Discussion -- 75 Word Challenge -- June

[The Judge]

Shortlist, TE, Moonbat, Hopewrites, Boneman, Cul, and would you Adam and Eve it the winner is TJ.

You must be psychic -- that was the title my partner told me to use!! Thanks for the vote!

Thanks for the mentions/shortlistings springs, Hex, PM and crystal haven.

 

[RcGrant]

And thank you very much, RcGrant, for voting for mine.

You're very welcome.

 

[Lilmizflashythang]

Thanks for the vote Glen, glad you liked the story.

 

[ratsy]

Thanks so much for the vote Crystal Haven! I cant wait to reread all the entries and cast my vote. Once again a lot of good ones to choose from.

 

[kaal]

OK, so re-read and the shortlist was: Boneman, Warren Paul, Appello, Azzagorn & (my vote) Grimbear.
Good reads.

 

[Phyrebrat]

My Shortlist

The quality of entries has always been strong. However, this month my shortlist would be stupidly long with nearly as many entries as there were in the contest. So, I have a short shortlist.

And this is it:

Springs - Mummy’s Boys. The story itself is great, and tidy, but this one has such a professional pace to it. The choice and pacing of the last 2 lines from the dialogue to it’s effect are songlike.

Boneman – The Observers. Quite a few funny stories in this month’s challenge and this was one of my favourites. Especially using the contraction of ‘jeez’ from ‘Jesus’. It reminded me of something Eddie Izzard might do in his set.

RcGrant – Eschatology. One of those occasions where I get the much-hoped-for visceral response where my belly feels like it contains a plummeting lift. Nasty and wonderful. I love the calmness of Maya and the allusion to the Earth Goddess in naming her so. This is in contrast with the (in my mind, at least) Judeo-Christian priest, whose actions can be seen as a metaphor to what the Church did to indigenous pagan beliefs. Well….I took it there. I love how we can squeeze so much out of someone else's work.

Kiffnyjean – The Caper. This just made me laugh out loud which is something I rarely do when I'm by myself. Also for some reason the gamboling Unicorn made me think of Alchemist’s ‘look at my pigtails twirl’ joke last month and that really made me start up again. Animals and humour have been a big feature of this month’s contest and whilst I'm against people anthropomorphising their pets, doing it in a fictional environment, as a story, and making them little b***ers really appealed to me.

And so to measure them for a winner... Well, to be honest, it was over after I had read The Caper. So that was where my vote went.

pH

 

[TacticalLoco]

Another hard month of really talented writing...

Short List for June

Honorable Mention
Luiglin - the funny one's are always the best

Hex - excellant, too real.

Still Learning - nice, didn't see that comming

Culhwch - To quote Yoda, "War not make one great."

hopewrites - a little less innocence can be a good thing

Runners up

Grimbear - Is it the soon to be lost innocence that we find so sad? Well written.

Starbeast - You are just evil, but in a good way.

Winner
Brev - maybe the truest, sadess portrait of the month

 

[Starbeast]

Short List
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MemoryTale - Scary futuristic tale.
Luiglin - Funny ending.
Arkose - Good lesson, never put computers in charge of humanity.
Hex - Nice reflection of humanities dark past.
Ratsy - That rotton kid.
Hopewrites - Those naughty fairies.
Highlander - I imagine, life is only a game.
Johnnyjet - Heh heh, classic discipline for misbehaving children.
Phyrebrat - Spooky, very spooky.
Boneman - Now I know how X-Mas began.
TacticalLoco - A living conscious planet, cool.
Reiver33 - Aliens shape humanity, great stuff.
Vertigo - Stunning last sentence, yikes!
Moonbat - Susie is a cool kid.
Chrispenycate - Please don't take my soul.
The Spurring Platty - I like talking animal tales, including meat loving sheep.
Mosaix - I hope the alien doesn't loose his shp in the card game.
Kiffinyjean - That naughty unicorn, getting away with murder.
StormFeather - I wouldn't be surprised if this is a true story.
TheDustyZebra - A galactic con man, great tale.
Azzagorn - Funny ending.
Parson - A serial killer from space, very cool.
Bob S. Sr - I like these "person out-of-time" stories, excellent.
The Judge - This story sounds familiar. I wonder how it will end?
Ursa Major - Great last line.​

Vote
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Paranoid Marvin - The Beginning of the End​

Your submission really grabbed my heart. You are definately a poet.​

 

[Vertigo]

Thank you for the mention Starbeast! Your specific comment has totally made my day

 

[RcGrant]

My Shortlist


RcGrant – Eschatology. One of those occasions where I get the much-hoped-for visceral response where my belly feels like it contains a plummeting lift. Nasty and wonderful. I love the calmness of Maya and the allusion to the Earth Goddess in naming her so. This is in contrast with the (in my mind, at least) Judeo-Christian priest, whose actions can be seen as a metaphor to what the Church did to indigenous pagan beliefs. Well….I took it there. I love how we can squeeze so much out of someone else's work.

Thank you very much for your comments, they are much appreciated. You aren't far off-base with your interpretation of the story either.

 

[Jo Zebedee]

Perp, Crystal and Phyrebat, thanks for the shortlistings.

Springs - Mummy’s Boys. The story itself is great, and tidy, but this one has such a professional pace to it. The choice and pacing of the last 2 lines from the dialogue to it’s effect are songlike.

Phyrebat, I'm skipping at this, thankyou! (quite frankly, I'm putting Alc's ponytails to shame, I have lovely purple ribbons and everything. )

 

[David Evil Overlord]

The following Chronners are found guilty of making my short(?)list by having too much writing talent:

Luiglin
Gary Compton
Crystal Haven
Hex
Teresa Edgerton
Hopewrites
Brev
Glen
HareBrain
Boneman
Aun Doorback
Starbeast
Moonbat
The Spurring Platty
Warren Paul
Perpetual Man
kiffinyjean
Stormfeather
kaal
TheDustyZebra
Azzagorn
Parson
Grimbear
The Judge
Culhwch

And the vote goes to Grimbear.

 

[hopewrites]

Oh dear, David, you've sentenced quite a few of us to the pen.

Thank you for the mentions, I plan on trying to vote tonight.

 

[Ursa major]

Oh dear, David, you've sentenced quite a few of us to the pen.

You don't have to go there: you're not sheep, you know.


And thanks for the short listing, Starbeast.

 

[Karn Maeshalanadae]

To be honest, I had a bit of a shout to DEO and Flashy, but my vote went to HW.


Ahh, ye go' me, serr. 'Tis no'ing but a wee plan t' have us in the PNW t' take overr!


That was terrible. But in all seriousness, I went for HW because the landscape she imbued upon us was just the poster picture of innocence and naivety, and her character was too smart to fall for it.



And I don't know about that, Ursa; I feel pretty sheepish around here most of the time.

 

[David Evil Overlord]

Thank you, Karn.

And writers should always be sentenced to the pen, Hope. For the pen is mightier than the PC. Or something like that, anyway.

 

[Appello]

I found it hard this month, so there's something new. My shortlist:

Luighlin - inflatable ingrid proved hard to forget
Hopewrites
Highlander - I liked the Sims reference and the casual off button
Hilarious Joke
The Judge
But in the end I went for Apello's Beggars, because I thought it was clever and a complete story.

Thanks for the vote! It really makes my day/week/month to know someone out there has enjoyed my writing.

Also thanks to Hex, Crystal Haven, and Kaal for the mentions.

 

[Parson]

Thanks to Hex, StarBeast, and David Evil Overlord for the short listings. I had a dickens of a time trying to think about innocence. (Not surprising for a Calvinist I guess! )

A little disappointed not to have had a review by Perp but I will savor the next one.

 

[kiffinyjean]

Just wanted to thank this group for being so awesome. I've never really tried any sort of creative writing and am just glowing from the few reviews. Thanks to my future mother in law Teresa Edgerton for encouraging me. What a fun challenge. Its so interesting reading other peoples stuff too.

 

[Perpetual Man]

Thanks to Hex, StarBeast, and David Evil Overlord for the short listings. I had a dickens of a time trying to think about innocence. (Not surprising for a Calvinist I guess! )

A little disappointed not to have had a review by Perp but I will savor the next one.

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