever else he may be, and that he would so glibly offer to change his stripes says more to me about his character than that he was unceremoniously dumped in someone else’s lap. That the Professor accepts him makes me wonder if this captive was not abandoned after all, but a price paid by treacherous hands.
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Wow, excellent review, thanks.

When I look at Dr Smith through Professor John Robinson's eyes, I see Zach as a weak and foolish person who hasn't had anyone to guide him into the light of morality. The doctor has been around to many sinister types, and he believes everyone has a dark side.

When I was a kid, and I saw how understanding, forgiving and kind-hearted the character Professor John Robinson was, I would think to myself that humankind has a chance to show it's best qualities to people from other worlds and dimensions. "I want to be just like him.", my six year old self would say. :)


Perpetual Man, are you going to review us this time around, or take a break?
 
Ok I've gone early and posted my story, hoping to do better this time ;)


Had a quick read through of the others. Good quality as always.
 
2 days into the month and 18 stories already, the muse has been kind this month.


Interesting story, Glitch. Much more depth to it than there appears at first glance. That the narrator appears to be neither the sniper, or the girls, but some unidentified spectator, puts a whole different perspective on it.

The last line kept me intrigued, reading over and over, until I fully got the depth of the story and the desires of the narrator.


Good work.
 
Dropped mine in. Not sure about this one. Had to chose between the posted entry and two other safer ones. Tried to be a touch different. Not sure if it worked. Now to take a look at the 300 one :)
 
Mine is in. I'm not sure myself if it is tragedy or a sick joke. Up to the reader, I guess.
 
So hard, I'm not a procrastinator, yet I don't want to post just quite yet... but I keep looking at the post reply button. :eek: :rolleyes:

I think my entry might be ready, but have that little trickle of doubt that I might want to change something again.

*sigh*


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Mouse: I always knew that mouses were intelligent and clever and you've shown it here again. I got a chuckle out of this in the end because, despite what the narrator had done, and despite the undertones of contrition and guilt, the way you executed this is just the sort of hand-in-the-cookie-jar situation.


alchemist: So precise a date? Hmm. This is a dark tale indeed, none of the jaunty humor that Mouse had gone down. This felt like a real funeral here, and I find it rather ironic and coincidental that it followed Mouse's entry, which I think rather had an added impact on the reader's emotional state...;)


Glitch: Promises made, promises kept, promises broken. We all need a guardian angel from time to time, and it took a lot of courage from our "invisible knight" to defy the council's commands. Though I do have to wonder, just what had happened to them to make them wish for their humanity back...


Luiglin: I'm worried here. New entrant, but an entry from what can only be seen as a madman. I'm just assuming that the narrator is a madman, his "world" in his own imagination, based off the title. I picture his true surroundings to be padded walls and a steel door with bars...


High Eight: Heroism as a syndrome? This I must look into. :D But seriously, in the end it rather is a feel-good tale, seeing those with the power to help those in need actually doing so.


Warren Paul: Disturbing and humorous all at once. Kind of like Evil Dead in that respect. Though I must say, I wouldn't be willing to consume any more of that stew. And maybe the husband is lucky his wife's jaw came off?


Motion: Another new entrant, not to be confused with another Perpetual. This was...well, I do have to say I had a few choice words about the POV character of this one, the selfish git. :p :D You make a friend a promise like that then break his heart at the last possible second? For shame!


Stormfeather: A little rhyme at the start that explains the situation. It seems to hint at undertones, when combined with the rest of the story, that humanity seems to have gone mostly sterile? It's just one convoluted mess of good story. Now let's hope Craig can actually keep his promise and be the best father he can be. Lucky I caught you here at this point. :D
 
Karn Maeshalanadae said:
Warren Paul: Disturbing and humorous all at once. Kind of like Evil Dead in that respect. Though I must say, I wouldn't be willing to consume any more of that stew. And maybe the husband is lucky his wife's jaw came off?
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Thanks for the review, Karn.

I'm sure many men wish they were as lucky. ;)


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Karn Maeshalanadae said:
Luiglin: I'm worried here. New entrant, but an entry from what can only be seen as a madman. I'm just assuming that the narrator is a madman, his "world" in his own imagination, based off the title. I picture his true surroundings to be padded walls and a steel door with bars...
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Lol ... thanks for the feedback. I think maybe I was too subtle. Really needed 100 words to work the idea I had. I'll explain more when the comp has ended as it would feel like cheating to add more now. Cheers.
 
Starbeast said:
Perpetual Man, are you going to review us this time around, or take a break?
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Not this time SB. I did not want to start doing them and then find out I could;d not complete the whole month. It did not seem right to the later posters.

Probably going to be away from the comments for a couple of months, but we'll see how things go. Besides Karn and Hope are doing an excellent job.
 
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Now back to the Challenge...
 
Thanks Hope - I'm glad you got the personal side of it as well. Between yourself and Karn I think you just about have it. :)
 
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