Discussion -- 75 Word Challenge -- July

[David Evil Overlord]

Aw, thanks stormcrow. My fiance does full contact midieval combat... so there are echoes of truth in it! Gambisons STINK!

Good. I've made a similar comment in my super hero WIP, and I'm glad a re-enactment of real life backs up my wild imaginings.

 

[crystal haven]

Thank you, Perpetual Man.

I always look forward to reading your comments on all the stories.

 

[Perpetual Man]

Thank you, Perpetual Man.

I always look forward to reading your comments on all the stories.

As always a pleasure Crystal, just wish I was on top of them at the moment!

 

[r_j_dando]

r j dando – who know just what problems could be caused by work evaluations eh? Pushing someone just a little bit more could lead them to taking the risks that they might not have been taking. But it is where those risks might lead that is the most interesting of all, by dispensing his own brand of justice are we seeing the first signs of darkness allowed into paradise.

Thanks Perp! Lovely reviews as always - really appreciate the time you take to give them all.

 

[allmywires]

Thank you for the comments Perp I've always found Lady Justice being blindfolded rather macabre, hopefully I did it justice in the challenge.

 

[Grimbear]

Thanks Perp! Lovely reviews as always - really appreciate the time you take to give them all.

I appreciate it too. Just thought I should say so.

 

[stormcrow]

HB! yo HB! You got me flippin'; got me trippin' on your story.
My head is spinnin', the words you wingin': fait accompli!
Your story's dope, I cannot cope, with the rhymin' y'bustin' linguistically.
A good tale innit, could even win it. Really neat, shows your street credibility.
Now how'm I gonna break this down? You gonna make me frown:
concentratin' on the ratin' when I should be creatin' my own 300 word entry!

 

[Bowler1]

On the money as ever, Perp. Irish myth and legend grows in the telling and you don't have to be too bright to guess where the telling occurs! Low hanging fruit for me!

Good posts again this month.

 

[Starbeast]

"I'm taking an awful risk Vader. This had better work." - Moff Tarkin

I read only a few stories, I rewrote my tale three times, and I reluctantly submitted my entry just now. I'm going to check the other stories while there's time.

I'll be back.

(moments later)

Whew, I'm safe.

Now I can read the stories and check out the chat in this discussion thread.

 

[Abernovo]

Great, Starbeast. Your entries never fail to make me smile.

 

[chrispenycate]

Finished my seventy- five word contribution, then was about to post it when I thought "Mythic? Me thick – that calls for oral tradition, rhythm."

So rewrote in verse. Unfortunately, had been recording "The prisoner of Chillon", and George Lord Byron had be a bit – flexible with his rhyme schemes, but at least I was more consistent in the meter than he…

 

[HareBrain]

Stormcrow old bean, I have no real idea what you're on about, but since the gist of the message obscured by your impenetrable dialect seems to amount to a measure of approval for my little entry, you have my warmest thanks.

 

[stormcrow]

You're welcome HB! I usually have little idea what I'm on about myself!

 

[Perpetual Man]

Vertigo - This could almost be a straightforward tale, those seeking the talents of a legendary character, but not recognising the truth when he is there before him. Or do they? There is nothing that actually says the man is the character, he could be... and there is the notion of justice, in saying they will stand for the kings justice, the old man passes his own judgement on the soldiers...

Juelz4sure – There are those that will deny even the gods for a reason if it is good enough, and what better reason is there than love? Of course the gods being just that, can find all kinds of exquisite punishment for those that would defy them, and repeating a given moment over and over again might be one of the most painful punishments around.

MT – Is it just me or is there more going on beneath the surface in this one? Are we breaking the third wall and reality bleeding into this excellent story. I do wonder just which judge is on trial, or is it more the definitive article? Celestial Fire or a face shaking slap? A wink to the knowing, a thoroughly entertaining entry.

Johnnyjet – I wonder whether even the hardest of hearts dare truly deny the existence of the Fey after this little story. Disbelief it seems is punishable by death. Of course it also seems that the fairies have changed a bit since the last time they were around. Of course there is more than one meaning for the word ‘fairy’ one a little unPC, but strangely works just as well...

Aun – Hmmm. For me the strongest part of this tale was the writing itself. I just loved the words used to get the story across, and when you are limited in a challenge of 75 words that is no mean feat. It conjured up an image of the crew and boat that I could almost see them dangling over the edge of the world. Of course the fact they were murderous and pushed further than they should have meant they were facing just desserts of their own making.

Abernovo – Another great story. How often do we see the big corporate entities crush the little fellows for next to nothing and then revel in the money they make from it all. Sometimes though you should be aware of what you are getting into, because you might be buying off more than you can chew. The name of the company might have been a clue, but it does not matter, the big guy got a little more than a bloody nose this time.

Jimness – I almost read this story in black and white, if that is possible, it just seemed to suit the tale being told. Patience sometimes is the greatest virtue of all and it can lead to peace of mind. It is what is not said here that really works so well. We don’t know what happened after the Raven alighted on the window, but the fact she got her justice says an awful lot, and leaves it up to the imagination to fill in the blanks.

Alchemist – one of the things that comes with being so far behind of on the comments, is you see references to stories as they come up and you don’t know what is being referred to. Such is the case here. I read the first line and could not help but smile as I caught up with what some of the others had mentioned. An incredible reworking of a children’s classic, that takes a modern legend and turns it into something a little less cuddly, a lot more classic, but as much fun as could be possible. Damn, now I can’t get that tune out of my head.

 

[Abernovo]

Thanks for your kind words, Perp.

 

[Perpetual Man]

My pleasure Abernovo

Glen – What isn’t there to like about this clever story? Taking the classic story of Prometheus and allowing the Gods and Titans to see their futures and just what is might take to preserve their names through the years. Shown in toms of popular entertainment it is easy to see just how the Titan is won over. The blase last line is just the icing on the cake.

Pyan – This tale taes us backto one of their most famous mythological tales, the seige ofTroy and the wooden horse. Here though it is an alternative tale, where the ruse is discovered and the consequences seem to be havibg an effectl throughout history. An example perhaps at just how much the now is defined by the past.

Kaufmannp – Something that starts off on the cosmic level and then imossiblym grows either bigger. Beyond reality three figures sit in judgement of mankind and find it wanting. What is exceptionally fascinating and well thought out is the fact that man is not judged on his own merits, it is the effect he has on those around him, if he, as a species, is capable of bringing down all others with him, perhaps it is best to remove him from the equation.

Sapheron – The sadness of truth runs through this story. The attempts to build a better world are so simple that they might just work, but of couurse even the best laid plans… It is such a small step for those who try to follow the teachings of a good man, to fighting to defend, then enforce them. What makes it even sadder is the fact that it is the truth.

Lilmizflashythang – Perhaps one of the more simple entries of the month, but one that catches the theme perfectly. Perhaps one of the strongest truths that there is, and I cannot think of a more profound sense of justice. In many ways it could well be a case of getting just what you deserve.

One_with_No_Name – When the Gods summon it is up to man to respond, facing down just whatever travails until they reach the feet of the gods. However the gods themselves can’t always be prepared for the answer they receive, when they demand of one forgiveness, perhaps he might see whatever slight he committed was in response to a greater injustice and is prepared to suffer endlessly in the name of Right.

Kiffinyjean – With all the epic stories of myth and legend it is so easy to forget that there is often more to the tales; those that take part behind the scenes as it were, those who make the heroes shine. Of course it is quite of then the case that they are overlooked by those they work for themselves that leads to a totally different kind of justice.

Stormcrow – A straightforward story that catches the theme and style perfectly. As those who profited from slavery find, there are things in the deep that may seem like legend, but are more than ready to arrive at the perfect moment to extract a greater justice.

Perp – Still suffering from lack of sleep, but at least he’s trying.


Ideal point for a quick break, but I'm catching up...

 

[alchemist]

Alchemist – one of the things that comes with being so far behind of on the comments, is you see references to stories as they come up and you don’t know what is being referred to. Such is the case here. I read the first line and could not help but smile as I caught up with what some of the others had mentioned. An incredible reworking of a children’s classic, that takes a modern legend and turns it into something a little less cuddly, a lot more classic, but as much fun as could be possible. Damn, now I can’t get that tune out of my head.

All part of my cunning plan....

Thanks Perp. I always look forward to your reviews.

 

[Bowler1]

Good effort, PM and a good catch up on your reviews. I don't know if it helps decide your voting, but it can help me when reaching a decision.

 

[MemoryTale]

Good effort, PM and a good catch up on your reviews. I don't know if it helps decide your voting, but it can help me when reaching a decision.

God knows I need all the help I can get when decision making. At the moment I have a very, very short list of stories that won't make my voting list.

Thanks for the kind words Perp, I don't really think I can confirm or deny anything you may or may not have seen without breaking a few unwritten rules

 

[Perpetual Man]

The reviews certainly do help with my voting, and I really found it a lot harder to vote those few months I stopped for baby reasons!

MT - That's one of the hardest things with the comments, making sure I don't overstep the rules - especially if I see something in a tale and think it is worthy of praise, or trying not to trigger a response in the writer who wants to confirm what I have said!

Of course sometimes I read something that is not there...